Mind babble...

Started by Fëanor43 pages

As a matter of fact it almost is, to a point. Although not heavily influenced by Yeats as I am of Keats...odd names they had back then. 🤨

part III has taken a turn to the left, and so now i've got redo the draft.

Keep it up honey, I love reading your work hug

Originally posted by Syren
Keep it up honey, I love reading your work hug
AWESOME!!!!😱

but am i still raw?!?! or medium rare? 😄 😛

An Ode To Love

Oh! To Love, a wondrous dream
Of dancing flowers by the stream
That play upon our eyes a glazed
On perfect form and lustrous face

What joy there is, for in our hearts
We cannot stand to ever part
To that which brings our most content
In loving arms, this night we’ve spent

To eyes of blue and rosy lips
Golden hair and luscious hips
Snow white skin, the loving smile
Playfully jest to stay a while

Most certainly I could endure
A life without, but this I’m sure
That love will stay and grow and grow
Crystal clean as driven snow

Oh! To Love, a wondrous dream
When wilting flowers by the stream
That play upon our dullened eyes
On aged form and mournful sighs

What joy there was when in our hearts
That love has died and so must part
To all those things, that was content
In dying arms, this night I spent

To eyes of grey and sagg’d lips
Wisp-ed hair and aged hips
Mottled skin, and yet the loving smile
Wistfully sneer, dare stay a while

Most certainly I won’t endure
A life of pain, of this I’m sure
That love will die and go and go
Piss-coloured now, the tainted snow

An Ode to Love

This Man, This woman

This man, this woman
They fell in love.
Their minds have gone insane.
For life has rolled beyond
Their dreams
Their life becomes mundane.

The Voyeur

Lay me down a flower bold.
Before the sun is grey and cold.
And touch my dreams of happenstance,
To risk it all for a chance.
A sight, a flicker,
Or an offhand view;
Of silent moans and sexy you:
Dirt-brown hair and hazel eyes.
On silkened sheets, oh me! Oh my!
I snigger at
The lovely thought
Of lovely mounds, so white so soft!
The fleeting moment will last you see
Until the moment I’ve spilled my seed.

Originally posted by Fëanor
[b]An Ode To Love

Oh! To Love, a wondrous dream
Of dancing flowers by the stream
That play upon our eyes a glazed
On perfect form and lustrous face

What joy there is, for in our hearts
We cannot stand to ever part
To that which brings our most content
In loving arms, this night we’ve spent

To eyes of blue and rosy lips
Golden hair and luscious hips
Snow white skin, the loving smile
Playfully jest to stay a while

Most certainly I could endure
A life without, but this I’m sure
That love will stay and grow and grow
Crystal clean as driven snow

Oh! To Love, a wondrous dream
When wilting flowers by the stream
That play upon our dullened eyes
On aged form and mournful sighs

What joy there was when in our hearts
That love has died and so must part
To all those things, that was content
In dying arms, this night I spent

To eyes of grey and sagg’d lips
Wisp-ed hair and aged hips
Mottled skin, and yet the loving smile
Wistfully sneer, dare stay a while

Most certainly I won’t endure
A life of pain, of this I’m sure
That love will die and go and go
Piss-coloured now, the tainted snow

An Ode to Love [/B]


oooo this ones really good love 😊

😄 thanks Aaaaamburr! 😛

Originally posted by Fëanor
😄 thanks Aaaaamburr! 😛

😂 😉

Originally posted by Coldfire
😂 😉
hehehe...😄

so you like?

Originally posted by Fëanor
hehehe...😄

so you like?


si si quiero 😊

ah...muchas gracias senorita que bonita. se hace bien mi corazon. 😄

Originally posted by Fëanor
ah...muchas gracias senorita que bonita. se hace bien mi corazon. 😄

#happy# De nada kisses

Originally posted by Fëanor
[b]An Ode To Love

Oh! To Love, a wondrous dream
Of dancing flowers by the stream
That play upon our eyes a glazed
On perfect form and lustrous face

What joy there is, for in our hearts
We cannot stand to ever part
To that which brings our most content
In loving arms, this night we’ve spent

To eyes of blue and rosy lips
Golden hair and luscious hips
Snow white skin, the loving smile
Playfully jest to stay a while

Most certainly I could endure
A life without, but this I’m sure
That love will stay and grow and grow
Crystal clean as driven snow

Oh! To Love, a wondrous dream
When wilting flowers by the stream
That play upon our dullened eyes
On aged form and mournful sighs

What joy there was when in our hearts
That love has died and so must part
To all those things, that was content
In dying arms, this night I spent

To eyes of grey and sagg’d lips
Wisp-ed hair and aged hips
Mottled skin, and yet the loving smile
Wistfully sneer, dare stay a while

Most certainly I won’t endure
A life of pain, of this I’m sure
That love will die and go and go
Piss-coloured now, the tainted snow

An Ode to Love [/B]

Wow, Fea... you're way past medium rare, you're just about well done! 😂

Seriously, this is fantastic... I absolutely love the concept, and the way you skipped the 'middle', so to speak. Jumping from young and starry-eyed to old and reminiscent, and yet no speak of the journey from A to B, from young to old.

Your detail is excellent and the imagery you supplied served to enhance the strength of the poem. I really like it.

Just a couple of suggestions;

'That play upon our eyes a'glazed'

and

'Mottled skin, yet loving smile'

clapping Wonderful.

They are all wonderful Julian..... you sucked me in once again!

Originally posted by Syren
Wow, Fea... you're way past medium rare, you're just about well done! 😂

Seriously, this is fantastic... I absolutely love the concept, and the way you skipped the 'middle', so to speak. Jumping from young and starry-eyed to old and reminiscent, and yet no speak of the journey from A to B, from young to old.

Your detail is excellent and the imagery you supplied served to enhance the strength of the poem. I really like it.

Just a couple of suggestions;

'That play upon our eyes [b]a'glazed'

and

'Mottled skin, yet loving smile'

clapping Wonderful. [/B]

Thank you Sy..thankyou vewy vewy much 😄 i've noted the changes to my file...your last suggestion reads better ✅

oddly enough, i was watching "Something's Gotta Give" with Keanu and Diane Keaton, while surfing KMC at the same time 😮....there was a scene in there when Keaton's character and Nicholson's character started to kiss just before they made really really old uglies,

and they stopped just before it got to that point, to check his blood pressure, when something clicked inside my head!!! Hence an Ode to Love was born. She had a choice between the very young, or the very old: young love old love...😄

Originally posted by CrazyInLove
They are all wonderful Julian..... you sucked me in once again!
😈 AH-HA-HA-HAAA!!! once again, the heart of me strikes the unsuspecting....😛

Fëanor, you are absolutely fabulous!

Originally posted by lil bitchiness
Fëanor, you are absolutely fabulous!
😱 OMG!! LIL!

eeeep! faintthud

notworthy humbled by your presence, my friend.

Originally posted by Fëanor
Thank you Sy..thankyou vewy vewy much 😄 i've noted the changes to my file...your last suggestion reads better ✅

oddly enough, i was watching "Something's Gotta Give" with Keanu and Diane Keaton, while surfing KMC at the same time 😮....there was a scene in there when Keaton's character and Nicholson's character started to kiss just before they made really really old uglies,

and they stopped just before it got to that point, to check his blood pressure, when something clicked inside my head!!! Hence an Ode to Love was born. She had a choice between the very young, or the very old: young love old love...😄

😈 AH-HA-HA-HAAA!!! once again, the heart of me strikes the unsuspecting....😛

yeah, I love that poem Julian but you swore to me that you'd never mention that movie again 🙄 remember?