Originally posted by FëanorHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! I LIKE IT!!!! Good use of form and format! Other than what Syren suggested...here's mine.
[b]An Ode To LoveOh! To Love, a wondrous dream
Of dancing flowers by the stream
That play upon our eyes a glazed
On perfect form and lustrous faceWhat joy there is, for in our hearts
We cannot stand to ever part
To that which brings our most content
In loving arms, this night we’ve spentTo eyes of blue and rosy lips
Golden hair and luscious hips
Snow white skin, the loving smile
Playfully jest to stay a whileMost certainly I could endure
A life without, but this I’m sure
That love will stay and grow and grow
Crystal clean as driven snowOh! To Love, a wondrous dream
When wilting flowers by the stream
That play upon our dullened eyes
On aged form and mournful sighsWhat joy there was when in our hearts
That love has died and so must part
To all those things, that was content
In dying arms, this night I spentTo eyes of grey and sagg’d lips
Wisp-ed hair and aged hips
Mottled skin, and yet the loving smile
Wistfully sneer, dare stay a whileMost certainly I won’t endure
A life of pain, of this I’m sure
That love will die and go and go
Piss-coloured now, the tainted snowAn Ode to Love [/B]
instead of "eyes a glazed" what about "eyes a blazed" sounds more interesting!
The imagery is par for the course...Maybe you should put all of your best works and submit it, can't hurt to try! The worse thing that could happen is they say yes!
Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Now if we can only get Cold to fix her sig, then all will be right in the world!!!!
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahaha... is that why the page is so wide?