when broken is easily fixed

Started by Elessea29 pages

That's understandable...I mean, poerty is really personal...

But, aside from a few *cough* stupid people- most of the folks around here understand poetry, and can give you good constructive feedback!

thanx 😊 i like your writing to

Hey, ignore the morons, and keep bringing us your talent. Very nice works all around.

thank you 😊

have you ever

have you ever watched foot prints fade in the sand
or a that grain of sand fade into the sea?
have you ever took a moment to watch the sun set?
if not you should spend some time wiht me
have you ever watched a flower fully bloom
or a person fully flower?
have you ever thought of thinking?
are you thinking of that thought?
have you ever heard the wind blow
will you always be so difficult
like a mountain bowing to the wind
have you ever took some time
to breath and take it in
have you ever raised your face to the sun
and scream a thousand screams
let it all out take all the rest in
have you ever watched as the blood dropped
or as the water trickled?
have you ever just welcomed the pain
enjoyed that little tickle?
have you ever?

Originally posted by Oiram62205
wow you're writing is good. I hope you do decide to go to NY!!!

yeah i decided to go .......im not sure if we will win though
🙁 but ill go 😄

very very cool poem. i hope you find all you look for in NY!

Originally posted by heavenablaze666
have you ever

have you ever watched foot prints fade in the sand
or a that grain of sand fade into the sea?
have you ever took a moment to watch the sun set?
if not you should spend some time wiht me
have you ever watched a flower fully bloom
or a person fully flower?
have you ever thought of thinking?
are you thinking of that thought?
have you ever heard the wind blow
will you always be so difficult
like a mountain bowing to the wind
have you ever took some time
to breath and take it in
have you ever raised your face to the sun
and scream a thousand screams
let it all out take all the rest in
have you ever watched as the blood dropped
or as the water trickled?
have you ever just welcomed the pain
enjoyed that little tickle?
have you ever?

Loverly. 😊 *saves* Appreciating life? Something I need to stop and do more often instead of wasting time being down..

yep kinda the idea 😊

noone really ever takes time to apprectiate what they have....not even me ........i was at the beach when i wrote this ...........

ahhahaa.... well, i hope you appreciate it all now.

nope i prolly still dont thats the problem you only apprecitae it for a ittle while

the fault

it was my fualt
i didnt mean to hurt you
it was me it always is
i tired to stand still
keep it all as it is
i tired to keep you from me
but i only hurt you more
i didnt want you to love me
btu either way you did
you tried to tell me everything'
and i just shot you down
i didnt even give you a chance
to tell me how you felt
i tired to say im sorry
but you didnt want to hear it
you walked away from me
and left me ther , just standing
i wasnt sure what to do
i just started thinking
abotu what you said
and how i felt
if i felt
did i feel
was i feeling?
am i feeling ?
sorry ?
i know it dosent change a thing
i know it wont mend you heart
i know it wont drie your tears
but i should have said it from the start
im sorry

(dedicated to sammy ...you know what i did you know who i am i just hopeyou know im sorry )

empty bottle

drowning in a empty bottle
watching as the world goes by
leaving me at full throttle
straing at an empty bottle
trying to make sense of things
blinded by a drink or 2
thinking of past love ones
wanting to go back a few
to were this all began
holding on to this empty bottle
trying hard to understand
why i seem to let things pass me by
the things i wanted made me cry
wanted to let go of this empty bottle
but i couldnt let it go
like some forign memory
of some time long ago
i throw way the empty bottle
but in my mind it is still here
tuanting my dreams and fanticies
never truly letting me go
and now there is a second bottle
filling me with morbid feeling
felling mostly dead to the world
never truly feeling
im still holding on to that bottle
i dont think ill ever leyt go

Originally posted by heavenablaze666
the fault

it was my fualt
i didnt mean to hurt you
it was me it always is
i tired to stand still
keep it all as it is
i tired to keep you from me
but i only hurt you more
i didnt want you to love me
btu either way you did
you tried to tell me everything'
and i just shot you down
i didnt even give you a chance
to tell me how you felt
i tired to say im sorry
but you didnt want to hear it
you walked away from me
and left me ther , just standing
i wasnt sure what to do
i just started thinking
abotu what you said
and how i felt
if i felt
did i feel
was i feeling?
am i feeling ?
sorry ?
i know it dosent change a thing
i know it wont mend you heart
i know it wont drie your tears
but i should have said it from the start
im sorry

(dedicated to sammy ...you know what i did you know who i am i just hopeyou know im sorry )


wow. now if only ALL females felt that way.

Empty bottle is a cool poem.

Got only one thing to say critically, and that is check on the typos everynow and then, but otherwise, good stuff! clap

some of us do feel this way 😊 and yeah i got to check my typos i have a lot 😕

stupid typos....😖ad:

*nods* I like the poems 😄

with all this anger there is no time to inhale
try to catch the smell of something you once knew
if you stop to look around
what do you see rebuilt, renewed?
everything is so beautiful
if we just take the time
and if you blink you could miss so much
please don't ever close your eyes
and i forgot to breath for like the sixth time this week
maybe it was the pink saturated sky that brought me back from yesterday
and took me on another ride
away from all the materialism and trouble
reminded me from past illusions
then i realized i had my eyes closed all this time
and let it all pass by
i took on chance
and just blow it all away
i should have never blinked

Originally posted by Elessea
*nods* I like the poems 😄

thank you ..you inspire me to keep posting them *big grin*