Originally posted by roguegirl15
Wow,these r better than any others that i've read.Theyre real and not all cheery and fake. I can relate to some.thumbup.Keep writing it helps.
Originally posted by roguegirl15
This thread is a hit! Think about publishing some
Originally posted by Commando Queen
nope your just awsome!
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
good goin dude.
shower beneath the stars
On a cold dark night
The rain pours
I take your hand
Leading you to paradise
The water traces your face
Like crystallized tears
Time slows its pace
As we laugh and play
I get lost in the moment
And think to myself
This must be a dream
Beauty such as yours
Is rare to this world
Your hand brushes my face
As our eyes meet
I already love you
like I have no other
Yet somehow I fall deeper
Soon you are in my arms
And our lips catch
The sky's tears before
Gently touching
The rain stops
As the night greats morning
Signaling the end
To our shower beneath the stars
mmkay....seriously your work is sophomoric at best and the same subject matter can only be done so many times and so many ways before it starts to sound cliche'. originality is not one of your strong points, but you do have a grasp for the language of what one would call an attempt at poetry. in a word it is prosaic at best, but truthfully good enough to work for Hallmark or Carlton card if that is your goal...
Originally posted by *Georgina_A*
Aww, thanks Coldfire 😊 Same to you 🙂Great work again, Mario 👆
Originally posted by NunYahBidness
mmkay....seriously your work is sophomoric at best and the same subject matter can only be done so many times and so many ways before it starts to sound cliche'. originality is not one of your strong points, but you do have a grasp for the language of what one would call an attempt at poetry. in a word it is prosaic at best, but truthfully good enough to work for Hallmark or Carlton card if that is your goal...