Ya Krunk'd Floo's Dazzlingly Delicious Discursives...

'They also 'smelled' a great deal.'

Just out of interest, can the word 'smelt' actually be used and still be correct?

Personally, I'd say:

"'No, because 'smelt' is generally used as a verbal adjective, therefore it wouldn't really fit the sentence."

I didn't write that poem, Syren. Bardock's buddy did.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
Ahh, I live for the mention of myself among superlatives...

[B]The Worst Poem in the Universe

The dead swans lay in the stagnant pool.
They lay. They rotted. They turned
Around occasionally.
Bits of flesh dropped off them from
Time to time.
And sank into the pool's mire.
They also smelt a great deal.

Greatness. [/B]

I agree, it's unbeliavable....my eyes are attempting to kill themself to protect the rest of my body.

I actually liked it. Call me sentimental, but never mental.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
Personally, I'd say:

"'No, because 'smelt' is generally used as a verbal adjective, therefore it wouldn't really fit the sentence."

I didn't write that poem, Syren. Bardock's buddy did.

I know, I know. It was a genuine question, I wasn't entirely sure if 'smelt' was a word associated with the nose.

I know it means 'to fuse metal', or something 😕

Oh, Syren...I meant that 'smelt' does refer to the act of nose-wafting-intake sense, but it would have been incorrect to use it in that lovely poem by Bardock's dad.

Anyway...

I the Fire

I the fire, as I beam sun.
Like a radiant burn, burn, burn;
The devilled rays lifting the surface's skin.

Furious and relentless, mastered by none,
As I burn, burn, burn all others dissipate.
Through the sky, hills, grass, cities dry.

I the fire, as I beam sun.
Like an Atom Bomb explodes,
I shrieking shatter through this; all destroyed.

Molten delinquents fusing all life,
As I throw clinquant rays scattering shine,
Beneath only shade does this relent.

I the fire, as I beam sun.
Burning every touched soul with I.
Descending all time, dormir.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
Ahh, I live for the mention of myself among superlatives...

[B]The Worst Poem in the Universe

The dead swans lay in the stagnant pool.
They lay. They rotted. They turned
Around occasionally.
Bits of flesh dropped off them from
Time to time.
And sank into the pool's mire.
They also smelt a great deal.

Greatness. [/B]

Yeah, the thing is despite that poem being undeniably great, it's actually not one of mine.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
Yeah, the thing is despite that poem being undeniably great, it's actually not one of mine.

Probably what makes it great...

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
Oh, Syren...I meant that 'smelt' does refer to the act of nose-wafting-intake sense, but it would have been incorrect to use it in that lovely poem by Bardock's dad.

Anyway...

[B]I the Fire

I the fire, as I beam sun.
Like a radiant burn, burn, burn;
The devilled rays lifting the surface's skin.

Furious and relentless, mastered by none,
As I burn, burn, burn all others dissipate.
Through the sky, hills, grass, cities dry.

I the fire, as I beam sun.
Like an Atom Bomb explodes,
I shrieking shatter through this; all destroyed.

Molten delinquents fusing all life,
As I throw clinquant rays scattering shine,
Beneath only shade does this relent.

I the fire, as I beam sun.
Burning every touched soul with I.
Descending all time, dormir. [/B]

It's really good, but;

As I burn, burn, burn, all others dissipate.

Just a small amendment... unless that was intentional. I just feel it reads better with the extra comma 😄

Originally posted by Syren
It's really good, but;

As I burn, burn, burn, all others dissipate.

Just a small amendment... unless that was intentional. I just feel it reads better with the extra comma 😄

Yeah, I'd go along with that. Maybe it was a hyper-real-faux mistake to balance the universe. Maybe...

Or maybe you just got over-excited and posted too eagerly? We'll go with that 😛

I generally write them as I post them, so that is feasible. 'Balancing the universe' is good too, though.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
I generally write them as I post them, so that is feasible. 'Balancing the universe' is good too, though.

Can't argue there...

you won!! Congrats there buddy 😊

Originally posted by debbiejo
you won!! Congrats there buddy 😊

Yeah, thanks.

I'll take this opportunity to put this to bed here...

The Essence

Life lies liquid, moving moments make;
The break of dawn as we yawn and wake.
A new sun to behold, and conversations had;
As night settles, reflections can be good or bad.

There is reason in the pain of a scar-cried day,
Yeilding the birth of paths diverted, not astray.
While fresh pain stabs, twists and burns;
Moons sunk and sailed reveal what we learn.

The essence is in being, see life, feel;
A life should not be calculated, as Math and numbers deal.
To qualify a life lived by its end factor,
Would be to forget how we got there, so disregard your subtractor.

Roll with the waves, as we sail the sea of life;
A fisherman's forecast isn't always of strife.
Take knowledge from pain, laughter from joy,
As we understand the reason of our employ.

The solution is do, live full, always try,
Challenge your fears and aim so high.
If in a world of truly lived independence,
Then what you gain is learned from experience.

I may revisit it at a later date so I can make the last two verses as ammodably amazing as the first three...

Would you mind if I were to put the following lines in my sig?

Life lies liquid, moving moments make; the break of dawn as we yawn and wake.
To qualify a life lived by its end factor, would be to forget how we got there, so disregard your subtractor.

Cheers, ol' buddy ol' pal 😊

Sure thing, doll. Sure thing...

Sex?

I'm not a fan of stanza four, first couplet.

Originally posted by Victor Von Doom
I'm not a fan of stanza four, first couplet.

Yeah, I agree. I'm not much of a fan of either of the last two stanzas.