Originally posted by sasee tiin
bur ares99 hasn't wrote any action at all, neither any fighting!!
of course i know that the first chapter not is supposed to contain those things, but look at it, very few people write entire books at a forum, you rather write short stories, and therefore there have to be action from the beginning!
Harry crept up the slowly sloping hill and hid behind the nearest gravestone.He had worked hard , he had waited ,so long for this moment.over the last few months Harry had been many places none of which were Hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry.
Harry had been alone since the death of a beloved friend.This of course being harrys own choice.He was not prepared to lose another life to his cause, his friends where safest in the dark with no connections to harry any more it is how it had to be.
Harry heard that shrill voice he loathed so much and only experience told harry not to act now.This voice of course could only be one man , one thing .It was voldemort.Harry thought of the convenience of this meeting place.The very place where Voldemorts father was buried.
Although harry knew that this was not a family connection which brought voldemort here. The graveyard represented not voldemorts past , but a special moment in only voldemorts eyes.The night the Dark Lord rose again.
of course this has been a special place to voldemort ,and it was known mainly by harry that voldemort likes his trophies.
The reason for the meeting in the graveyard had been that the where abouts of the order had been realised,This information only known by harry due to the fact that wormtail had supplied harry with every crucial detail , of course under the influence of a dark curse.Something which struck harry as odd was the fact that wormtail had been left so vulnarable in snapes home as if on purpose,but these matters did not mean anything just now.
The point of the meeting had been for voldemort to arrange a mass attack on the orders headquarters by the death eaters , of course acting on instructions from voldemort.This was the reason Harry was here.
This was the point of which voldemort will be his most vulnerable and unprotected by his followers.Harry knew that even though Voldemort was mortal after the destruction of the horcruxes,a hard task at the least,he would have to get voldemort on his own if he was to have any chance to destroy him!
Harry waited through the meeting,Waiting for the moment to strike.The attack on the order was the least of harry's worrys as the actual place of the order had been changed,Voldemort had been given flase information so the attack was mean nothing,although the fact that there is no battle for the death eaters to fight may limit the time he has with voldemort which meant there was no time for sad stories,quick and painful was the way voldemort would leave this world.
He sat alone behind the grave stone ,going over the plan again and again inside his head.He did not fear Voldermort any more , He only had anticipation for tonight he knew it would all end.
Harry's thoughts had been cut short by the sound of a crack, a familiar sound to say the least .Harry knew that the Death eaters one by one where leaving,the first cracking sound followed by many others until the sound died out.It was between the three of them although atleast one would have to die before the plan advanced ,Harry had completed in destroying all the horcruxes except one.Dumbledore had told harry that making an animal a horcrux unlikely , but thats what made harry believe it to be true.Voldemort is far from predictable.
Before the plan commenced the Snake Nagini would have to die.This could be acheived from where Harry was positioned as voldemort and his accomplice were in full view.A sacrafice would have to be made in order to complete this task.Harry's position and presence would be given away the moment after he struck, though it had to be done.
Harry pointed his wand in the direction at the snake,he need not say the words as he had indeed mastered speechless spells,Although not a word was said at the sight of the snake the curse was obvious he had used the half blood prince's own spell not because he favoured it but only because he knew that even a feeble attempt could have precise and harmful effects.
It was done , at the second it happened a shrill scream, made harry realise that indeed his position and presence had been sacrificed for this attack.
Harry was prepared for what was coming...the gravestone had been blasted to peices but harry was no behind it anymore, he had apparated feet behind voldemort.Voldemort whipped around at lightning speed and was shocked to see his present ,past and future standing before him.Voldemort gave a sly smirk, "this my friend has been long awaited" he said evily"The chance has come for you to prove yourself against me! i could easily call back my faithful servants to deal with you,but i feel that i should be the one to rid you from this wretched place!"
Harry had been waiting for all of this ,he had it planned to the very last detail and although nothing had yet happened he had a deep feeling that he had already failed."I do not need to prove myself to anyone of anything,especially you!"said harry doubling up with rage"I alone know the information which you seek, The prophecy i have in my own head, i know how this must end but you shall have to find out the hard way"
"Harry you honestly feel that you can defeat ?, and even if you ever could ,i would return again to take your life!"these words seem to float out of voldemolts mouth.
"If that is what you believe then you are terribly mistaken,i know also about your past, i know the unthinkable things you have done, I KNOW ABOUT THE HORCRUXES!!"screamed a raging harry !!"Or atleast i knew about the horcruxes"Laughed Harry"You are just like any other wizard in this world , maybe even less,your soul is incomplete! you have a weak soul!!"
"This maybe Harry my young friend ,but i still cannot suppress my feelings that you are missing something very important"laughed Voldermort
" I honestly cant see what this is"said harry irritated"i have planned this for a long time theres not a detail i have yet missed!!"
"On the contrary , Harry you missed one important fact , you are not powerful enough to destroy me !, now Dumbledore is dead i no longer need the horcruxes ,there are no more threats to me! i am free "Yelled an excited Voldermort.
"Not quite i have a power so strong within me , i could over power you easily , not with spells or cantations but with the one for you fear the most , the power to love!"Said harry in a serious tone
"you honestly think that you can over power me , so easily using love?"Voldermort looked disgusted
Voldemort
"Voldemort , i do not think so . I KNOW SO , its the one thing i have that you do not its the only things which makes us different"Yelled Harry.
With that voldemort launched a command of many spells and curses but harry was prepared for all of these , he was prepared for the whole battle he knew Voldemorts style of battle , an his technique harry needed only one simple spell to finish off voldemort
"THE TIME HAS COME FOR IT TO END , YOU HAVE NO SAY IN THE MATTER , YOU WILL FALL BEFORE ME AND I SHALL PROVAILL OVER EVIL!ALL THE LIVES YOU HAVE TAKEN ALL THE PEOPLE YOU HAVE KILLED WILL BE THE ONES TO DEFEAT YOU !"harry yelled at the top of his voice.
With this Harry's plan was to be completed the effort would pay off , although it would not be harry who kills Voldemort it would be his victims, the same way in which Harry was freed the last time they met in the same graveyard! Harrys incantation met the tip of Voldemorts wand just as planned , and just as before figures climbed out of voldemorts wand , though many more than the last time. The figures rose out and surrounded voldemort forming a circle ,Although it looked like nothing was happening , Harry could tell what was happening from the expression on Voldemorts face, Voldemort was hearing the pain and screams of his past victims , their emotions their feelings the pains from their terrible deaths all combined into one to bring down the dark lord, the figures where forcing Voldemort to feel pain, hatred,and fear but most of all love he had been forced to feel the selfless acts of those who spared their lifes in an effort to save others.
Voldemorts was slowly getting weaker his soul was being demolished , the end had come for voldemort , there was no more soul for voldemort to return from this was at last the end of the Dark Lord...
div, this is gret and quite interesting. But I think that you should open a separate thread and post it cause its not fair for ares99, and if s/he wants to continue with the fic it will get messy. So my advise would be you pm Rogue, ask to delete your posts, and in the same time you open a separate thread
Originally posted by sasee tiin
bur ares99 hasn't wrote any action at all, neither any fighting!!
of course i know that the first chapter not is supposed to contain those things, but look at it, very few people write entire books at a forum, you rather write short stories, and therefore there have to be action from the beginning!
so it was the interduction to his/her story. You dont have fighting at the very beggining if you did the story would be to rushed!
and those that think that these are rubish authors can as well decide not to read. I mean, don't get me wrong, I also have had a situation not to like some fics, then I considered them not worthy to comment. Cheer up guys. As to HP deserves more, I agree with you all, but HP deserves more then the way HBP was written as well
Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
Hey, thats not nice. Nobody is asking for him to be a great author. At least he is trying and has the guts to post his story.
Guts to post the story? A lot of people do. Theres is a lot of story's in the Harry Potter Fiction area, which is where this will be moved.
But i dont think its bad.
Originally posted by Unicor777
and those that think that these are rubish authors can as well decide not to read. I mean, don't get me wrong, I also have had a situation not to like some fics, then I considered them not worthy to comment. Cheer up guys. As to HP deserves more, I agree with you all, but HP deserves more then the way HBP was written as well
well said