The unwanted girl

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The unwanted girl

Here goes, hope you like it🙂

Liola stared up at her rooms ceiling, and hoped that by some miracle it was all a dream, but even she was to old to believe that her whole life was a dream!
She used to play this came and sometimes still does, it was called the dream world, where she would close her eyes and make up this whole imaginary life that was absolutely perfect!! She knew that she had to face it, this was her life even if she liked it or not!
Liola was 13 years old and that was about the only thing that was normal about her. She had no siblings and no friends, she did have one friend called Lila but she had different interests from Liola, the only reason that they had not broken up was because Liola overheard her telling one of her other stuck – up friends that her mother said that Liola was going through a hard time and that Lila had to be there for her. Liola hated the fact that her parents had to get divorced, she had pleaded with both of them but even she knew there was nothing that could be done, her dad told her that they would have divorced earlier but they feared that it might affect Liola’s childhood but now that she was grown up, her parents could no longer take it!
Liola never had anyone that she could really relate to, she felt that she was alone in this world and she had so many thoughts stuffed up in her, her mum once recommended that she keep a diary, but Liola couldn’t trust a diary she had grown up believing that she couldn’t trust anyone, because so many people had betrayed her!..........

So is anybody reading? 🙂

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'tis very good. keep on going.

awww thanks🙂

Liola’s mum walked into her bedroom, “honey, are you ready the car is waiting outside”, hilary (Liola’s mum)
“yes I’m ready” said Liola putting on a half smile and walking out.
After the divorce Hilary decided that it would be better to move and leave all of the past over here, of course it would give Liola the oppurtunity to make new friends and start all over again, but Liola did not want to leave even though there were so many bad memories, the city of san fransisco is the only thing that had been with her all her life, so many things had come and gone, but over the years Liole had gotten used to letting go, so it was not that hard.

Beside everybody in her here neighbourhood knew about the divorce, and everywhere she went everybody they gave her pity looks, and she hated the fact that they pitied her.
Liole jumped into the car and her mum said “one last look honbun”. Liola gave one last longing look at their house and her mum said “and here we come New York”
Even though her mum was trying to act all cheerful she knew that her mum was depressed, she didn’t know if she liked her mum being happy and lying or if she wanted her mum to tell her the truth. But she didn’t care, because and that sudden moment it all hit her, everybody was lying nobody cared about her, so why should she care?………….

Liola pondered over this suggestion all the way to the airport, could it really be true she thought? Hilary looked at her with a half smile “whats on your mind, honbun?”, she said.
Liola looked at her mum and said “oh nothing”, but then she had a sudden urge and said “just thinking about all the great things we can do in New York”.
Hilary smiled “now that’s the spirit”, and squeezed Liola’s hand.
Liola could not come to terms with this, she hated the fact that she could not ask her Hilary about this thought. Because of course she knew what Hilary would say, she would not go and say no hon I hate you and I don’t love you!
Liola thought that it was safer to keep this to herself and usually did with everything!!! “mum what school will I being to?”, questioned Liola.
“well I got several interviews for you, about 5 and some of the are all girls school, but-”, said Hilary.
“but what?”, asked Liola
“well it’s just that I don’t think you will get into the all girls school, because they believe that children with divorced parents, become a nuisance!”, said Hilary “but of course that’s not true!, right?”
Liola took a while to think about it, I mean she could understand what the school was talking about when they said divorced parents children became a nuisance, she had seen them on T.v the ones that went into drugs and stuff, but she hated to think that, that would happen to her!! So her answer to her mum was a very weary “no, of course not”.

Okay I am going to skip the part where they go to the airport and take the flight etc.
So the next time I post it will be from when they land in New York!!!!

so is anybody reading this?, because if not, then i will stop writing!!

k well i will post this and then i will close of!!:

“Ladies and gentle man we have landed safely, I would to like to welcome you to the city of New York, enjoy you stay!”, said the hostess.

Liola and he mum climbed down the stairs of the plane to receive their luggage, “well this is nice isn’t it?”, said Hilary

“Yeah, I suppose so, mum can we just get our luggage and go to our hotel I’m really tired “, said Liola.

“Sure Hon, but I have got a surprise for you”, said Hilary eyes gleaming with excitement.

So Hilary dragged Liola to the nearest cab and gave them an address no. 12 Stert street, “ooh mum do we have to, I just really- all I wanna do is sleep”, said Liola

“Yes we have to”, said Hilary

The cab dropped them of and emptied all their luggage Liola woke up from her daze “mum, oh my gosh you forgot to book a hotel! No I refuse o stay with other people just because of your mistake, I want to go to our hotel NOW”, said Liola partially fuming with rage.

“Hon I sincerely hope that your stupidness is because you're sleepy and not your natural self! Do I have to spell it out to you, I BOUGHT A HOUSE”, said Hilary jumping up and down.

“What”, Said Liola and stormed of not knowing where to go because this city was new to her, so in the end decided to stand facing a big oak tree

“Hon I thought you would be happy isn’t it great?”, said Hilary anxious

“Great, mum how could this be great? It’s horrible!”, said Liola

“What the house? Oh well I think it looks quite pretty and I choose because I thought you would like, but obviously not!”, said Hilary.

“it’s not the house”, said Liola taking her first proper look at the house and thought to herself it did look very nice. “The house looks great - nevermind you wont understand”, said Liola sighing to herself.

“Try me”, said Hilary pleadingly

Liola looked at her mum in the eyes and said “I have tried mum, I have tried a million times”………..

sorry, didn't come in a few days. keep on going. please keep on going. you have great writing skills, and it shouldn't go to waste. KEEP GOING OR I SHALL PM YOU EVERY MINUTE, EVERY HALF AN HOUR, EVERY HOUR, EVERY DAY, EVERY WEEK, EVERY MONTH, EVERY YEAR...

thanx🙂 ok i will, but im a bit busy at the moment, so maybe tomorrow or something!!

ok 😄 . i shall be a waiting for you to post. but you have your warning, so as long as you don't take as long as me... 😛

okay, but believe saratn nobody takes as loooooong as you do to post (talking from experiance) 😄 just kidding🙂
okay heres more!!

CHAPTER TWO

….. “Well please tell me again because I don’t seem to remember you telling me”, said Hilary half crying, half pleading with Liola.

Liola looked at he mother and took a deep breathe in “Ok mum you want me to tell you, well then I will tell you –“

“Wait”, said Hilary “Just lets go inside the house, its our first day, well night and we standing out on the lawn and yelling at each other, imagine what the neighbours will think of us”. she let a deep breathe out “lets just go nside and settle down and have this talk”, said Hilary.

“No, mum im sick of you caring about what everybody thinks about us”, said Liola. “We have issues mum, you have got to accept that we are not normal, okay and I am tired of keeping this all bunched up, I am gonna tell you everything now on our new lawn with tears trickling down my face and the neighbours peeping through their curtains, thinking that I cant see them. No mum I don’t care I am going to tell you now”, said Liola, her heart thumping so hard and so loud, her breathes uneven and her eyes full of rage and anger.

“Ever since this divorce thing happened my whole life changed, but did you care, noooo you were just to busy worring about yourself, you never cared, I have had a hard life mum, and I have lived through it better than most people did, I don’t take drugs, I don’t smoke, like most children in situation do. Then you decide to move, because you want to get rid of your past, did you ever think about me and how it was going to effect me? did you think about all my friends and how I was going to adapt to living some place new and goingi nto a new school, huh?” Liola took a breathe in, and carried on.

“But because I knew you really did want to move I didn’t make a fuss, and I thought that It could not be all that bad, but then you go and buy a new house and expect me to be all excitd about it, mum we have just moved I am still getting used to the idea of New York and a life without dad, and you suddenly go out of the blue and buy a new house, and in not any one of these decisions you never consulted me, never asked me about my opinion. Well guess what mum I’ve had it, I have been so patient with you and dad, I have been undestanding. But do you want to know how I feel, I feel unloved and unwanted, I mean I know what you guys must have been thinking, how life and the divorce would be so easy if I was not born, well sometimes I WISH THAT I WAS NOT BORN”, Liola screamed the last part out, and knelt on the wet grass and cried her heart out.

Liola managed to dry up her tears and say “how is all the furniture going to come huh?” and with that she ran into the house. it was cold and had the smell of an untouched house, to her surprise all the furniture from the old house was already there neatly set out, her bed was there along with the duvets ready to be slept on , Liola did not even care to wash her face she just jumped onto her bed and closed her eyes and prayed that she would dream of something other than her life!

Meanwhile outside still on the lawn, Hilary sat weeping to herself, she whispered to herself “everything was supposed to be perfect, but obviously that is not an option for our family”. And with that got up and entered the house.

this is good, and a little sad...how could Liola be so cold? Hilary was doing what was best for them! sorry sorry continue at your leisure.
and she's right. I take forever to post in my stories.

oh, and i was wondering if i could take the first part of your story to my site. i am making something called writers of the month. I want your consent first, and that no one will continue it. I will give you a link to the site, so you can check from time to time. After the month is over, it will be deleted, and a new one will take it's place. if you say yes, great, if not, then no hard feelings, cause it is up to you.

yeah, no problem, its cool.🙂
dont mind at all🙂

now im tryin to figure out whats going to happen next in this, hmmmm🙂

thanks. i am only borrowing the first post of the story, nothing more than that.
I hope get something soon...this is turning out really really good. maybe i should open another story, try writing from a different angle...

Liola woke up the next morning, with the sun blazing on her face, her eyes lids split open adjusting to the suns rays, for a moment she had forgotten where she was and what she had done last night! But as she sat up everything flashed back in her mind, she was shocked at herself and could not believe that, that was her, it was almost a fake her. She was a quite introverted girl hardly ever spoke her mind and had a habit of always lying about her feelings.

She got out of bed and trudged around the house looking for the bathroom, at last she found! After that she walked around exploring the house amazed that everything was already set up. She thought to herself that this must have taken a while, and a lot of planning. She wanted to run up to her mum and give her a great big hug and apologise, and then everything would be back to normal, no she knew she could not do that, everything would never be the same because now her mother knows everything about her feelings and emotions. But in any case she wanted to go apologise she hated having fights with her mom, especially when they were in their new house and she did not know where the breakfast was!

She climbed up the stairs, thinking to herself that she had to perfect the art of sliding down the twirly stairs! Her mom’s door was closed, Liola turned the knob and the door was locked. Liola started to panick “Mum”, she said “Mum are you there”, her voice getting high and squeaky. Lila had watched many movies where the parents get divorced and then the mom does something crazy, and she feared the thought that had lingered into her mind that maybe her mom had done the same!

She ran around the house trying to think of a way to get into the room swearing to herself while at it. She found a long pole but it was way to heavy to carry up all the stairs. She stood silently on the staircase thinking, her heart racing.

She had an idea running outside the house into the garage she grabbed the ladder, which she had noticed there night before. She searched all the windows and finally guessed it was the window with the peach curtain. Liola’s mum had a bad habit of always never closing the curtain, she placed the ladder steadily praying that it would not fall, she started to climb step by step chanting to herself “one, two, one two” over and over again. She reached the window top and peered into the window afraid, she gasped “MUM”………………….

so i guess nobdy is reading!!!!!

sorry, I am. post more....please. and something i have learned. don't write for others, but for yourself. so don't wait for people to respond to continue.