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I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Running The Hood

People gotta prey cause if I'm goin all out,
I'll beat the shit from them in the bout,
born & raised in da hood, don't waste my time
mother****in' looser, I'm gonna make da businesss work and shut down every dork who's gonna cross my path,
trust me it's gonna be a bloodbath.
Every cop in the hood will be me don't shoot,
so mercyfuly I'll kick them with my timberland boot,
Run for your life when da gangsta comes you
man I gotta a bullet with your name on it,
show respect you don't know who you're ****in with
don't mess with me or i'll mess with ya, believe me,
i'll make capone looking like a priest when i'll make ya
taste my fist you'll pray me to let ya go away.
Payback time, victory is mine, I own da hood and other
gangsta are dog food.

Bardock42 Junior Member

To be honest, I find it not that great, for one it doesn't rhyme properly at all...not that this is always necessary but it can be useful. Then I think the Theme is rather dull, kind of basic gangsta rap. Pretty much everyone attempting at rap says the same things, nowadays (the amateurs I mean). I am not that knowledgable about all forms of Rap and I am sure there are great lyrics, but that whole "**** with me I'll kill you" attitude is nothing special anymore. Maybe you should write about how you feel or something meaningful.

Ya Krunk'd Floo Moving with the swell.

Yo, dude, it's like this and like that yo' rhymes are wack,
If I was yo' momma it'd be to school yo' go back,
'Cos you be foolin' no fool with your dribble attack,
It's intelligence, rhymes, ill-skillz, you lack,
In time it may come, as your ballz drop to the mat,
As it is was now, no-one's gonna have time for your tack.
So ends lesson one of my no-frills rap-ap.

papabeard tHe RiVeRmaN

I feel i must say that your rap is dated
Yes its true I did Hate it
There's something wrong with your rythm and rhyme
I gotta say you're wasting your time/

Ronny Love is Blindness

Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by K3VIL
Running The Hood
People gotta prey cause if I'm goin all out,
I'll beat the shit from them in the bout,
born & raised in da hood, don't waste my time
mother****in' looser, I'm gonna make da businesss work and shut down every dork who's gonna cross my path,
trust me it's gonna be a bloodbath.
Every cop in the hood will be me don't shoot,
so mercyfuly I'll kick them with my timberland boot,
Run for your life when da gangsta comes you
man I gotta a bullet with your name on it,
show respect you don't know who you're ****in with
don't mess with me or i'll mess with ya, believe me,
i'll make capone looking like a priest when i'll make ya
taste my fist you'll pray me to let ya go away.
Payback time, victory is mine, I own da hood and other
gangsta are dog food.

No one in the hood can afford half of a timberland boot.

And I really dont like it. I'm not that fond of "rap" but it doesnt mean I'm biased.

-hh- Aesculapius

Ronny, nice Immortal Technique quote in ur sig^

Ronny Love is Blindness

😊 Thanks, I love Internally Bleeding. Its wicked.

RZA Shaolin Monk

Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by K3VIL
Running The Hood
People gotta prey cause if I'm goin all out,
I'll beat the shit from them in the bout,
born & raised in da hood, don't waste my time
mother****in' looser, I'm gonna make da businesss work and shut down every dork who's gonna cross my path,
trust me it's gonna be a bloodbath.
Every cop in the hood will be me don't shoot,
so mercyfuly I'll kick them with my timberland boot,
Run for your life when da gangsta comes you
man I gotta a bullet with your name on it,
show respect you don't know who you're ****in with
don't mess with me or i'll mess with ya, believe me,
i'll make capone looking like a priest when i'll make ya
taste my fist you'll pray me to let ya go away.
Payback time, victory is mine, I own da hood and other
gangsta are dog food.

Dude, I didn't know you were still on this board and now all of sudden you're a rapper too 😆 When did this happen? Wow, I missed a lot.

PINBALL Senior Member

One word for that rap....

Shit......

-hh- Aesculapius

Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by K3VIL
Running The Hood
People gotta prey cause if I'm goin all out,
I'll beat the shit from them in the bout,
born & raised in da hood, don't waste my time
mother****in' looser, I'm gonna make da businesss work and shut down every dork who's gonna cross my path,
trust me it's gonna be a bloodbath.
Every cop in the hood will be me don't shoot,
so mercyfuly I'll kick them with my timberland boot,
Run for your life when da gangsta comes you
man I gotta a bullet with your name on it,
show respect you don't know who you're ****in with
don't mess with me or i'll mess with ya, believe me,
i'll make capone looking like a priest when i'll make ya
taste my fist you'll pray me to let ya go away.
Payback time, victory is mine, I own da hood and other
gangsta are dog food.

you didn't really say much...actually you didn't say anything in this entire verse...just for us to believe that u are unstoppable...yet you haven't proven that in your rhymes...

cliche many mc's fall under...

Darth Revan -

Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by K3VIL
Running The Hood
People gotta prey cause if I'm goin all out,
I'll beat the shit from them in the bout,
born & raised in da hood, don't waste my time
mother****in' looser, I'm gonna make da businesss work and shut down every dork who's gonna cross my path,
trust me it's gonna be a bloodbath.
Every cop in the hood will be me don't shoot,
so mercyfuly I'll kick them with my timberland boot,
Run for your life when da gangsta comes you
man I gotta a bullet with your name on it,
show respect you don't know who you're ****in with
don't mess with me or i'll mess with ya, believe me,
i'll make capone looking like a priest when i'll make ya
taste my fist you'll pray me to let ya go away.
Payback time, victory is mine, I own da hood and other
gangsta are dog food.

Gangsta stopped being original and meaningful a long time ago. That verse sounds more like a lame battle rap than a song. We know you're not a gangsta and you didn't grow up in the hood. 🙂 Quit frontin' you damn fool!

Fools who think they're Ice T should never pick up the mic
Rhyme that shit in Compton and you'll get put out like a light 😱

Mugen Mr. Throwback

Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by K3VIL
Running The Hood
People gotta prey cause if I'm goin all out,
I'll beat the shit from them in the bout,
born & raised in da hood, don't waste my time
mother****in' looser, I'm gonna make da businesss work and shut down every dork who's gonna cross my path,
trust me it's gonna be a bloodbath.
Every cop in the hood will be me don't shoot,
so mercyfuly I'll kick them with my timberland boot,
Run for your life when da gangsta comes you
man I gotta a bullet with your name on it,
show respect you don't know who you're ****in with
don't mess with me or i'll mess with ya, believe me,
i'll make capone looking like a priest when i'll make ya
taste my fist you'll pray me to let ya go away.
Payback time, victory is mine, I own da hood and other
gangsta are dog food.

my advice: get some serus Bling, shawty, and get some hoes up on dat *****, then a candycoated lexus, wit 50 inch rims, and we gon be bawlin yo!!!!! ohh shit, lean wit, rock wit it!!!! 😱 sanp ya fingaz *****, whats happenin, was up.

RZA Shaolin Monk

Re: Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by Darth Revan
Gangsta stopped being original and meaningful a long time ago. That verse sounds more like a lame battle rap than a song. We know you're not a gangsta and you didn't grow up in the hood. 🙂 Quit frontin' you damn fool!
Fools who think they're Ice T should never pick up the mic
Rhyme that shit in Compton and you'll get put out like a light 😱

Yeah and you speak from experience right? you're from Compton right?
Riiiiiihgtttttt suuuuureeeee 😉 🙄

Darth Revan -

Re: Re: Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by RZA
Yeah and you speak from experience right? you're from Compton right?
Riiiiiihgtttttt suuuuureeeee 😉 🙄

Yeah, and you're really RZA—can I have your autograph? 😱

Darth Revan -

Spoiler:
I never said I was from Compton no2

-hh- Aesculapius

darth revan is too gangster to be from compton 😛

and revan did u watch conan o'brien? atmosphere performed

great performance

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wWgbD155zwY

RZA Shaolin Monk

Re: Re: Re: Re: I've wrote some rap songs and I need advices

Originally posted by Darth Revan
Yeah, and you're really RZA—can I have your autograph? 😱

❌ blue_bandana nono

Frigid Soul Mazda Chick

Originally posted by PINBALL
One word for that rap....
Shit......

Exactly.

The only difference between rap and crap is one letter.

Bloigen Restricted

Originally posted by K3VIL
Running The Hood
People gotta prey cause if I'm goin all out,
I'll beat the shit from them in the bout,
born & raised in da hood, don't waste my time
mother****in' looser, I'm gonna make da businesss work and shut down every dork who's gonna cross my path,
trust me it's gonna be a bloodbath.
Every cop in the hood will be me don't shoot,
so mercyfuly I'll kick them with my timberland boot,
Run for your life when da gangsta comes you
man I gotta a bullet with your name on it,
show respect you don't know who you're ****in with
don't mess with me or i'll mess with ya, believe me,
i'll make capone looking like a priest when i'll make ya
taste my fist you'll pray me to let ya go away.
Payback time, victory is mine, I own da hood and other
gangsta are dog food.

Advice?

Delete it.

-hh- Aesculapius

Originally posted by Frigid Soul
Exactly.
The only difference between rap and crap is one letter.

your ignorance is showing 😱