Fox13's shorts

I was going to read these, but before I do, I'm going to make some suggestions.

1. Start a new line for each new piece of dialogue.
2. Make less use of ... Too much use of any grammatical technique lessens its effect.
3. When not writing dialogue, you have a habit of giving each sentence several clauses. If you shorten them, it would be easier to read. For instance

James sighed to himself and walked to her, and sat next to her.the next thing he knew, she started kissing him, with more passion that james had every felt in his life.

James sighed to himself and walked to her. Sitting down next to her, the next thing he knew she had started kissing him with more passion than James had ever felt in his life.

Sorry if it sounds like I'm being pompous, but writing with proper grammar and use of paragraphs would make your stories a lot easier to read.

Triksters got a point. Not only is it then simpler to read it makes it sound a lot more professional.

but im not prfecional. im a bored out of his mind 13 yr old.

Ok well we were just offering help...

and i appritiate it. im still thinkin on a new story line... but i need to use the storys....

all i can really think of for a storyline is what i mentioned earlier.

I'm not saying it has to be up to a professional standard, Fox. Simply cleaning up your grammar will make your stories more readable.

thoses short stories are good i'm working on a story myself called "DREAMS" i haven't finished it yet.

qhy thank ya kindly, love 😊

your welcome babe

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