James/Lily Story

it was alright but i think it would be so much better if u were to write it from Jame's persective once in a while too as well as Lily.

u dont really have to listen to wat im saying at all. i do think ur stories really good. i just thought it would b good if u wrote about James aswell

It is good and I agree with Sirus Rulez there isn't a lot of James in this story it is mainly about Lily I am not complaining. It is a really really good story.

i think i clearly do half and half of James and Lily's perspective. Yes Lily is in there alot but she always with James and I tell what she's thinking and what James is thinking. I don't like to write first person and I think it's annoying when people switch to first person in the middle of story like
Lily's POV or James POV. So i'll keep it the way it is. This next part isn't really going to be about Lily but more James well James and the Marauders.

That would be weird lol like...

Ch.348290 (example)
Lilys pov.
Lily thinks 'I like james but-- oh here hes coming!'
James pov
'what do i say?
Lily's pov
'Uhhh we just staring at each other'
James pov
'What do i say!?'

You see? nuff said.

i know htats what i meant. I dont like i twhen people go on in second person for like 3 paragraphs then switch to Lily's POV for 3 paragraphs then James POV for 3 paragraphs. It's annoying to me.

AMEN! your style is fine just keep em coming! 📖 😄
...wait a sec... is that? *looks out the window* The bat signal! *jumps out window* "OMG NOT AGAIN!!!!!"

Not really what I meant. What I meant was that you don't see a lot of James doing his things and you see a lot of Lily's. I Love Your writing I didn't mean to offend you.

True but thats because I usually tell what he's thinking rather than what hes doing

true true

im not meaning to offend u either cause when I look at James/Lily fics its just all about Lily's Pov and never of James. i really do hope that im not offending u in any way cause believe me id never try to offend anyone

have you read anything I said to Brit?

I think she might have read it, but wanted you to know not to feel offended by it and post more soon.

she was saying that My story is only about Lily POV which its not. And to not get offended but im totally ok with it.

as you said before

And thats why I asked if she had read what I said to you

i did

are you going to post soon

um yea sure

wow i just read your story! it is really good! i havent read any james and lily storys ( even though i know there is like a million) but i really like! i really hope you post soon.