Thats what the versus forum is for. Check it out sometime..?
You can access it Here
I'm bored so I'll post a small section of a lightsaber fight I wrote between Tavion and Jaden. This is how I wish lightsaber fights were written instead of the whole "he moved so fast" shtick.
" Tavion made adjustments and bent down as Jaden came back high and lateral with his saber, avoiding the blade before standing up with an awkward thrust of her scepter at Jaden鈥檚 torso, aiming for a shiak.
Jaden slipped the potentially killing strike by leaning backwards and then placing a foot under his new centre of gravity, twirling his body in his awkward bend-over-backwards stance, to make an impossible deflection of Tavion's alchemically-strengthened scepter."
It's a pretty long fight, that's just a small bit of the middle of battle, I wrote it 2 years ago I believe.
Originally posted by kotorfan
Thats what the versus forum is for. Check it out sometime..?You can access it Here
The vs forum really isn't the place to write up your own saber battle. This is more for EU and failing that a fan fic forum or site.
The Bane novels seemed kinda hackneyed. Compared to Stover's and CoD's eloquent writing and clever story and dialogue, Karpyshyn's descriptions and random words I've never even heard before (I learned from PoD what horripilation means), it made it all seem kinda forced.
The story was still good though.
Have you never read it? The author sacrificed talking about what's become an excessive use of literary combat, and the incredibly annoying way many of the authors describe the Force and lightsabers (I'm so sick of the "extension of [their] own arm, or body etc." analogy, and the paragraph they spend talking about the experience of using the Force). Cloak of Deception has a decent balance between all that stuff and the political intrigue behind Valorum's image being "mired by baseless accusations of corruption." It's the only SW novel besides the movie novelizations I've read more than once.
Originally posted by Eminence
I like a little bit of both. You can't really get a sense of speed and ferocity with a completely technical descriptive style: imagine a blow by blow account of Anakin vs. Obi-Wan.
I agree completely.
BTW, the General Fiction Area board has a thread soewhat like this. It's called "Star Wars Versus storytime" thread.
@Lucien
LOL yeah...especially in PoD where they talk SO much about the awesomeness of the jedi/sith: they said that the republic elite soldiers were really good because one of them managed to fire off more than one shot before dying vs a sith lord, Kaan said that entire ships and armies are no match for an "army of light" consisting of a few jedi, and that the ground troops vs jedi could serve as nothing more than a brief distraction.
Yeah that was another point of discretion in PoD. The big battle for control of the galaxy is essentially left to a few thousand people. And then when Karpyshyn has characters like Kaan and Hoth discussing number on the battlefield like it was statistics in Risk, it really dampens the impact of the final Jedi and Sith war. And in an effort to dispel that notion, the book makes casual reference to "all those other battles happening right now... but they don't matter." Top it off with Hoth and Valenthyne discussing feelings as if Karpy was trying to inject some personality and humanity in to the story, and you're left thinking that the novel had been written by a high schooler.