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biggesthpfan
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has any one else made harry potter fanfic i'd liked to see other people's work
i can't be the only one doing this
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Jun 10th, 2005 12:49 AM |
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munchkin1987
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I know this may sound terrible, but as someone who appreciates literature I must say that your story is horribly written. It is obvious that you have a vivid imagination, and good ideas, but before you continue to write, it would be good if you went and reviewed the basics, including things such as spelling and punctuation. I understand that you don't have much free time(very few of us do) but it will likely benefit you greatly to review those basics. Spending your time doing that will NOT be wasted.
Anyhooooo, on another note...I am SOOOOOO excited for the 6th book coming out! Yippy!!!!!!!!
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Jun 11th, 2005 03:33 AM |
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sniper135
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let me guess the dada teacher is percy...
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Jun 11th, 2005 11:54 PM |
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crazykim
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Location: in a harry potter trance |
the dada teacher is snape
i hope it isnt
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Jun 13th, 2005 09:24 PM |
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misslilsweetie
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i bet its percy cause it say lesson with percy for the chapter rite? well pls keep going i luv it
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Jun 14th, 2005 12:49 AM |
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joelsef
all u people are vampires
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its a really good story with great ideas. only thing is watch out for your run-on sentences, there are a lot of them. otherwise its a great story, with a nice cliffhanger might I add. Keep it up!
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Jun 14th, 2005 01:36 AM |
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crazykim
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oh yeah well ur right then
i forgot !!!
lol
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Jun 15th, 2005 12:04 PM |
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biggesthpfan
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there standing at the dada desk was percy weasley.
what is he doing here said ron agrily as they sat down.
HELLO CLASS MY NAME IS MR.BROWN said percy proudly
he changed his name i can't belive it said ron even more angry.
harry was more shocked to the fact that percy was standing in front of him.
icanbelliveiteither.
it took harry a while to realize he said one word.
what said ron confuse.
this is a mistake why would dumbledore hire per....per..him
said hermione even more shocked than him.
rage came speeding back to harry about the things he said about him.
i can't belive it he said.
at that moment i think they all notice the the whole class was listening to thier coversation
POTTER,GRANGER TALKING IN CLASS THATS A DETENION
but ron was talking too harry didn't mean to sell ron out but it seemed unfair
RONALD WEASLY IS A PREFECT HE WOULD NEVER TALK DURING CLASS AND FOR TALKING BACK I'LL ASK YOU TO LEAVE AND NOT REATURN FOR THE REST OF THE LESSON and please next time clean your clothes he said poiting at the ink stain on his shirt.
the slythrens burst out laughing.
harry stormed out of the room he was angry at ron mostly but he new it wasn't his fault but it felt good to blam someone.
harry wanted to return to class................To punch percy in the face
but harry had to stop himself harry calmed himself down and went up the marble staircase.
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Jun 15th, 2005 08:57 PM |
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biggesthpfan
The Couch Warmer
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the next chapter is
date for the dance
hope you like it
oh and also i want you to tell me what you think is going to happen
i'd like to see how close you get even ask me qestions about whats going to happen i'll answer some
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Jun 15th, 2005 09:04 PM |
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biggesthpfan
The Couch Warmer
Gender: Male
Location: United States |
please keep some sort of converesation i want to know how many people are posting
i made a bet my story is better than thiers so i got to count whos visiting the page
and i really want to win this
but it not telling you to find frenids to come to this message board and leave a message
but its okay if you happen to find as many friend you can get but i don't encorage it
but if you want you really really really can invite as many friends as you can
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Jun 15th, 2005 09:11 PM |
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DarkC
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Percy as DADA?  
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Jun 15th, 2005 09:17 PM |
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crazykim
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i like it and i have an idea about the next chapter, but neva mind
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Jun 16th, 2005 04:37 PM |
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joelsef
all u people are vampires
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dude, biggesthpfan, you're still doin run-on sentences. please use a some form of punctuation (period, exclamation point, etc..) to end your sentences, and use quotation marks for dialouge. the story is fine but the grammar errors are pretty bad. please edit before you post.
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Jun 16th, 2005 04:42 PM |
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misslilsweetie
I'm confoosed
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OMG OMG this is so shocking but i mean i new it was him but the way he acts and stuff...OMG this is like whoa.....keep going
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Jun 20th, 2005 09:56 PM |
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crazykim
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everythin is like shochin
but anyway
continue
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