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Sirius_Rulez
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it was alright but i think it would be so much better if u were to write it from Jame's persective once in a while too as well as Lily.
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Jun 29th, 2006 11:30 AM |
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Sirius_Rulez
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u dont really have to listen to wat im saying at all. i do think ur stories really good. i just thought it would b good if u wrote about James aswell
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Jun 29th, 2006 11:34 AM |
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Brit531
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It is good and I agree with Sirus Rulez there isn't a lot of James in this story it is mainly about Lily I am not complaining. It is a really really good story.
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Jun 29th, 2006 02:09 PM |
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iluvhp1_7
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i think i clearly do half and half of James and Lily's perspective. Yes Lily is in there alot but she always with James and I tell what she's thinking and what James is thinking. I don't like to write first person and I think it's annoying when people switch to first person in the middle of story like
Lily's POV or James POV. So i'll keep it the way it is. This next part isn't really going to be about Lily but more James well James and the Marauders.
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Jun 29th, 2006 04:07 PM |
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Fantasydragon
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That would be weird lol like...
Ch.348290 (example)
Lilys pov.
Lily thinks 'I like james but-- oh here hes coming!'
James pov
'what do i say?
Lily's pov
'Uhhh we just staring at each other'
James pov
'What do i say!?'
You see? nuff said.
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Jun 29th, 2006 05:24 PM |
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iluvhp1_7
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i know htats what i meant. I dont like i twhen people go on in second person for like 3 paragraphs then switch to Lily's POV for 3 paragraphs then James POV for 3 paragraphs. It's annoying to me.
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Jun 29th, 2006 05:36 PM |
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Fantasydragon
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AMEN! your style is fine just keep em coming!  
...wait a sec... is that? *looks out the window* The bat signal! *jumps out window* "OMG NOT AGAIN!!!!!"
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Jun 29th, 2006 07:44 PM |
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Brit531
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Not really what I meant. What I meant was that you don't see a lot of James doing his things and you see a lot of Lily's. I Love Your writing I didn't mean to offend you.
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Jun 29th, 2006 11:06 PM |
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iluvhp1_7
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True but thats because I usually tell what he's thinking rather than what hes doing
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Jun 29th, 2006 11:21 PM |
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Brit531
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true true
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Jun 29th, 2006 11:39 PM |
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Sirius_Rulez
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im not meaning to offend u either cause when I look at James/Lily fics its just all about Lily's Pov and never of James. i really do hope that im not offending u in any way cause believe me id never try to offend anyone
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Jul 1st, 2006 12:52 PM |
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iluvhp1_7
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have you read anything I said to Brit?
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Jul 1st, 2006 05:01 PM |
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Brit531
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I think she might have read it, but wanted you to know not to feel offended by it and post more soon.
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Jul 1st, 2006 09:15 PM |
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iluvhp1_7
Fourth Year
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she was saying that My story is only about Lily POV which its not. And to not get offended but im totally ok with it.
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Jul 1st, 2006 10:04 PM |
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Brit531
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as you said before
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Jul 1st, 2006 11:58 PM |
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iluvhp1_7
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And thats why I asked if she had read what I said to you
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Jul 2nd, 2006 01:32 AM |
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Sirius_Rulez
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i did
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Jul 2nd, 2006 04:11 AM |
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Brit531
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are you going to post soon
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Jul 3rd, 2006 01:12 AM |
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iluvhp1_7
Fourth Year
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um yea sure
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Jul 3rd, 2006 01:14 AM |
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lotrtres3414
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wow i just read your story! it is really good! i havent read any james and lily storys ( even though i know there is like a million) but i really like! i really hope you post soon.
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