Originally posted by frodo_dude
orli's sroty:THE SLYTHERIN LEGACYHogwarts was founded by the four friends, who were also the four greatest witches and wizards of the age; Rowena Ravenclaw, Godric Gryffindor, Helga Hufflepuff, and Salazar Slytherin. Three of the four founders coexisted in harmony…one did not. Salazar Slytherin was a conniving, ambitious, proud and dexterous character. He argued that the only students that should be admitted into Hogwarts were ones of “pure” heritages. His dream was to educate a race of wizards, purest of blood, and lead them on to bigger and greater goals/dreams they had for life. So naturally, the ones accepted into Slytherin house were not only pure-bloods, but just as ambitious and motivated as Salazar himself. While the students studied under him, he stressed and glorified the prospect of being “pure of blood,” which the students overtime adopted into their ideals as well.
Salazar’s pure-blood mania did not arise spuriously. Growing changes he witnessed in his youth added to his way of thinking…Salazar began as a pure blooded wizard, and he lived as such. Watching precious pure-blooded legacy decay due to half-blood/pure-blood marriages made him feel bitter and vengeful. Strong, powerful, determined pure-blooded friends that he had turned soft and indolent when married to a muggle. He felt that his friends were sacrificing their powers and poisoning the noble gift of magic when confiding in their muggle spouse. Their once ambitious dreams and goals were traded for a mere muggle, who couldn’t even grasp the importance or understand the complicated ways of the wizarding world. Salazar considered the ability to perform magic a sacred art …an immense secret that, he thought, should only be kept within the purest of bloods. Engrossed and spellbound in thought, he decided to leave home. Salazar tried thinking back on what went wrong…what was so special about these muggles that could stray a very competent and blossoming wizard away from his dreams? At this thought, anger rose up inside him; a bitter, spiteful emotion rose like a snake inside him. He would not accept their children; their tainted, foul offspring. The right of passage into the wizarding world will never be theirs…never. He vowed to himself that he would NEVER allow that to happen...
Creativity/Originality-
Actually, this story is written like a book. This makes the idea not very creative. ---5 of 7---
Organization and Flow-
This story's flow was amazing. I like the buildup of the text. Dunno how to solidify that 😛 ---4 of 4---
Preresiquites(ie submitting in time, using house founder as main character etc)-
too bad, this text has been the last in submission and is very short. The point of view is an independent character, which makes it readable (sorta) ---2 of 3---
portraying of the characters-
The characters haven't really been portrayed, so I can hardly rate that... ---1 of 3---
Grammar and writing style-
Awesome! Great! The wording is the best in the whole challenge, unblemished grammar and perfect phrasings. ---4.5 of 3---
5+4+2+1+4.5=16.5
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7+4+3+3+3=20
Total -> 16.5 points