Poetical Justice

Started by Syren33 pages

Doob ~ Babe, that 'Santa Said...' one is awesome, seriously ๐Ÿ˜ฑ True talent dear.

Trickster ~ I like your style, straight to the point and deep ๐Ÿ‘†

CF ~ Welcome to the world of poetical prowess girl, your stuff is hot ๐Ÿ˜‰

Originally posted by Candy Kisses
I sit here and try to blank you out
that cute smile, the way you're hair falls
the way girls long on your every word
And her the love of your life!

I know that i can never be her,
and deep down I know
you'll never feel for me the way you feel for her!
So i bow my head and walk away

No-one knows the secret of my heart
that it beats just for you
so in the dark, i weep
for the love i can never have
and the secret that haunts me

so i say goodbye to love...and goodbye to you

Who is that in reference to sweetie? ๐Ÿ˜•

Syren,
Your poetry is really deep and emotional, youve got a lot of talent. Im looking forward to reading more of 'em. โœ… ๐Ÿ‘†

You too D double, and tricksterthumbs_up

Oh yeah!

Lol, that last two-line stanza poem was written by me in the quick reply box ๐Ÿ˜‰

Originally posted by charmedFairy
Syren,
Your poetry is really deep and emotional, youve got a lot of talent. Im looking forward to reading more of 'em. โœ… ๐Ÿ‘†

You too D double, and tricksterthumbs_up

thumbs_up = ๐Ÿ˜‚ ...... ๐Ÿ˜„

Syren > You've reverted!!... ๐Ÿ˜ฑ ....how'd you do dat?... ๐Ÿคจ

....Thanks, Miz Pimp'n.... ๐Ÿ˜‰

Originally posted by D-Double
thumbs_up = ๐Ÿ˜‚ ...... ๐Ÿ˜„

Syren > You've reverted!!... ๐Ÿ˜ฑ ....how'd you do dat?... ๐Ÿคจ

....Thanks, Miz Pimp'n.... ๐Ÿ˜‰

Honey, The Syren got contacts, you dig? fab

Waiting

Itโ€™s been a long time since Iโ€™ve met you
I promised I'd never forget you
But my memories are fading
Trapped in all the tears Iโ€™ve shed
Tomorrow has become today
I hang in the balance of a thread

Iv been missing you so much
Iv forgotten the feel of your touch
How time seems to stop
When youโ€™re hurting and ready to drop

Iโ€™ve never cried so much
Nor shed so many tears
My heart feels so old
Waiting for you to appear

Unleashed silence
Wanting to talk but cant speak
Tomorrow seems so forgotten
My bodyโ€™s never felt so weak

Youโ€™ve become a hole inside my heart
So deep and vast
No beginning, no start
Just darkness to consume
Never to divide, never to depart.

And something is pulling me
down, deep into this hole
but if I have one memory left of you
Its knowing you've never wanted me to let go...

It's nights like these that shadow flys
And rumours are born in the wind.
It's nights like these that trust dies
And love is stabbed with open arms.

Falling into a welcoming embrace
Relationships crumble into ruins
Truth is the object of the chase
As lovers feel cheated by wine

It's on nights like these, a year is born
And festivity lives everywhere
It's on days like these lives are torn
And the pure good-hearted,
Despair.

Originally posted by Trickster
It's nights like these that shadow flys
And rumours are born in the wind.
It's nights like these that trust dies
And love is stabbed with open arms.

Falling into a welcoming embrace
Relationships crumble into ruins
Truth is the object of the chase
As lovers feel cheated by wine

It's on nights like these, a year is born
And festivity lives everywhere
It's on days like these lives are torn
And the pure good-hearted,
Despair.

...wow...very good... ๐Ÿ‘†

...I'm interested in things looked at from a different angle....nice wordplay...

D, Speakerboxx has two x's ๐Ÿ˜‰

mine only came with one.......I want my money back.....

Getting short changed
and choosing to find
the rest of my losses
is loosing my mind

Looking through wholes
is half of the issue
my eyes are half open
and soaking the tissue

Was handed my hand
and it's void of the aces
the kings and the queens
will not show their faces

Miles from the finish
with cinder-block shoes
my pockets are empty
I've got nothing to loose

Originally posted by D-Double
Getting short changed
and choosing to find
the rest of my losses
is loosing my mind

Looking through wholes
is half of the issue
my eyes are half open
and soaking the tissue

Was handed my hand
and it's void of the aces
the kings and the queens
will not show their faces

Miles from the finish
with cinder-block shoes
my pockets are empty
I've got nothing to loose

Getting short changed
and choosing to find
the rest of my losses
is loosing my mind

Looking through wholes
is half of the issue
my eyes are half open
and soaking the tissue

Fantastic word play here D!! clapping The use of repetetive emphasis on phonologic letters and word sounds was really effective.

And I was assuming 'Speakerbox' referred to Outkast? Could be wrong ๐Ÿ˜ฎ

Originally posted by Syren
The use of repetetive emphasis on phonologic letters and word sounds was really effective.

.....say what?.... ๐Ÿคจ...... ๐Ÿ˜„

....Thanks, Sy!.....

...I just like words with "box" at the end....

Speakerbox....Beatbox....Rockbox.....Smashbox.....Hotbox....flirt

I especially liked the first verse of that last one DD!

...Thank ya, Tricky..... ๐Ÿ™‚

the fake soul
It's hard to live behind a mask,
Making people believe your happy is a very hard task,
Days go by as my life gets worse,
Constantly hiding my dreaded curse,
People always believe what they see,
But they don't know whats going on for me,
My life is corrupt on the inside,
I cant hold it much longer i cannot hide,
But yet i cannot spread my feelings about I,
Instead the reflected light of the razors shines to my eye,
The movement of the razor relieves my soul,
It can help my secret but still will never be told.

For my Kmc friends

My insecurities are my fault.
My love for you is yours.
My heart is locked up like a vault
but with writing, it's a sealed door.

You can't understand the pain I feel,
nor will you realize why.
I'd try and explain, but it's so surreal,
Hurts so much, it makes me want to cry.

I think my lack of honesty ruined what little we had,
it's an error I often make.
But it's not that which makes me sad,
cause the truth I cannot fake

Shes losing faith,
Shes fallen from grace,
Looking for lost dreams,
Trying to find a place.

Of all the faces that she sees,
No one to help her,
Shes begging for a helping hand,
She needs someone to listen,
Stop and look.. shes begging on her knees.

Tears fill her eyes,
And no one listens,
No one to possibly hear her crys..
All she has to turn to,
This sharp friend,
This friend that glistens.

Will anyone ever help her?
Will anyone ever notice?
This fallen angel,
Emotions inside silently stir..

Shes losing faith,
Shes fallen from grace,
Looking for lost dreams,
Trying to find a place.

They will forgive and forget with time. And those who dont need to get off the forum and get a life.

I don't knwo if anyone will be able to relate to this... I wrote it for a friend who was self-harming. They wouldn't talk to anyone about why they were so upset, so I wrote this for them. At the bottom, in a footnote, I wrote,
"I'm up to talk, if you need it."

It's weird, because so many of my friends come to me for help, and then I don't have anyone to help me. So, finally, I just chose someone I met on holiday for like 3 days, and I poured out my soul over MSN. It really helped, for some reason, talking to someone I knew didn't know any of the people I was talking about. Anyway, here's the poem.

Problems, overflowing.
Pain, filling the soul.
Blood, offers relief.
Cuts, numb and clean.
Problems, still there.
Observers, filled with grief.

Circle, of blood and pain
Escape, talking in anonymity.
Friends, honest and true.
Razor, doesn't really help.
Exit, found in love.
Help, we'll give it to you.

I wrote this one for them too. I called it Smile.

Cummon, smile,
try and give us a grin,
You know you will,
You know you wanna laugh.
Please. For me?
Go back to the way you used to be.

I loved that you.
Always happy,
a figure of joy.
I'm not sure what happened,
But please, please.
Smile.