Poetical Justice

CK, those poems were very personal... Is the masked person you?

If so, I applaud your courage.

Trick, your last poem almost made me cry,cryI also have a friend who was always happy and fun but now she hardly ever smiles or laughs anymore. I feel really bad cause I dont know what to do to help her. Hope u keep writing.

Ask her what's happened. Have you tried just talking?

Yea definelty, but talking doesnt seem to help her, I know whats bothering her but theres nothing I can do to help, its out of my control 🙁

Hmm, my first attempt since...ever.

Moving On

I used to think you cared
for all the good times we shared
I see I was mistaken
as you leave me alone and shaken
how much blood will it take
to leave this world full of hate

Enough tears I've shed
it's getting to my head
you're as good as dead
it's the only thought that helps
this feeling I've felt
the delusion that something
keeps you from coming
back to me
and the world I see

I tried so hard
to fix what was broken
it's harder and harder
as less words are spoken
day by day hope fades away
all I'm left with is this burning memory
of when you meant something to me

So long
It's time for me to move on

for your first try, nice ✅

Originally posted by Trickster

I wrote this one for them too. I called it Smile.

Cummon, smile,
try and give us a grin,
You know you will,
You know you wanna laugh.
Please. For me?
Go back to the way you used to be.

I loved that you.
Always happy,
a figure of joy.
I'm not sure what happened,
But please, please.
Smile.

...good stuff, brutha..... 👆

Sarah, your poetry is effective and deep, it always stirs something within me 😬 Also, please don't make friends with that glistening sharpness, I'm here for you. And I won't make you bleed, or give you lifelong scars cry I've been there, I won't allow you to go.....

Trickster, those poems about self harming moved me beyond belief. I had the same reaction as Charmed, I almost cried. Wonderful clapping

Arachnoid, for your first attempt (you lie!! Too good!!) it was pretty darn excellent 😄 Advice would be to move away from a definite rhyme scheme, poetry doesn't need it. Write the words as they come, you shouldn't need to move words around too much, just let them lay gently on the page... breathe your thoughts onto the screen before you.

D, what I said before;

The use of repetitive emphasis on phonologic letters and word sounds was really effective.

You used words that rhymed, not just wholly, but their individual letters fitted together like a jigsaw, it gave the poem (especially those verses I pointed out) a real sense of unity yet perfect definition 😉

The rhyming is there because it was originally going to be a song. Some of the rhymes sound forced when it isn't sung to instruments, I know.

Originally posted by Syren
Sarah, your poetry is effective and deep, it always stirs something within me 😬 Also, please don't make friends with that glistening sharpness, I'm here for you. And I won't make you bleed, or give you lifelong scars cry I've been there, I won't allow you to go.....

It wasn't meant to sound like a suidcede attempt it was a way of expression cutting all the bad away from me so that i could be accepted. I would never cut my self...(im afraid of pain)

This is the lastest poem i have written...It took me forever to find the right words. And I must say all my blood sweat and tears went into this one.

This poem is dedicated to Kosta and doobs! They know why!

Starting Again?

I have felt the many delays between,
Yet still I have wished for more.
But I am scared that my walls will crumble again
Because of everything that happened before.

I am afraid of being hurt,
I am afraid of hurting you.
I wish I could tell you just what it is
That‘s keeping me from what I have to do.

I am willing to take a risk
And I pray that you’ll understand.
I’ll never leave you out of anything again,
So please keep holding my hand.

I need to let you see
That I love you so much.
I want to go back to the way we were;
Loving each other and such.

Never before have I felt this way,
Felt that I‘m scared to believe.
Guess I’m afraid of what has changed,
Afraid that you will leave.

I could not bear to go through pain again
After all that we’ve been through.
After all the hurtful roads we’ve taken,
I’m still holding on to you.

I can promise you that I never meant to hurt you,
Could not ever even if I tried.
Because I have searched for someone like you,
To love and stay by my side.

So today I’m whispering these words of regret;
I’m sorry and hope we can still be together.
Forget everything that has happened
For I can’t live without you forever.

So please forgive me for all I‘ve done,
And let us together move on past this bend.
Take another chance and risk starting again,
Because I love you and will until the end.

Thank you, sweetheart....that means alot to me...

....polish your halo, dust off your wings, and fly.....

JACKSON

you've always been there for me,
right from the very start.
you picked my up when i was down,
thats when you stole my heart.
and everything you've done for me,
it makes me love you so.
i care for you so much my boy,
how much you'll never know.
if i ever need someone,
i know that you'll be there.
and for what it's worth baby,
i know you really care

clapping Very moving Sarah ✅

Misha, your stuff is very good 😄

Thanks Syrenna!

spankyou syren 😮 😊

Sarah, through any bend, up any mountain, through any bump in the road, and any storm, I'll be there, angel. I promise.

I love you boo.

SUGAR TREAT
ever since the day we met,
you've been so sweet to me,
all these things i wont forget,
they seem too good to be.
and if you really want to know,
the reason i love you,
i never have to act a show,
for you to do the things you do.
i dont think that anyone,
has ever been this sweet,
this is why i call you hun,
my special sugar treat.

love your poem misha

Ditto Sarah, to what Kossie said ;d