Coldfire's Poetry Stuff

Started by Coldfire90 pages

k guys here's a little something for ya... it's my 'I'm so f***ing pissed writing' lol 😛 I can hardly read it LOL

But here it is typed out so you CAN read it 😛 But seriously I think I wander around too much 😬

New Beginning

Snatching glances of the world around me,
Through the haze clouding my vision,
The thick, dark, menacing membrane,
Coalescing around this tired, weary body,
Heightened senses come along with the haze,
Now it seems I can detect the smallest things,
Whether they be sounds, smells, or movements,\,
It’s almost like I’ve become a completely new, superior person,
And this I find extremely satisfying,
For exasperated have I become with,
The old, tedious life I’ve been living for so long,
I’m sick of being, feeling unworthy and inferior,
Like the scum found on the bottom of someone’s shoe,
But no more of this will I tolerate,
With a new sense of wellbeing comes something else as well,
A sense of purpose, a way to end all this pain and sorrow,
Because now I can do anything, I’m invincible,
Free to cause havoc on a world turned cold and cruel,
Taking the law into my own hands,
I’ll be sure to see that no one ever feels like I did again,
For the perpetrator of this crime will have to deal with me,
And whether or not they survive this encounter,
Still remains to be seen, to be pondered,
Though I do pity the foolish person who unearths,
This horrific rage that runs through my veins,
For surely they will not survive long after that,
But do you think I will grieve for them,
They who delight in hurting others?
The answer, my dear, is in the question.

Originally posted by Coldfire
well.... not really either lol. I just can't seem to think of anything to write.... but I got an idea after readin Will's stuff so we'll see what comes of that 🙂

oh no.... haha.... hopefully a joyful idea... my stuff has hit a morbid strain... is all i have for a while.

Originally posted by Coldfire
But here it is typed out so you CAN read it 😛 But seriously I think I wander around too much 😬

New Beginning

Snatching glances of the world around me,
Through the haze clouding my vision,
The thick, dark, menacing membrane,
Coalescing around this tired, weary body,
Heightened senses come along with the haze,
Now it seems I can detect the smallest things,
Whether they be sounds, smells, or movements,\,
It’s almost like I’ve become a completely new, superior person,
And this I find extremely satisfying,
For exasperated have I become with,
The old, tedious life I’ve been living for so long,
I’m sick of being, feeling unworthy and inferior,
Like the scum found on the bottom of someone’s shoe,
But no more of this will I tolerate,
With a new sense of wellbeing comes something else as well,
A sense of purpose, a way to end all this pain and sorrow,
Because now I can do anything, I’m invincible,
Free to cause havoc on a world turned cold and cruel,
Taking the law into my own hands,
I’ll be sure to see that no one ever feels like I did again,
For the perpetrator of this crime will have to deal with me,
And whether or not they survive this encounter,
Still remains to be seen, to be pondered,
Though I do pity the foolish person who unearths,
This horrific rage that runs through my veins,
For surely they will not survive long after that,
But do you think I will grieve for them,
They who delight in hurting others?
The answer, my dear, is in the question.

well, rage and a burning passion is what this conveys to me, and nicely done too! haha yeah, handwriting goes to $#!! when you get emotional... why i type most of mine.... hahahah! clap excellent.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
oh no.... haha.... hopefully a joyful idea... my stuff has hit a morbid strain... is all i have for a while.

well it's not really a joyful one lol but terribly morbid either 😛
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
well, rage and a burning passion is what this conveys to me, and nicely done too! haha yeah, handwriting goes to $#!! when you get emotional... why i type most of mine.... hahahah! clap excellent.

lol 😛 Well my writing goes like that from time to time, whether I'm emotional or just don't feel like writing haha. Thankies 😊

Originally posted by Coldfire
But here it is typed out so you CAN read it 😛 But seriously I think I wander around too much 😬

New Beginning

Snatching glances of the world around me,
Through the haze clouding my vision,
The thick, dark, menacing membrane,
Coalescing around this tired, weary body,
Heightened senses come along with the haze,
Now it seems I can detect the smallest things,
Whether they be sounds, smells, or movements,\,
It’s almost like I’ve become a completely new, superior person,
And this I find extremely satisfying,
For exasperated have I become with,
The old, tedious life I’ve been living for so long,
I’m sick of being, feeling unworthy and inferior,
Like the scum found on the bottom of someone’s shoe,
But no more of this will I tolerate,
With a new sense of wellbeing comes something else as well,
A sense of purpose, a way to end all this pain and sorrow,
Because now I can do anything, I’m invincible,
Free to cause havoc on a world turned cold and cruel,
Taking the law into my own hands,
I’ll be sure to see that no one ever feels like I did again,
For the perpetrator of this crime will have to deal with me,
And whether or not they survive this encounter,
Still remains to be seen, to be pondered,
Though I do pity the foolish person who unearths,
This horrific rage that runs through my veins,
For surely they will not survive long after that,
But do you think I will grieve for them,
They who delight in hurting others?
The answer, my dear, is in the question.

Cold. Cold. Cold. Such potential. Such rawness...You can do so much better, sweetie! I read the angst, I see emotions. But the power is lost in the redundancy. I luv yah girl, and you're better than this....

Just because I said "I luv yah" doesn't mean I don't. HAHAHAHAHA! Are yah scared yet?!?!?

Agreed... the intensity of that piece burns but not like a raging fire... it could be perfect. But it's damn close 😉

Heh, yeah Cold... haha.

Nun, shame for frightening the girls away.... 😆

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Cold. Cold. Cold. Such potential. Such rawness...You can do so much better, sweetie! I read the angst, I see emotions. But the power is lost in the redundancy. I luv yah girl, and you're better than this....

Just because I said "I luv yah" doesn't mean I don't. HAHAHAHAHA! Are yah scared yet?!?!?


haha I told you Will 😛 No you haven't scared me yet lol. Yeah I know it's not my best, I didn't even really like it lol. Me thinks I shall work on it when I get the time
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Heh, yeah Cold... haha.

Nun, shame for frightening the girls away.... 😆


lol 😛

Originally posted by Coldfire
No you haven't scared me yet lol.

What!?!? Well then allow me to strip and see if that works!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! You know love me, so say it!!!

ugh.... no stripping when other men are present... 😂

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
What!?!? Well then allow me to strip and see if that works!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! You know love me, so say it!!!

😂 Of course I luv ya 😛
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
ugh.... no stripping when other men are present... 😂

hysterical

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
ugh.... no stripping when other men are present... 😂
Then close your eyes, lest your door swings the other way at my manliness!! HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!
Originally posted by Coldfire
😂 Of course I luv ya 😛

hysterical

I knew that you did!!!! What took you so damn long?!?!?

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Then close your eyes, lest your door swings the other way at my manliness!! HAHAHAHAHA!!!!! I knew that you did!!!! What took you so damn long?!?!?

hysterical

lol I dunno, you tell me 😛

Originally posted by Coldfire
hysterical

lol I dunno, you tell me 😛

er...Because you were afraid to admit your true feelings of absolute and mad love for me because then you'd realise that I've always been the one?!?!? Yes? No?

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
er...Because you were afraid to admit your true feelings of absolute and mad love for me because then you'd realise that I've always been the one?!?!? Yes? No?

lol how'd you ever guess 😛 🙄

Originally posted by Coldfire
lol how'd you ever guess 😛 🙄
AHAHAHAHA!!!! It's in your poetry! So sly, so subtle...and the whole time you were thinking of me...I know! I am, quite irresistable!

Now tell me you love me, and the world will be all right!!!

Hey everyone

Originally posted by vaya_the_elf
Hey everyone
Hush you!!! I'm having a conversation with my future 2nd wife!!! AHAHAHAHA!!! I joke!

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
AHAHAHAHA!!!! It's in your poetry! So sly, so subtle...and the whole time you were thinking of me...I know! I am, quite irresistable!

Now tell me you love me, and the world will be all right!!!


lol sorry hun, but I can only say that to one person 🙂
Originally posted by vaya_the_elf
Hey everyone

hello vaya 😊