Originally posted by Tha C-Master
enslaved does great poems and they're seldom happy, and I've seen your stuff...
Man, you are a poetic princess, nice job.
Here's one I wrote with the help of a friend of mine... he's not on this site (he's on deviantart), but I couldn't have done it without him 😊 So Richard, thanks a bunch 😄
Lonely
Many nights alone she’s lain,
Her sobbing has gone on in vain,
And now she cannot find the light.
Because she’s given up the fight
The darkness of the night consumes her
The past tries to return and rule her
But she’s fighting on inside,
This internal struggle she can’t hide,
Seeing the world in a melancholy state,
No one to confide in, she only sees the hate,
Her strength it fails with each passing day,
She wishes it didn’t have to be this way,
Why is it she is destined to be alone,
Suffering these emotions to which she’s prone?
The memories they come rushing back,
She cringes under the onslaught of their attack,
Wishing that someone would bring her release,
Give her some respite, surround her in peace,
Wiping the tears from her haggard face,
She sinks into the darkness of night’s embrace.
Originally posted by ColdfireIt's better! It flows nicely! Now make it better! Should you wish some suggestion, I'm free this Saturday around 8 o'clock! Care to join me for dinner?!?!
why thank you hun 😊 hugHere's one I wrote with the help of a friend of mine... he's not on this site (he's on deviantart), but I couldn't have done it without him 😊 So Richard, thanks a bunch 😄
Lonely
Many nights alone she’s lain,
Her sobbing has gone on in vain,
And now she cannot find the light.
Because she’s given up the fight
The darkness of the night consumes her
The past tries to return and rule her
But she’s fighting on inside,
This internal struggle she can’t hide,
Seeing the world in a melancholy state,
No one to confide in, she only sees the hate,
Her strength it fails with each passing day,
She wishes it didn’t have to be this way,
Why is it she is destined to be alone,
Suffering these emotions to which she’s prone?
The memories they come rushing back,
She cringes under the onslaught of their attack,
Wishing that someone would bring her release,
Give her some respite, surround her in peace,
Wiping the tears from her haggard face,
She sinks into the darkness of night’s embrace.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
Originally posted by Coldfire
why thank you hun 😊 hugHere's one I wrote with the help of a friend of mine... he's not on this site (he's on deviantart), but I couldn't have done it without him 😊 So Richard, thanks a bunch 😄
Lonely
Many nights alone she’s lain,
Her sobbing has gone on in vain,
And now she cannot find the light.
Because she’s given up the fight
The darkness of the night consumes her
The past tries to return and rule her
But she’s fighting on inside,
This internal struggle she can’t hide,
Seeing the world in a melancholy state,
No one to confide in, she only sees the hate,
Her strength it fails with each passing day,
She wishes it didn’t have to be this way,
Why is it she is destined to be alone,
Suffering these emotions to which she’s prone?
The memories they come rushing back,
She cringes under the onslaught of their attack,
Wishing that someone would bring her release,
Give her some respite, surround her in peace,
Wiping the tears from her haggard face,
She sinks into the darkness of night’s embrace.
Originally posted by NunYahBidness
It's better! It flows nicely! Now make it better! Should you wish some suggestion, I'm free this Saturday around 8 o'clock! Care to join me for dinner?!?!HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
nice poem, this has to be one of my favorite right now
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
I really like the poem Cold. Really. Heh... man. You and I, same cloth, same cut. 😂 Just remebering the good times some nights helps. Sometimes...As sure as the sun rises and sets, your prince will come. Just gotta be patient, and that sucks, I know. 🙂
Originally posted by Coldfire
😂 Make it better? Sheesh you always want so much from me 😛 How, pray tell, should I make it better??aww thanks 😊
Well I just may have found mine... we'll have too see hmmm? 😉 But that poem wasn't about me.... just some sad, depressed girl I guess *shrugs*
Originally posted by Fëanor
yeah!!! post them...your other one is good, but i couldn't help wonder hmm
Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
thats ok. i like all your poems so i'm sure these will be good too. so yea, post them anyway