Coldfire's Poetry Stuff

Originally posted by Coldfire
K here's the first one... it's kind of odd... *shrugs*

Worthless

FAILURE.
IMCOMPETENCE.
DISGRACE.
Can’t do anything right,
Always screwing up,
WORTHLESS,
WORTHLESS,
WORTHLESS.
Why is this happening to me?!?
I want to scream aloud,
I hate this,
I just hate it so!!
Feeling so low,
Oh the pain,
Sometimes I welcome it,
Sometimes I fear it,
What is wrong with me?!?
My creativity is gone,
My creations colourless,
Emotionless, meaningless,
But I need to get it back,
Just need it in order to be me,
For I have nothing else,
Can be nothing else,
Oh, take me away,
Away from all this sh*t,
I can’t bear to be here anymore.

And what? No hugs for me??! I see how it is! FINE!!!! NO MORE MR. NICE GUY!!!!

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Nice attempt at freestyle poetry I suppose. And I mean that sincerely, so take it with a pinch of salt and let simmer!!!!

And what? No hugs for me??! I see how it is! FINE!!!! NO MORE MR. NICE GUY!!!!

lol aww I sowwy here's a hug just for you hug

Originally posted by Coldfire
lol thanks... I think 😛

lol aww I sowwy here's a hug just for you hug

I'm slowly breakin' you down, aren't I?! HEHEHEHEEE!!!!

i wanna send this to my gf can someone just tell me whats missing>??!

My love

Never doubt my love for you for it shines whenever I look at you
Never for once think i like you less for it is the opposite I will love you more every second of every day my baby
Even if we cannot be together deep inside me u are right nxt to me
When I am in trouble you pull me trough my baby
My love for you shines in the deepest oceans,widest galaxys,darkest jungles,hardest rocks Baby nothing can ever stop me loving you when i see you smile my heart skips a beat When I see u love it makes my heart race when im the one u love my heart completely stops askin u to take it my baby u stolen my heart today and i never want it back
even tho we are too far apart we could never be closer just smell the air baby tht beautiful fragrance is our love rising above all odds baby the simplest way to say this is i love you

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Don't think!

I'm slowly breakin' you down, aren't I?! HEHEHEHEEE!!!!

Originally posted by snehin
i wanna send this to my gf can someone just tell me whats missing>??!

My love

Never doubt my love for you for it shines whenever I look at you
Never for once think i like you less for it is the opposite I will love you more every second of every day my baby
Even if we cannot be together deep inside me u are right nxt to me
When I am in trouble you pull me trough my baby
My love for you shines in the deepest oceans,widest galaxys,darkest jungles,hardest rocks Baby nothing can ever stop me loving you when i see you smile my heart skips a beat When I see u love it makes my heart race when im the one u love my heart completely stops askin u to take it my baby u stolen my heart today and i never want it back
even tho we are too far apart we could never be closer just smell the air baby tht beautiful fragrance is our love rising above all odds baby the simplest way to say this is i love you

Originally posted by Coldfire
lol how so??

Originally posted by Coldfire
lol how so??

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Don't think!

I'm slowly breakin' you down, aren't I?! HEHEHEHEEE!!!!

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Yeah! The use of periods, commas, exclamation points, question marks, colons, semi-colons, proper spelling, grammar, and heartfelt emotion to start. Keep asking, you'll get the answer sooner or later!!! But I can do later if you like! GRR!!

Originally posted by snehin
i wrote it with a lotta emotion i just wanna know how to make it clear to her tht i love her

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Just that!!!

Originally posted by snehin
just what?

i already did i want the poem to show tht in the poem i want it clear i love her

And that proves what? That you love her more? That it's more genuine? Get real man. It takes more than poetic proses to show a girl/woman how much a man loves them!!! I wouldn't even call that icing on the cake! Be original FFS!!!

no she knows i love her i just wanna send her smthin tht she might like

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Yeah! The use of periods, commas, exclamation points, question marks, colons, semi-colons, proper spelling, grammar, and heartfelt emotion to start. Keep asking, you'll get the answer sooner or later!!! But I can do later if you like! GRR!!

Originally posted by snehin
wats this now do isinse some sparks

Well I'm done! Good luck to yah! Hope it works out, if not...well, don't say I didn't say so!!!

So Cold!!! About those poems? Oh why mince words! How about us? HAHAHAA!!! You know I'm just playing, right? Right? No? Oh for the love of God! Fine! I love you too!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! (sorry, couldn't resist)

wats with the HAHAHAHAHA thing?

Originally posted by snehin
wats with the HAHAHAHAHA thing?

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
Well I'm done! Good luck to yah! Hope it works out, if not...well, don't say I didn't say so!!!

So Cold!!! About those poems? Oh why mince words! How about us? HAHAHAA!!! You know I'm just playing, right? Right? No? Oh for the love of God! Fine! I love you too!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! (sorry, couldn't resist)

Lol of course I know you're playing 😄

Havent been here for a while, how are your poems goin Amber?