Coldfire's Poetry Stuff

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
haha wow. put it to a quick beat and it rocks like amazing! very cool!

Originally posted by Coldfire
K here's part of one I'm working on... I kinda got stuck tho grrr

Never say I love you,
Lest it bites you in the ass,
It’s a foolish notion to believe,
Anything good will come to pass.

Pain and anger and sorrow,
Will be all that you will find,
This combination of emotions,
Is enough to blow your mind.

Never trust your heart to someone,
Lest they smash it beyond repair,
What you thought that they were like,
No longer matters; they don’t care.

awsome

Originally posted by Coldfire
K here's part of one I'm working on... I kinda got stuck tho grrr

Never say I love you,
Lest it bites you in the ass,
It’s a foolish notion to believe,
Anything good will come to pass.

Pain and anger and sorrow,
Will be all that you will find,
This combination of emotions,
Is enough to blow your mind.

Never trust your heart to someone,
Lest they smash it beyond repair,
What you thought that they were like,
No longer matters; they don’t care.

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
awsome

Originally posted by Fëanor
i'm impressed!

Originally posted by Coldfire
thanks 😊

you are? 🤨

Originally posted by Fëanor
very much so! is that....a problem?

Originally posted by Coldfire
of course not 😛 I was wondering why lol

it's good, the format written well...and the theme overall sticks throughout! it's short and too the point! no redundant use of words to say a simple little line such as "I hurt yada yada" just good is all....

Originally posted by Fëanor
well since you asked...i'll tell you why.

it's good, the format written well...and the theme overall sticks throughout! it's short and too the point! no redundant use of words to say a simple little line such as "I hurt yada yada" just good is all....

you should add two more quatrains to complete it IMO...but that's up to you. i actually like this one amber, it's really good is all...

not that i didn't like the others or anything, its just...that, um....oh nvm!

Originally posted by Fëanor
you should add two more quatrains to complete it IMO...but that's up to you. i actually like this one amber, it's really good is all...

not that i didn't like the others or anything, its just...that, um....oh nvm!

lol it's jus that what?

Originally posted by Coldfire
✅ I was thinkin of doing that... so I will 😊

lol it's jus that what?

Originally posted by Fëanor
i forget...i was distracted by something or other.

😛

i did? ohwait! don't answer that!!!

Originally posted by Fëanor
i did? ohwait! don't answer that!!!

i am NOT silly....aaaaaaamburr! 😛

Originally posted by Fëanor
i am NOT silly....aaaaaaamburr! 😛

Originally posted by Coldfire
😂 Mmhmm SURE you're not.... and I'm a Miss America Beauty Pageant winner 🙄

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
you cant be, your from canadia. 😂 dev

Originally posted by Coldfire
Exactly! And it's CanadA not CanadIA 😂

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
from whos pov? from where i sit it's canadIA ! hysterical and go ahead, make fun of the US, i dont care. I am not from there !!!! 😂 well, in my heart anyways....