Have no fear for I am hear and have already written several follow-up stories. I actually wrote all of this a while back, but I didn't think anyone would like it so I was keeping it to myself. I guess I will share. Give me a day or so to protect the rest of it.(So I control it legally) and I will post more.
I haven't written the entire thing yet, but I arleady have the main plot down. If anyone wants to contribute, please PM me.
A little heads up guys!
Ok, Im making a cool star wars story that I hope you guys will like. It has a few of my made up characters and is based after ROTJ. It's probably being planned out and created as your reading this. There are 3 episodes and the first is almost done. So you could call it my version of the next three Star Wars episodes if Lucas ever made them.
How about them apples? Anyway, here is my idea for ep 7, 8, 9. It is just a basic outline, is missing many, many details, and is the first draft.
Fifteen years after the Second Battle of Coruscant, Luke Jedi Academy is flourishing. It has prosphered and now has over fivehundred Jedi Knights. Ben Skywalker, Luke’s Son, is now eighteen and has shown an extreme afluency with the force. He became a Jedi Knight at age fifteen when he amazingly saved thousands of lives when space pirates left six rancor on the outskirts of a heavily populated city.
Episode 7: A New Sith
Luke is teaching a group of students to use TK when the academy is attacked by some unknown group of warriors who use swords that are impenatreble to lightsabers. There are approximatly seven hundred attackers, but they are driven off. Ben realizes that he has the potential to become one of the greatest Jedi ever. Ben begins to want power.
Luke has still been fervrently searching for the new Chosen One. He has looked for the last fifteen years, but has not found him. He is beginning to wonder about what Revan had told him because he hasn’t heard from him in fourteen years and still has heard nothing from Yoda or Obi-wan. He has used the knowledge that Revan gave him and has become several times more powerful than he was when he fought with Revan.
One month exactly after the attack, Revan visits Luke. Obi-wan and Yoda are with him. Four others are there also, but Luke doesn’t know who they are. They tell him that there is something vital about to happen with the Chosen One, but they still are unsure who he is. They are talking when Kyp Durron begins to scream. Luke runs to the main courtyard and sees Kyp lying on the ground with smoke rising off his body. Kyp lightsaber is lying in peices a few feet from him. Standing about ten feet from Kyp is Exar Kun. The full Exar Kun, he has returned as more than a spirit. He is a person with a horrible dark aura around him.
He begins to speak. He talks about Kyp failing him. About how Kyp is weak. Luke walks yells to Exar to back away from Kyp. Exar says back that he is more powerful. He begins to talk about how easily he drained Luke’s life essence when he was a mere force ghost. He talks about how le will destroy all of the Jedi here and then make a new Sith Empire and destroy the Republic(the Galatic Federation of Free Alliances was reenamed the Republic two years after the second battle of Coruscant).
Another figure appears. It is Ulic Qel-Droma. He says he will stand beside the new Order of Jedi. Exar knows that he can’t defeat Luke and Ulic. He flees into the forest. He has gone to find away to make the temple refocus his power. For some reason they no longer did that. Once, at the time right before his concealment in the temple, he would have used the power that flew into him through the temples and destroyed them. He had managed to fight off several hundred Jedi with the help of the temples.
Exar on his way out unleases a force storm. Luke rushes over to protect the already weakened Kyp from the blast. Revan reapers. I’m sorry I was not able to stand beside you in that encounter. I had to help subvert the energy of these temples away from Kun. If he had been able to acess the energy of these temples, he would have destroyed you and Ulic.
Luke uses the force to check if Ben or Mara were injured by the force storm. Bam, Luke’s heart began to race. Mara was fine, but Ben was gone. Luke was unable to feel his presence. Luke then sent one of the Jedi that had been near Luke when the force storm had hit and to run and get some of the healers to come help the Jedi over here who were injured by it.
Later that night.
Ben is asking Exar to teach him. Exar says he dosen’t want help from one of the weak Jedi. Ben gets angry and attackes him. Exar blocks each of his blows with ease, but is surprised by the power from one so young. He strikes Ben with force lightning for a few seconds and Ben blocks it, but then falls to his knees. Exar walks over to him. You will serve me now. Ben says, “Yes, my master.” Exar smiles. A New Darth.
Episode 8: The Time of Changes
A few weeks after ep7.
Luke is talking with Mara, Kyp, Corran, Kyle, Han, and Leia about this new threat and the whereabouts of Ben. Kyp is very held back at this meeting. Kyle volunteers to go look for him. Jaina and Lowbacca will go with him. Afterwards Kyp talks to Luke in private. He tells Luke that he will be leaving the academy for a long time, maybe forever.Luke asks him why. Kyp tells him that he is going into self imposed Exile because he feels that he is not the Jedi he’s supposed to be. That he is to weak. Luke hearing this thinks about Jacen, who also went into exile about eight years ago. Thinking about the past reminds him of Tahiri. He feels sorrow, but blocks it out for it will only lead to despair and that is the path to the darkside. Tahiri died only four months after the second battle of Coruscant. She apparently went crazy because of her intergration and ran through the streets killing people. She attacked Corran and was killed in the fight. Kyp left before dawn, a few hours later.
Luke goes to bed. He then teaches more people students in the morning. The first Yuuzhan Vong student arrives at the academy that day. There are thousands of protest becasue the general public still dosen’t trust the Yuuzhan Vong even though they have been only a help to society since the war. They did most of the reconstruction after the war even though they had trouble with the equipment for a long time, but eventually they got used to it.
The Yuuzhan Vong student shows an affinity for the force that is far above the average person at the academy. Nohg Anor, son of Nom Anor was the student. Luke let Saba finish teaching his class and he went to give the new student a tour of the place.
Revan told Luke through a voice much like Obi-wan had told Luke during the attack on the first Death Star that he needed to talk with him as soon as possible. Luke said he would get this done as soon as possible then.
Luke immediatly liked the guy. He was the same age as Ben. He wasn’t a mean evil Yuuzhan Vong like they were still described in the media. Luke knew he wouldn’t be, but he still was nicer than Luke expexted. The tour took about an hour. Luke then asked Corran to begin to show him some of the basics. Luke then slipped away to his room to talk to Revan.
Revan appeared and told Luke that they realised there would be two Chosen Ones. Futhermore, this was the first time that two Chosen Ones had ever lived within the same hundred years of eachother, much less at the same time. Revan said they had found out who these knew Chosen One’s are. It was that new Yuuzhan Vong student and Ben. Revan then asked where Ben was. He didn’t sense him. Luke told him he was no longer at the academy he had disappered. Yoda appeared, he has fallen to the darkside. He has gone to trian under Exar Kun. Obi-wan then appeared. He said one phrase, “Darth Vader All Over Again.”
Exar’s and Ben’s hideout.
Ben had become twice as powerful as he was when he left the academy without the “item” he found. Exar had been very preoccupied recently and had sent Ben on severa; missions. Ben had done many things while he was out there. One thing was collect three kyber crystals. He kept these secret from Exar. Exar gave Ben a Sith Amulet one day that greatly increased his power. That with the help of the kyber crystal made him almost as good as Exar Kun for he had found one more thing while he was out. Well, actually, it was given to him by a force ghost. He had Tulak Hords holocron. Tulak gave him it for some reason unknown. Apparently he made another after Revan got it.
Three years passed between ep8 and ep9. During this time:
Ben kept all of these things secret from Exar. Luke at the academy continued to teach, focusing a lot of his time on teaching Nohg Anor. Kyle found Exar, but was killed by an unkown cause. The Jedi were never able to determine where Ben and Exar where hiding. Over four-fifths of the Jedi were killed by unkown sources. The Cult of Ragnos reveals itself once more. It has been gaining strength since they were originaly disbanded over fifteen years earlier. There are over two thousand of them. Kyp is still in exile. Jacen has returned from exile. Ssi-Ruuk attack the Chiss.Jaina goes with Jag to help the Chiss. Han, who apparently has gained some force affinity, theorised from spending so much time around Jedi or maybe from when he recieved a blood transfusion from Luke, has gone to help the Chiss aswell. yadayadayadayada........
Episode 9: ******* **** **** *****
ep9 is currently classified. Well, I’m actually just haven’t leaglly protected it so I’m not going to post it on an open forum.
this story is sent about 300 hunderd years after ROTJ so please just tell me what you think its only the first chapter
Chapter 1
Flo-Han was awaked from his sleep by a buzz he knew what it meant his master was calling him. He sat up in bed and looked around him the room was silent his robes lay on the floor. As he stood up the clod floor give him a shock he walked in to his washing chambers and looked in the mirror. He was an average sized man about 5’ 10 with shoulder length brown hair and a beard; he was wearing a grey undergarment with yellow stripes on the arms. Flo-Han walked out of the bathroom and put his robes on they were a dull brown with a white tunic he walked out of his room and down the hallway of the Jedi enclave. As he entered the great hall he was greeted by possibly the best Jedi he had ever seen he name was Obi Skywalker he like his ancestors before him had great knowledge of the force and with a lightsaber he could use the force in ways that other Jedi could not ever imagine. He strode there looking at the Jedi master wearing only a black tunic his power was unbelievable he seemed to be one with the force he had discovered powers that had been forgotten threw time. Obi spoke “you and your padawan will accompany myself, master Quart and his padawan to the planet Korriban the sith homeworld
Oh and good morning master Jafan”
“I wish you wouldn’t do that master and good morning also why are we going to Korriban” replied Flo-Han
“Do what master Jafan and I will explain everything when we get there”
“Wake me up with that buzzing in my head”
“Sorry master Jafan go and wake your padawan up and meet me and the other two at the hanger bay” said Obi
Master skywalker walked around Flo-Han and said “and may the force be with you” as he walked out of the great hall Flo-Han followed behind him.
Master skywalker turned left at and Flo-Han turned right he walked into his padawans quarters he looked at a chair at the desk his padawan spun round to face him. He had blond hair cut short with a long braided piece hanging from the left side he was about 5’9 and dressed in a dull bronze coloured tunic
“What are you doing my padawan?”
“I’m writing master”
“Why do u do such primitive things my padawan?”
“Master as I have told you before I enjoy it, it helps me to concentrate which helps me in my teachings someday I wish to be as good as master skywalker”
“We all do but at the moment we have more pressing matters at hand master Skywalker has request that we accompany him and master Quart to Korriban we have to meet him at the hanger bay so let’s get going” the two Jedi walked along the hallways of the enclave until they got to the hanger bay they walked inside only to see master Skywalker sat on a box with two lightsaber hilts floating around his head
“Were is master Quart” said Flo-Han
“On his way I was told” replied Obi
at that moment the hanger bay doors opened an a small brown Jedi walked in he was around 1’7 and was wearing a black tunic next to him was a Jedi dressed in brown robes with a brown tunic the hood was up and you could not see his face they boarded the ship and the hanger bay doors opened the ship rose and turned 75%. The engines whistled and the ship flew out of the hanger.
Originally posted by Darth_Glentract
How about them apples? Anyway, here is my idea for ep 7, 8, 9. It is just a basic outline, is missing many, many details, and is the first draft.Fifteen years after the Second Battle of Coruscant...
...ep9 is currently classified. Well, I’m actually just haven’t leaglly protected it so I’m not going to post it on an open forum.
I dont think you can legally copywrite anything in the scope of the Lucas universe... All he has to do is get his lawyer to pull up all his copywrites... You cant legally protect names like Star Wars, Luke Skywalker, New Jedi Order, Sith... thats all owned by Lucas...
You cant protect yourself from Lucas... However you can retain creative control from everyone else. At the end of your posts just put "Copywrite used without permission of Lucas Films Limited. All Rights Reserved. Your Name."
Just thought you might want to know.
I know Lucas controls it. I was actually talking about getting it stamped by the post office and mailing it to my self. THat way, if someelse comes up with the idea, you can show your evelope that has the federal seal and date on it and show it's yours. Well, Gl's, then yours. I'll do what you said too though.
This is a real crappy story that I've had saved for a while. It's a first draft like all of my stuff so far. I'm probably going to cut it from the main story, but whatever.
Luke is looking at the holocron that Revan gave to him when he visited him the first time.
It had been a few hours since he was visited by Revan. He still hadn’t left the temple that they had fought in. He had decided to go into a healing trance to heal some of the broken bones that Revan had given him.
Finally after about four hours in a trance he decided to begin looking through the holocron. The gatekeeper of this holocron was someone Luke had never seen before, though Revan had said he had had a part in making it. The being wasn’t human. It had two long arms that were about four inches longer than a humans of comparible height. He also had long vertical slits as eyes. His skin was a deep blue and he had short hair, maybe and inch long.
Holocron Gatekeeper, “Hello Master Jedi. What is it you wish to learn today?”
Luke, “I need to know about the New Chosen One.”
Holocron Gatekeeper, “I am sorry, but all that I know is that all the information I have is a message from Obi-wan. Would you like to see it.”
Luke, “Yes, thankyou.”
A picture of Obi-wan appeared as a hologram. It wasn’t Obi-wan as Luke had seen him though, it was him during the Clone Wars.
Obi-wan, “We figured this would be the first part of the holocron that you would try to access. This is me at my height, when I fought your Father on Mustafar. We have purposly kept all of out information on the New Chosen One out of this holocron because we have been guided by the force to believe it will be best to tell you in person. In the rest of this holocron is a lot of information about various things of the Jedi. One part is lightsaber forms which your New Order knows painfully little about. I miss you and Revan will be returning one year from now. I’ll see you soon.”
The image of the gatekeeper reaperared and Luke asked him to play the message again.
After Luke had watched it a second time, he decided to move into another area of the holocron. He went to learn about lightsaber forms. In the time that he spent looking at it he learned that there were seven main forms at the Clone Wars. There were also a lot of minor forms, or offshoots of other forms.
Luke, “Can you tell me about how these lightsaber forms went around the time of the Clone Wars.
Gatekeeper, “Certainly.”
The gatekeeper then showed in great detail of who used each form, when people started using the forms, the complexity of each form and so forth. Luke was greatly interested by this and spent a good half hour looking at it. Luke remembered that Revan had told him that he needed to teach his students some proper forms.
Luke, “Do you know what I am supposed to do about teaching my students these forms?”
Gatekeeper, “Yes, Master Jedi. I have been instructed to tell you to teach Form 1 to your students. It covers the basics of lightsaber fighting and is the one that Jedi Padawans back before the Purge were taught first. They need to learn as much about this form as they can. Some of your more powerful students you should show some of the other forms, but keep it basic for the most part.”
It later showed many of the basic movements and parries in form one and several excersises to help learn to use this form. To give a kind of schedule, they hoped that most of his students knew a good amout of the form within three years.
Copywrite used without permission of Lucas Films Limited. All Rights Reserved. John Fassetta.
Originally posted by Darth_Glentract
I know Lucas controls it. I was actually talking about getting it stamped by the post office and mailing it to my self. THat way, if someelse comes up with the idea, you can show your evelope that has the federal seal and date on it and show it's yours. Well, Gl's, then yours. I'll do what you said too though.
The post office is a pretty effective way of DATE stamping your material. Anything more would really be a waste since you dont own legal rights to it anyways. Thats what I was going to suggest.
Carry On...
Originally posted by darth-yoda
what do people think of m recent story post
I have to be honest... what you posted was to short to make a full constructive criticism on but I dont like where it has gone thus far... Jedi coming back in physical form??? Xhar Kun was a stretch with his sucking the life out of an entire civilization to preserve his life... I know that I have not read all the novels but has this happed in the SW EU? Maybe make Revean control a Jedi student and have the two fight...
I also dont really like the idea of Obiwan leaving Luke a message like he knew exactly what would happen. I know that Jedi have forsight into the future but never to the exactness that you have stated.
Just my opinion... which is not a complete opinion since I have not read all the story. This is also construcive please dont take it like I am trashing your story. If people ask questions like these then you need to assume that others will ask as well so they are questions that you might think about answering.
Frobo, I'd love anything you want to offer.
It's just a first draft and I'm probably going to drop the entire holocron part. How's this idea though.
Exar Kun teaches Ben in the same way that he taught Gantorius. Ben still finds the artifacts and such, but Kun isn't able to leave a certain area because of some reason I'll think of and been keeps the artifacts hidden. Ben also eventually kills (wow, Exar dies again!) Exar Kun much in the same way Exar killed Freedon Nadd.
Luke isn't at the temple, he is exploring some planet that has high force sensitivity like dagobah and Yavin IV and finds Revan's tomb. Luke disturbs the tomb and Revan does that thing like what Adjunta Pall did in KOTOR, but he isn't as dumb and all. Luke fights him, then in the tomb finds a holocron that is less direct in what it says.
Back at the academy, Obi-wan, Yoda, or Anakin appears to Luke and tells him that someone of great power is coming. Not necessarly a Chosen One.
The Yuuzhan Vong student is still in it. I want him to die in a fight with Ben to save someone.
Han kills someone of importance.
I want to have something with Adjunta and Tulak if at all possible.
I'll post more later.
How about Ragnos instead. He is still alive as a spirit right?
Here are some more idea’s. Please tell me how you like them.
•Kyp during his exile finds many traces and legends about Ancient Sith. He discovers much about Adjunta Pall through a journal Adjunta wrote. It was all in Ancient Sith of course, but Kyp was able to translate it over the course of many months. He later learned something that is very important, but I don’t know what it is yet.
•Tahiri was killed by Corran Horn when her Yuuzhan Vong/Human mind decayed over time and she ran through the streets killing people. She then attacked Corran and was killed during the fight.
*Yuuzhan Vong student is Nom Anor’s son. Nohg Anor becomes very powerful and Revan realizes that there a two “Chosen One’s” alive at the same time. Luke is brokken up about having to fight his own son and won’t attack him. He defends, but Ben with all of his Sith Artifacts, is eventually able to hit him. Nohg sacrifiaces himself in a fight with Ben and holds Ben off until Mara is able to get over there with her ship and take Luke off planet.