Originally posted by Bobafetty
Im making a story. Well, you could say Im making episodes 7,8 and 9. I've started on episode 7, its called The Empire a New. It features some of my made up characters and mentions alot of the ancient sith. The non-made up characters in it are Luke, Han Solo and the gang, The droids, Leia, Bobafett (Lucas said he escaped the Sarlacc pit, I'll explain all that later on this thread and my story), and Sidious' spirit.
/\ this here is a little preveiw of my episodes 7-9
Hey Boba, you might want to add some of this to your files.
There were actually five IG-88's. I don't remember how they were all killed, but one was destroyed when the death star blew up and another was killed in a gun fight with Dash Rendar.
Dengar was a rival of Han Solo and has wanted revenge because he was mauled in a crash while racing Solo.
Here is another one of my big stories, its actually the one that I am working on right now. I would like any suggestions anyone has to offer.
It's a first draft. Still very far from completion.
(Translated to Basic)
Journal of Ajunta Pall
I am Ajunta Pall. I have decided to record some of the details of my life in this book. Into this book I pour knowlege. I believe that the Sith Empire is dying. Yes, I feel that it’s death is comming. None believe me. They don’t believe me because they think they are greater I. They are not. It will be millinium from now, but it will come, therefore this book will serve as a way for future people to find the secrets of my power.
Chapter One: Day of Acceptance
I remember the day I was accepted to the Jedi Academy. It is strange that I remember, but I do. I was twenty-nine months old when found by the Jedi who brought me back to the Jedi Temple on Coruscant.
I was not believed by my teachers to be very strong in the force. I was at the time I was taken to the Temple weaker in the force than even the average Jedi. I was also not thought to have good combat potential. They looked at me and saw only a weak diplomat. That was not what I was destined to become, I would be great.
I was taken by the Jedi who found me before the Council. They found in me little anger or fear. They did not see hate. They did not see the darkside within me because at that time it was not there. The Council decided that I would be trained in the ways of the Jedi.
Chapter Two: My Early Training
I remember that it was not until the age of eighty-four months that I began real Jedi training. Before that, because they had seen only a weak diplomat before them when they looked upon me, they taught me to speak dozens of languages, I could write four of them, by fifty months. By eighty months I could write sixteen languages and speak over two hundred. I also by eighty-four months could use the force to add extra persuasion to my arguments in a debate.
This training I hated. I knew that one day I would be a warrior. That one day these Jedi would no longer restrict me.
Chapter Three: My First Year of Real Training
When I turned eighty months of age, I began “real” training. I knew it would be far more helpful than the waste of time everything up to that point had been.
I was assined by the Council to be taught by Master Ukan Opaak. It may only be because he was my mentor for a time that he seems as great as he was in my eyes, but I am sure he was powerful. I heard stories about him before I became his padawan. One was about when he killed two powerful Dark Jedi by himself and saved the lives of several thousand people who would have otherwise been killed by the force storms the Dark Jedi were creating.
The first thing that he taught me was how to use telekenesis. We focused on this for a few weeks and by the end of the third I would levitate over a hundred pounds for a few minutes.
We then began to look at ways to affect the minds of others. I had already learned many of the basics of this and was by the end of the second week able to make a person see in the corner of their eye things that were really there.
For the rest of my first year my master showed me many force techniques such as ways to asorb energy, supress pain, extend my hearing, enhance my sense of smell, and increase my vision. By the end of my first year, based on my age, I was able to see four times as far as an average person, hear twice as well, smells twice as well, asorb the energy in a small portable heater, and withstand the pain from small abrasions easily. I know now that I was making good process, but at the time I felt that I was lacking, that I would never become a great Jedi.
Chapter Four: My Ninth Year of Training
I began my ninth year of training when near the time of my sixteenth birthday. I, in the chapter before this described many of my capabilities in the force. By this time I was twenty times as powerful as then, but I was still weakened by the lightside of the force. I could hold hundreds of pounds in the air for over thirty minutes without overly straining myself. I was able to asorb great deals of energy and could see twentyfive times as far as the average person.
By now the Council was begining to requestion their initial belief that I had little potential in the force and that I would never be able to become a Guardian. I had by this time learned much of Form One. I was the best in my class with a lightsaber and could cause my master to break a sweat when we sparred.
The reason that I have chosen to put this year in particular in this book is because this was the year that three very important things hapened. The first was I was involved in a major conflict.
There were two nations on this one planet and both wanted control. The Council sent my master and myself to this planet to resolve this sitituation.
It was an outer rim planet and it took of several days to get there.
We arrived on Agrenew late at night and landed in the west nation. The nations were actually called east and west because there was only one continent on Agrenew and the border between the two nations went north to south across the continent and the people just felt it was an easy way to name themselves.
Only a few minutes after we arrived on Agrenew my master left to go monitor peace negotiations between the two countries. I was supposed to help the security forces find a terroist cell somewhere in the north part of the eastern country.
I got there quickly and had little trouble tracking the terrorist down. The entire process took only a few days. I then went to confront the terrorist.
I arrived at the terrorist headquarters at about two in the afternoon local time. As soon as I got there I knew something wasn’t right about the place, but I knew that I had to stop these terrorist actions.
The person at the frot desk told me to remove my lightsaber and told me to directly procede to the meeting area. I used a mind trick and made him think that I had removed my lightsaber and that I left with the guards. I would go to the meeting area, but first I was going to do some exploring. I had some time.
I found a long corridor that strangly had no doors on either side. It then expanded into circular room with a single door. On the door was a sign warning people not to enter. I was going to walk away, but the force guided me to open the door. I knew it was necessary. It was the will of the force.
The door had a heavy lock that I estimate would have been able to resist a few blaster bolts. I knew it would be no problem for my lightsaber though. I looked behind me to make sure no one was watching. Good, the coast was clear.
I ignited my lightsaber, but when it touched the door, it couldn’t cut it. I tried again. Once more, it was unable to cut it. I stared at the lock in disbelief for a second, then tried again. Still, it was resistent to my lightsaber.
I then attempted to stab my lightsaber through the door. It could not penetrate it. Only little amount of the door, as small as pebblesm fell off. I thought about continuing to attempt tocut it again, but it would take to long and I was running out of time.
Disapointed, I returned to the meeting room. Still, there was something strange going on behind that door.
I went to the main meeting room of the building and was told that the people I was here to negotiate with would be along shortly. When they asked why I had taken so long to get there I told them that I had been held up by security at the front desk.
I was sitting in there meditating when posion poured into the room but I was immune to it because of my Jedi training. They obviously didn’t know my power. I left the room quickly through a hole I cut in the wall.
I entered a large room on the opposite side of where I had entered the meeting place. I was about forty feet from one of the cornors of the room. A door opened somewhere to my left. Dozens of terrorist poured through it with blasters in hand. I was surprised by the dicipline they demonstrated. One of them yelled for me to drop my lightsaber and put my hands in the air or I would be killed. I told them I would do no such thing. I let thme know that I didn’t want to kill them, but that I would if necessary. I knew I woul be fine, I was a warrior of the light.
One of the terrorist yelled, “You...you, a single Jedi is threatening us? I laugh at you pathetic attempt to save yourself.”
I spoke back in a cool voice, “I do not want to kill you. I will give you two choices. The first, you let me leave unharrased. The second, you die. It’s your call.”
The person who had talked before spoke again, “You are a fool to act as if you are in control.”
The then raised their blasters and began to fire.
“Then death is your choice.”
I easily blocked everyone of their blaster blots, at first directing them into the walls leaving time for whoever would flee time to leave. After about twenty seconds, I began to relfect the blaster bolts back at them. They began to drop to the floor.
I then charged at them, still blocking their fire. Several began to run, but I was to fast. A third of them where dead in less than half a minute. This was taking to long though. I needed to report back to my master as fast as possible.
I gave in further to the force and let it show me what to do next. I closed my eyes for a second and when I opened them, I saw it.
There was a powerconverter hanging above the terrorist. I began to direct the blaster fire in the supports holding it up. It fell shortly afterwards. It fell to the ground hard.
At first when it hit the ground nothing happened. We all just stopped and stared at it for a moment and then, bam! It exploded in a huge fireball. The flames sucked the air out of the room and the sonic boom from the pressure change deafened eveyone for a minute.
Well, it deafened me for a minute, it deafened the terrorist who attacked me for an eternity.
I stomped out the flames on my cloak and the walked away. There was nothing else that I could do there and I needed to report back to my master as soon as possible.
I used the force to assist my body and ran out of the terrorist headquaters at a speed that no human could move at without the force.
I saw a speeder a little less than a hundred feet down the road and ran to it. The driver of the speeder was a middle-age man. I told him that I am a Jedi and offered him five hundred credits to borrow his speeder. He agreeded and I raced-off to the place where the peace confrences were taking place.
I wasn’t really very far from where the negoations were taking place and it took me slightly less than an hour to get there.
I arrived there about two hours before the peace negoations ended, but was able to speak with my master right away. I told him about how I was attacked. When I finished there was a dark look upon his face. He then asked me if I had seen anything else. I told him that I had found a strange door that was impervious to my lightsaber and I was unable to find out what was on the other side of it.
He had a grave look on his face. I asked him what was wrong. He didn’t reply. It was almost as if he was in a trance. Then, several seonds later, he ran into where the negoators were talking and started yelling for all of them to leave them room immediatly. I ran to his side and tried to ask him what was wrong, but he just kept yelling for the negoaters to leave.
Something bad had happened. Once everyone was out he told me to get the ship. I wasted no time and was there as fast as I could.
When I got there Ukan was on his way to the ship, about half way. I opened the landing ramp and ran abord. I was running towards the cockpit when the ship lurched violently and I was thrown onto the floor. I got up and ran the rest of the way to cockpit and began ship startup procedures. The ship continued to rock. I looked out the veiwscreen and was horrified by what I saw.
The city was ablaze. Fires covered the surface. There were hundreds of ships rising into the air, trying to get away from the carnage that had once been their homes. Ukan was now aboard and I started to take off. We were at about three hundred meters when he yelled for me to stop rising. We needed to hold our altitude. I asked him why we shouldn’t keep rising. The altitude we were at was still dangerous. There were flames from explosions shooting over two kilometers into the air.
He simply pointed above up. I looked up and was as horrified by what I saw above as by what I had seen on the surface. The ships that had been fleeing the planet we exploding after they reached an altitude of two kilometers, the same height as the explosions, but they weren’t be destroyed by the explosions, it was by something else.
I then felt very cold and passed out.
The following events take place during the time that I was unconscious. I was told by Ukan when I awakened that I after I passed out he took control of the ship and waited there for about twenty hours until he felt though the force that the barrier to leave the planet was no longer there. He then flew to the planet Reloth and set down there.
I awoke about twenty minutes after we had gotten there and was greated by a master, my master, preparing for combat. My master was one of the best in combat. Although he is over seven hundred years old, he has no problem with stamina or keeping up with any of the younger Jedi. He has tons of strange weapons that make him quite possibly the most dangerous person alive, when fully equipped of course.
He had two regular lightsabers attached to his belt. Four lightdaggers were also on his belt. His lightclaws, which were part of his best combat gloves, gave him three eight-inch blades extruding from each fist. His gloves also had a cortosis weave in them because hand injuries were the most common. He then attached a wristsaber to his left arm. He had arm bracers with cortosis weaves and a helmet with a cortosis weave. My master had the greatest armor of any Jedi alive. Cortosis weave, which is still not understood very well, allows lightsabers to be deflected. There are only three Jedi so far who have had cortosis equipment that I know of. Cortosis weave is still very crude though and although one day it may be able to completly block a lightsaber, nowdays it only slightly slows one down, but that’s better than nothing.
He then brought out his finest weapon. He had actually done a lot of work inventing it. He named it since he made the first working model and did a lot of the design work. His name sucks though. He calls it the great lightsaber. What a dumb name. Whatever though. It’s over ten feet long. He has let other people try to weild it effectivly, but none of them can. One day he decided to test it though and asked several of the other Masters to spar with him. He defeated Master Tuke Ako with no problem. He then beat Master Tuke, Master Tord, Master Delin, and Master Kreto by himself. Four Masters! The great saber did have a flaws though, one being that it wasn’t very good for one-on-one combat. Two, it used it’s energy suppy up very quickly because the energy required to keep the blade focused at such a length was over a thousand times what is required for a regular length lightsaber, although he is already working on a more efficent design. It would serve well though.
There was always this small box that he kept with him, but I had never scene him open it before. When he did I felt a surge of energy race outwards from what was apparently a crystal. I was nearly overcome by it’s awsome power. I sheilded myself from it’s affects after a moment and returned mostly to normal. I asked him what it was and he said it was a kaiburr crystal. A very powerful kaiburr cystal at that. It greatly enhances anyones connection to the force when they are near it.
He then put a amulet around his neck. I had never scene this either and asked him what it was. He told me that it is a device that he found about six hundred years ago while exploring a planet he would not name. He said that it fed off of the force energy that his body naturally radiated and stored it. When he wore it he could tap into the saved energy and things that would normally have required a lot of his own energy could be done with almost no effort on his part. He also told me that he had never scene another like it, but he was pretty sure there are others somewhere.
He then attached a small device to the back of his neck. It started to make a low humming noise after a few seconds. I asked him what this they was aswell, and he said that it was a very experimental device that was basicly a small medical center. It could stimule cell replication, inject anti-toxins, inject adrenaline, and provide nutrients during combat.
He was ready to kill. And he was about to do it. He then told me to prepare for combat. I quickly grabbed my lightsaber. And, well, that was it. I felt a little underperpared for whatever it was we were going to face compared to my master, but I still strode out of the room confidently. My master was by the exit ramp. I once again felt the surge of power from the kaiburr crystal.
Ukan then lowered the landing ramp and we were on our way. It was a cold planet and I could see no form of civilization anywhere. Ukan then began to walk away from the ship and I followed him. I asked him where we were headed to and he said that there was a hidden facility a few miles from us. I figured that he had ;anded far away to avoid drawing attention.
You are these people, I thought to my self? Why won’t my master tell me more about them? What makes them so dangerous that my master came here without reporting what had happened on Agrenew to the councilfirst?
Originally posted by Darth_Glentract
Hey Boba, you might want to add some of this to your files.There were actually five IG-88's. I don't remember how they were all killed, but one was destroyed when the death star blew up and another was killed in a gun fight with Dash Rendar.
Dengar was a rival of Han Solo and has wanted revenge because he was mauled in a crash while racing Solo.
I am thinking of more things you could add.
For IG-88:
Sorry, There are actually only four IG-88. The're labled IG-88A, IG-88B, IG-88C, IG-88D.
The scientists at Holowan Laboratories made four. They then ativacted A, who killed them, downloaded his memory into the other three, and then activated them.
IG-88A took over three droid factories on Mechis III and modified them to imput a special command into the droids.
IG-88B was the bounty hunter. He did this to draw attention away from IG-88A mission. He is the one scene in the movies. He had killed over 150 people and had a dismantle on sight notice in over forty systems.
IG-88B tried to kill Fett, but Fett happily destroyed him and left his peices for the Ugnaughts to scavenge.
IG-88C lay in wait for Fett in orbit over Tatooine. Fett destroyed him and the IG-2000.
IG-88D had already been killed by Dash Rendar.
IG-88A then made a replica of the DS II computer core with his sentience inside of it. He was going to activate the command code he had put inside all the droids from Mechis III, but was killed when the death star was destoyed. That's what is said in the SW universe, but I believe that Palpatine had already had IG-88A destroyed before there was any threat to the Empire.
The body of IG-88A was reprogrammed by an unknown party to serve as a body guard.
Dengar:
A cold bounty hunter and pilot of Punishing One.
In addition to the reward promised by Vader, Dengar was especially eager to find the Falcon from a personal grudge he held against Han Solo.
Dengar injured himself badly in a swoop race with Solo and was forced to take drastic measures to preserve his life; he became a cyborg thanks to Imperial experimentation.
The parts of his brain controlling emotions such as compassion, mercy and pity were removed, leaving him a shell of his former self, a completely merciless killer. During much of his career he was considered more ruthless than Boba Fett himself, and usually performed assassinations rather than live captures. Despite all of this, Dengar was not an evil man; he simply couldn't help the fact that the Empire had modified his brain. He was often disgusted at what he had done.
Eventually Dengar would meet a humanoid woman called Manaroo and fall in love. Through sharing her mind with Dengar, Manaroo gave him back his senses of love and compassion. Dengar then renounced his occupation as a bounty hunter, and after a brief spell as partner with Fett, he retired.
Dangar was the one who found Boba Fett after he was "eaten" by the sarlacc. He rescued him and he and his girlfriend Manaroo were the only two people to see Boba Fett's face since he became a bounty hunter.
I had to rack my brain for about half an hour to remember all this, so you better like it.
Imagine that Darth Maul killed both Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan and went back to tell his master, Darth Sidious (a.k.a. Chancellor Palpatine). Yoda had found out, and killed Sidious and was waiting for Maul.
Maul rushes into the Chancellor’s private residence. Palpatine’s chair is facing the door.
“Master I have successfully killed the two Jedi on Naboo and I have brought their lightsabers, just as you requested.”
Palpatine sat perfectly still.
“Master?” Maul asked quietly.
He quickly readied his lightsaber.
“Who are you?”
Palpatine’s body slumped on the desk and his head rolled to the floor and stopped at Maul’s feet. Yoda jumped onto the top of the chair.
“Dead, your master is, just as you soon will be.”
Maul was shaking and sweating almost profusely .
“I have killed two Jedi today, you will be the third,” Maul said smoothly.
Maul activated his lightsaber.
“Try, you will. But prevail, you will not.”
Yoda quickly activated his lightsaber and bolted towards Maul. Maul quickly ducked and stabbed up into the air. Yoda then parried the move and landed on the floor. They merely stared at each other and nothing more, waiting for the other to make the first move. Yoda jumped to the ceiling and jolted down to Maul. With lightning speed, he knocked Yoda’s lightsaber from his hand’s and Force pulled him to the ground. With a Sith lightsaber at his throat, Yoda used quick and decisive action.
Maul raised his lightsaber, and Yoda pulled Maul’s lightsaber from his hands, broke it into two, effortlessly, and threw one end of it out the window. He threw Maul’s lightsaber at him and retrieved his own. This would be his revenge. For attack, the Force is not. Yoda thought to himself. This would not be revenge for Qui-Gon’s and Obi-Wan’s death, it would be to save the lives this Sith would kill.
“A third shall be killed today, but not a Jedi, a Sith it will be.”
Blind with rage, Maul charged Yoda and sliced diagonally to the floor. Yoda jumped up and Force pushes Maul towards the wall. Maul charged again and stabbed at Yoda. Yoda jumped and then cut off Maul’s head and lands on the ground. He returned his lightsaber to his belt and Force pushed Maul’s body through the window. All that was left of Maul was his head that rolled next to Palpatine’s corpse.
Originally posted by Darth_Nefarus
By Me:Mace deflected the incoming blaster shots andused a force push to dispose of his attackers as they were sent through the air, crashing into the wall and into several pieces. As he turned back he met Dooku's humming red blade and his ever confidant eyes.
"Master Windu, are you surprised that you still cannot defeat me?"
Dooku teased as he easily twisted the Jedi's blade around harmlessly, using only one hand and keeping his feet firmly in the ground.
With a very cold stare shadowed by anger, Mace replied, "You've joined the darkside, you are already defeated."
Dooku's smile dropped to seriousness as Mace rushed forward and flipped over the Sith, slicing downward as he twisted over the top of Dooku's head. Dooku's feet were still planted, but as time increased, and Mace's energy never seemed to decrease, Dooku parried his opponent's blade aside and force pushed his former Jedi brother backward.Mace brought his elbows to his chest as his fists clenched near his mouth. His eyes were shut and his lightsabre was in front of him. Dooku was an oppurtunist and thrusted forward, using the full extent of his powers to pierce through Master Windu's heart.
Mace did not need to see the blow now, he could feel it, completely attuned to the force he felt the incoming attacks, and the increasing anger inside Dooku.
Dooku began hacking madly, losing his composure which was essential to his stance. Mace was counting on that, he was hoping for that, and he was waiting for...
"Look at me when I am killing you!" the Sith screamed as he raised his other hand and fired a volley of force lightning at Mace, who stood firm, allowing his blade to absorb the dark energy.
Dooku increased the power from his anger and continuously fired volley after volley, until Mace finally opened his eyes.
Dooku's eyes revealed worry and that was when Mace made his move. Ducking, and rolling underneath Dooku's blade and lightning. As he came up he allowed Dooku to block the swing so he could plant a solid side kick into the Sith Lord's stomach.
Dooku immediately fired another current of lightning toward his former ally, but this time it was Mace's hand that was blocking the lightning, infuriating the count as to why his powers were failing him. Mace began slashing forward from several upward angles, crossing back with swings to the side. Dooku continuously parried aside the shots, using every ounce the darkside could fill his body, and soul. His eyes began glowing in a dark and strange yellow-orange blend, burning through his own pupils and into Mace's face.
Mace was now on the defensive, having to block swings from his upper left, while darting or blocking the lightning on his right. Dooku halted long enough to take his stance, his right foot forward, his left behind him and turned to the side. Mace locked his blade to Dooku's and planted his feet similarly, using all of his force abilities to keep Dooku locked in the stalemate with him.
The struggle was continuing for several moments, the blades being pushed back between the combatants faces repeatedly as Dooku could feel his opponent begin to weaken.
The lightning was now becoming too much for Mace, and he knew it. He moved his right hand slowly toward his sabre as Dooku's lightning followed. Dooku was unsure what he was doing, and immediately swithed the lightning to attack the sabre hand, hitting the blade, but still managing to course into his arm. Mace's other hand reached his hilt as his blade managed to hold off both Dooku's sabre and force lightning, long enough for the lightning to travel down Dooku's own sabre.
Before Dooku realized it, he was being scorched by his own dark powers and propelled though the air by an incredible force push from master Windu released.
Dooku was against the wall and leaning against it, trying to get up when Mace jumped forward bringing his sabre into a colossal downward swing aimed for the Count's head. Dooku attempted a parry as Mace knew he would. Which is why at the last moment he changed his focus and when he landed on the ground the two halves that once made Dooku's lightsabre were lying next to the fallen Sith.
Mace's blade rested an inch away from Dooku's chin as Dooku stared up in awe."It is over, Count," Mace said as he went backward half of a step, singaling for Dooku to rise, which he did obediently.
Before the glory would be his, Master Windu reacted to the oncoming blaster shots from a vessel floating above them. Several droids along with a dark cloaked figure watched on."Come Lord Tyrannus," the figure said as Dooku immediately used his last bit of strength to hover to the ship.
Mace attempted to grab Dooku, but the shadowy figure waved his hand and suddenly Mace could not use his legs."Your time will come soon enough, Master Windu," a dried out, yet strangely familiar voice echoed in the Jedi Master's mind.
Mace struggled to free his legs as the ship began to fly away, but it was no use.
"The Dark Lord of the Sith, no doubt," Mace thought outloud as the ship dissapeared from sight, along with the grip over his legs.
"The Sith Master is nearly in our reach. I hope the chosen one is ready."
nice.
By the way ....this thread is going great....many talents.....Im planning on the website for the month of September...maybe October latest....I have put alot of thought into this. Being a home business kinda guy already I want not only to make enough cash to maintain the site (ads etc)but I am thinking( I expanded my idea a bit due to wifely influence and just businessminded thinking) of opening up (branched off of the story site or vice versa whichever might work best) a star wars merchandise online store(possibly other movies merchandise also)....one thing it will bring more readers plus it will make me cash....BUT I already run one home business about to reopen for the 2nd time an an older business and i have a real part time job too...(funny how I have time to waste on here eh...lol...thats whats great about home businesses!!!)so i am thinking of recruiting a partner for the site to assist so I still have time to visit KMC too..lol....now this is not for (sorry younger dudes keep writing though, you may be noticed!) anyone under the age of 18...i prefer someone a little bit more seasoned with home business or serious about starting one website building and maintenance a plus but not exactly necessary as I several years ago was responsible for 3 different website building maintenance etc..(webmaster)...this will not I GUARANTEE you be an instant money maker main source of income...just possible side cash....This someone would have to be 50% responsible for administration and "moderating" of the site....we of course will have a small to start forum for comments on stories reviews on merchandise etc...I am not looking to spend 10k either buying wholesale...I dont have room or the interest as of yet to invest that much cash...maybe a little wholesale buying and the rest dropship type things(it works just not as well commercials and ads would have you believe...mainly due to small profits been there tried it) but it can be built maintained and work for everyone...Also you must be somehow able to persay start a paypal account.....I have a decent standing there and would prefer someone who also does...they handle creditcards checks etc...believe me unless you have perfect credit (unless its gotten easier in the last few years) getting a merchant account with a terminal isnt easy...website CC setup was even harder.....(could be though when we went that route was adult orientated business what made it so hard...lol...)but for starters paypal gotta have it! Anyway you get the gist please no posting in here about it keep it pm style as creator of the thread I make that rule...okie dokey...just pm me....for details and serious inquiries only...50/50 thing all of it profit of course but more importantly time and responsibility.....have had non responsible partners in past will not go that route again...dont start something you cant finish! anyways....Thanks ladies and gentlemen keep writing cause i need a whole nights starwars story entertainment coming my way! you guys are great!!!!!!!!!
ah crap i left out one of my favorite quotes.....quoting very wealthy man and teacher of wealth building ideas.....Dave Ramsey....
Investments are like cow shit spread them around and they grow things, put them all in one place(or pile if you will) it eventually starts to stink.....okay Im done that was the final post on the matter...lol...I just love that one though..."dave ramsey financial peace university" (yes I am full lifetime member with graduate certificate)
okay folks it has been brought to my attention that I didnt explain something in my post umm 2 or 3 posts up....the reason I said over 18 is I cannot enter into a business contract with a minor...it means shit in court...doesnt mean you cannot post your stories if your under 18...just that I cannot go into business with you....you could simply say you misunderstood the contract thought I was doing it all for you out of the goodness of my heart and sue me for ALL profits made and 8 times out of 10 the minor wins and the judge tells the adult he is an idiot for entering into a contract with a minor as it means nothing......Ive seen it on those court tv shows....lol...and read about similiar cases in the papers.....so please do not be offended...just please understand....maybe it was just a bad idea period to mention it...I just thought with so many here interested in star wars and obviously the internet since they are on it and a couple people I know are over 18 might have been interested...I guess just forget the above posts as I seriously do not wish to offend anyone! I can still run things just at a slower pace...please anyone who was under 18 and offended accept my deepest apologies.
All right. Edited Skywalker story from my chronicles. I'm giving it up for review. Maybe it sucks, but I decided to go through with it. Any opinions?
THE SKYWALKER CHRONICLES
CHAPTER TWO: PARADISE LOST
By me:
Luke Skywalker looked up. Yes, he was back at home, and the stark constrast it made to his environment of moments before was astounding. Being back at the academy was a strange feeling, even though his absence had been fairly short. Nonetheless, his pupils here at the school would be worried. At the moment, however, Luke wanted nothing more than to spend a few hours in a hibernation cell. Explanations would have to wait until later.
The Jedi Master stood up and wandered away to find a place to recuperate. He soon found his way around to the infirmary - it took him a long time, but he was also slightly dazed from his fight. Strangely, though, he encounered no one on his way there. Finally, he found a capsule to heal him. The effort of hauling himself inside was considerable, though he was able to turn on the cell and clamber inside relatively quickly. Before Skywalker lost consciousness, though, he felt a minor disturbance in the force, but in a moment it disappeared, along with every other thought or care in his mind...
"Welcome to my domain."
Luke awoke with a start. Someone had spoken. He had not imagined this voice - it was very real, like a cold, menacing sweep of wind, or the hard, gritty, sound of solid steel. Luke turned his head and saw two hard, calculating eyes, staring in at him, summing him up.
In an instant, Skywalker leapt from the hibernation cell and summoned his lightsaber, his health and vigor fully replenished.
"Who are you?"
"My name is Exar Kun. This is my home."
Luke could now see the full profile of this man. He was powerfully built, with a Sith lightsaber at his side. His hair was sleek and black, and he wore tattered and simple garments.
"I thought I was on Yavin IV..."
"And so you are."
"So then what am I doing here – ?"
"You are here because you are meant to be here. Did you really believe that your fight was over? Did you truly believe that your pathetic skills were sufficient to alter time and space? You did not bring yourself here with your own actions - you were summoned here to face judgment at the hands of the Sith. This is the Yavin IV before you knew it - when it was used for the study of the honorable Sith. I am the master of this establishment - this is my place of residence. A plan has been made to destroy you – this is a much greater scheme than you can possibly imagine – you have no idea how important you are to the fate of the Sith. So, when you are ready, I intend to destroy you to ensure the continuation of the Dark Side of the Force."
Luke was shocked by the news. A trap of this magnitude would require years of premeditation, and the Sith very rarely cooperated in such a manner. Clearly there was more to his this encounter than he had thought – he had only just arrived from a duel with another Sith, a half-breed called Marka Ragnos, and it had been the fight of his life. However, this man, though obviously powerful, was nothing compared to Ragnos – Luke was sure he could survive this yet. The Jedi Master grabbed his lightsaber, rolled his head between his shoulders, and prepared himself for battle.
"Lay your first strike," he heard himself say.
Kun was fast, so fast that it might have been the end of Skywalker if he had not armed himself first. The formidable enemy drew a blue Sith lightsaber and a moment later Luke took his ignited green blade and blocked the oncoming blow. No sooner had he reached up to counter the move, he felt the full force of his opponent's swing come crashing down on his lightsaber. The strength of this man was amazing. Luke was quick to recover, however, and jumped over Kun, directing a well-aimed force-push at his back. His offense was dodged by a quick sidestep, and his opponent quickly turned to face him.
The fight had begun.
Luke swiveled around, trying to size up Exar Kun, trying to find a weakness, but there seemed to be nothing that could penetrate the man's aura. At the same time, they both ran at each other and attacked. It was a flurry of action, blow upon blow raining down on either side. The pure power of this new Sith Lord was nearly enough to wear down even Luke. However, neither side was losing ground - it was a battle of great intensity.
Luke tried several times to use the Force to his advantage, but Kun dodged or blocked every attempt he made - the fight was going nowhere. In a matter of time, Luke slipped and Exar Kun ran up to strike him down. But just when it seemed as though the Jedi Master's endurance might actually run out, Luke was presented with an opportunity, and he used it as far to his advantage has he could.
Exar Kun had an almost flawless technique with his lightsaber. He held it in two hands, caressing the handle and wielding his weapon like a true master. However, as he ran at Luke, he let go with one hand and stretched out to jab his opponent between the ribs single-handed. Skywalker saw this and from it found his opening.
Before Kun could reach him, Luke Skywalker jumped over his head and waited for his foe to turn. Not wanting to risk dropping his lightsaber, Exar kept his one hand on the handle. This was the gap Luke needed to defeat this skilled Sith Lord. Instead of attacking, Skywalker called on the Force to bend the two handles of the lightsaber back from a 180-degree shape until they snapped apart into two separate blades. Instantly, the lightsabers separated and Kun found himself holding nothing but air. Before he knew what had happened, the two blades of his own Sith lightsaber began to close in around him, drawn to Exar Kun’s waist from both sides. They wedged around his middle until the gap was closed and they began to cut through their wielder’s body like a pair of shears until the two beams, now collinear, were visible poking through his back.
An instant later, the two lightsabers fell to the floor and promptly shut off. Shocked at the battle's abrupt end, the Sith Lord gave an outraged grunt, but a moment later his dismembered upper body fell down from atop his legs and torso, which, no longer supporting the massive body, collapsed to the ground as well.
Luke Skywalker, Jedi Master, had held his own for the second time that day, a day that had spanned across three millenia. He was exhausted. Kneeling down, he prepared to rest in one of the hibernation cells before making his plans on how to return home.
However, on his way over to the small capsules, Luke collapsed in a heap. His mind became a blur as her felt himself once again summoned into the time-space continuum to face some yet unknown danger...