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Chapter 7

The Location Of the Cats eye

When the morning came we heard from the scientists that someone had broke into the museum of ancient artifacts. I told them to grab onto me and then I would teleport there. They did as I instructed and we arrived faster than the blink of an eye. We saw that it was only Recnur this time but that is still trouble enough for us. We kept our distance till we could find out what he was searching for. We followed him for a few minutes till he left the building. We kept following and finally we heard him say that the riddle said it lies at Fies. But the Cats Eye wasn’t there. I stopped in my tracks shocked. My dad was after the Cats Eye Gems! Nobody else knew what the Gems did so I told them as we followed him.
The Cats Eye Gems are two of the deadliest gems in the world. They were originally combined into one set of eyes. One side controlled all evil while the other controlled good. They were stolen by a sorcerer and used to control the world. When a brave warrior named Teshjin stole the eyes back he turned the world back to normal then he split it into two pieces. The Cats Eye Nimbus (which was the good side) and The Cats Eye Dijlin (the evil half). So now my dad wants to locate the two eyes and forge them together to gain control over the world. Then we heard a voice behind us say “you know, Ragnoros has the whole story and our plan figured out.” We turned around and Recnur was behind us.
I teleported behind Recnur and picked him up. He kicked me and Nightshade ran up to him and punched him up into the air. Then he blasted him with a dark ball and Recnur came crashing down. When he stood up I hit him with a light ball and he went flying back. He got up again and then heard Amy and Zoey behind him.
He jumped forward and turned around. Then Stone levitated a giant rock and hit him with it. Then Amy and Zoey blasted him with four blasts of black and ice. He was frozen and surrounded by ice and when he broke out he was shocked by the dark beams Zoey blasted. He still stood up ready to fight. Then I made a ball appear at the tip of my index finger. I was aiming for his arm so he couldn’t attack but I hit a symbol on his forehead. It disappeared and he was confused. He kept saying where am I?
That symbol on his forehead must have kept him from turning from good to evil. And it just kept him evil. We all filled him in on what had happened and he could remember just little tiny pieces of it. We headed back to the hideout and we told Recnur he should rest. While he was asleep we talked about him. I brought up the subject about how he is stronger when he is evil. Then Nightshade said “maybe he was meant to be evil but wants to use his powers for good.” We all agreed about that comment. Once we were done chatting everyone but me and Recnur went to eat lunch. While they were out me and Recnur tried to figure out where The Cats Eye Nimbus was.
We came up with many hypothesizes as to where it was located. I thought it could be in Antarctica, Europe, or Egypt. Recnur thought it was in Great Britain, or China. But when the rest got back from lunch we figured it out. The Cats Eye Nimbus was at the museum but hidden underground. Recnur stood up and the he said “thanks for helping me and your father find out where it was.
We now knew that Recnur’s symbol was a fake. Once we hit it he acted like he was good so we would help him and Gheldrone locate the first piece. I teleported to the museum and blasted a white beam at the ground. I made a tunnel that lead straight below the museum. Soon I hit a mine where a light was shining white. When I grabbed it I started to glow the same color. Then I teleported back to the hideout and initiated power drain lockdown. What happens is if anybody tries to teleport or just walk in their power will be drained. I put the Eye into a magical techno box so nothing could get in except me. Then I double checked to make sure everyone was inside the hideout and they were. So we recovered one Eye and there still is one more out there somewhere in the world.

this is getting exciting. you had really good twists to the story.

Chapter 8

The Cats Eye Dijlin

comes today or tomorrow

thx

I love ur story can't wait for the next chapter but I'll just wait📖 *picks up W.I.TC.H. book and starts reading* 📖

Chapter 8

The Cats Eye Dijlin

Most people either stay on one side of the line separating good from evil. But not my dad or Recnur. My dad used to be good then he turned evil. Recnur on the other hand doesn’t stay on one side but still crosses over from time to time. Cause here is what happened 1 week after I saved The Cats Eye Nimbus.
I had figured out where The Cats Eye Dijlin was located. It was in Egypt hidden in one of the pyramids, but the problem was there are hundreds to choose from, but we went anyway cause if Gheldrone got a hold of Dijlin he would have dark powers unimaginable. So when we arrived the first temple we saw had a normal triangle at the top but this one had an eye engraved on it. So we went in that one first. Down the corridors, dodging traps, and picking random hallways. Soon we entered a room where a coffin and treasure in it. Then a person emerged from behind the coffin. It was Recnur!
He was trying to pry something out of the cover of the coffin. When he finally got it out he had noticed that his feet had sunk under ground so he couldn’t walk out. He tried to teleport but it didn’t work because of a chip I put on his back so his powers won’t work. Finally he broke out of the ground and started throwing dark balls at us. While we were fighting I asked him where the symbol that keeps him evil is. He said there is no symbol I chose to be evil. Then Amy grabbed a piece of gold and hit Recnur on the head with it. He turned good after that but it wore off in 30 seconds.
I told Amy to do that again and she did it worked again. So I told Amy to do it one last time and she did again. Before it wore off I told Recnur to toss the eye here and he did but before it got to me he turned evil and grabbed it. Then I realized that it wasn’t going to work. So I through a light ball at him and he went flying back. The eye went flying in the air and I ran to try and catch it. Both me and Recnur grabbed it. I asked him if he knew what he would’ve done if he gives the eye to Gheldrone and as usual he didn’t I told him that he is just a pawn in Gheldrone’s race for power. Then I said “once Gheldrone gets what he wants he’ll make you one of his immortal slaves.
He let go of the eye and disappeared. We tried to get out of there as fast as we could just in case he comes back for it. On our way out of that room we heard a crash behind us. We turned around a giant ball of stone was rolling towards us. Stone tried to take control of it using his powers but no luck. So we ran for our lives. It got closer and closer until it was right behind us. At that point we knew we couldn’t out run it but we kept trying to. Then I thought of an idea that would save our lives and keep The Cats Eye Dijlin. I could teleport to our hideout and initiate lockdown power drain. But the problem was I needed time to power up which would take a few minutes and by then we could be dead. I though for a few minutes while running with the others. Then Zoey started slowing down and was about to be crushed so I teleported back grabbed her and teleported her to the normal spot where everyone else was. So then I had to wait longer cause I just used my energy that I needed to teleport us. Then Recnur put us in a barrier around all of us and teleported us to our hideout. When we looked around we saw him for a split second and then he was gone. I put The Cats Eye Dijlin in a separate magical techno box. That ended our journey for another year or so because nothing ever happened after we got The Cats Eye Dijlin.

how is it?

chapter

evil plan revealed

Is one the worst score?

i don't care what you think its all depends on what i think

I like it a lot critias

chapter 9 comes today

ill be on in a little bit i got to spend some time playing with my dog

Originally posted by FeceMan
Is one the worst score?

That was kind of rude you know Feceman. Some people here like critias's story, and I know I don't appreciate reading that remark. I believe the forum rules were something like no negative comments or something. I don't remember. If you have nothing good to say then don't say it at all.
BTW critias, great job with this chapter. sorry i didn't read it sooner. been kind of busy.

Chapter 9

Evil Plan Revealed

One year of nothing bad happening seemed a bit to relaxing. We figured that my dad was planning on a way to steel the two eyes and kill all of us at the same time. But that seemed impossible with our power drain lockdown. Somehow my dad pulled it off. Here is how he stole the eyes.
One year passed since we got the Cats Eye Dijlin from Recnur. We thought since we had both eyes my dad would stop being evil but that never came true. One day we were eating lunch when an explosion occurred. We rushed over to see who it was. When we got there we saw it was a girl in a stealth suit (doesn’t make invisible but helps get through security lasers). We started fighting her but she kept dodging all our attacks. Finally I teleported behind her and grabbed her and held her there. I told Nightshade to throw a dark ball at her. He didn’t want to cause I would be in danger but he still did. When it got close enough I teleported out of the way and she was hit by it. She wasn’t defeated but still hurt. When all the smoke cleared we heard her say “I know who stole your spell books and gadgets. Stone was only working for the person. The real person who stole them was me.” She then jumped into the air and turned into a hawk and flew away. I then looked at Stone with a disappointing look.
When we got back to the base I noticed that someone had broke in. I panicked as I ran to the magical techno boxes. They had been broken open and the Cats Eyes had been stolen. I walked over to the rest of the team and said “we had lost the battle because the eyes were stolen.” They then understood what I was saying. I told them that the shape shifter was a distraction while my dad stole the eyes. We all looked at stone with confusion. He then told us the whole story.
When his sister died he bumped into a person who made him a promise. The person told him that he knew what happened to Stone’s sister and that there was a way to revive his sister. As long as Stone helped them get some items. So Stone stole magical items and the shape shifter stole the rest of the items missing. And when the shape shifter was done with the items she gave them to him so no one would know she did it.
We all look at Stone then I said “two evil plans have been noticed. One that happened when we met Stone. And the one that had been planned by my dad for 1 year.” Everyone knew I was right so we sat in that room all day depressed. When nightfall came I stepped outside and noticed that the world had been changed into a red wasteland. I called for the rest of the team to come up and see. Then we all stood there knowing that we had failed to keep the world safe.

so how is chapter 9?

chapter 10

Friends Aren't Everything

coming today

ill be done with chapter 10 around 5:00 pm

keep writing 😉

agreed. you really have the talent to write stories.