GOSH this has turned out to be so wonderfully wonderfull! it's all firy Norribeth..true NE love but u guys tastefully added in some JE and WE. I especially dig the WE cause it's not LOVE it's a very true sincere friendship, it shows they really care about eachother. VERY sweet and cinematic and epical at the same time. good job chicas!
Kate, I see your point about a few things. I think Will and Liz went over there hoping to get caught to make Jack come and start the battle, but they were a little early and Jack didn't have a huge pirate army with him. He had his crew, which I guess is now missing Teague. There are so many people to work with!
DECK OF PEARL
Bootstrap: Will! (runs to him)
Will: (still with Anamaria in his arms) Look what we have.
Bootstrap: The heart? How in the world did you....
Will: Tricks up my sleeve.
Ragetti: We's the ones that brought it back.
Will: Yes, yes they were. (turns to Jack) What is Calypso going to do?
Jack: No telling. It could just about be anything.
Liz: When are we going to summon James?
Gibbs: I wouldn't do it now.
Bootstrap: Nor I. You'll have to kill Jones first.
Will (takes out a knife): Any consequences for those who stab the heart?
Anamaria: Don't!
Ah the suspense. This is terrific guys, I'll be back on Sunday so I'll have heaps to catch up on, maybe a battle yay! But guys this is truely a fantastic script, and like what tee_pirategirl said, there are plenty of great scenes between the characters, more on deep friendship then romantic which is what I like. Keep up this fantastic work guys!
Honestly, I don't think they have time to save James. Summoning the queen is likely to summon the whole lot of the karcharika. Not good, since they're already going to attack the other pirate ships.
Don't forget, the Merpeople are showing up as well to help out.
I think Tia and Jones should kill each other, not in a mean way, but because they know their time is up.
I have to run for a bit, but I'll try to come up with something.
Good job with the heart and rescue mission and stuff. Very entertaining! 😄
Ok, I'm about halfway done with a James/Beckett/Tia/Jones scene...I'm running out of time, so I will have to post it later, so um...can I keep writing it?
It's very good angst. Also, I have an idea about Liz being all self-sacrificing for James, and how the spell should be broken, blah blah.
Also, I think the battle should be delayed by something big so I can finish writing my scene. 😛
I will be back fairly soon, hopefully. 😄
CUT TO THE DECK OF THE PEARL ---- AFTERNOON
*Beckett, Tia, and Jones are standing together on the deck. Beckett is watching Tia warily.*
Beckett: We should bind her.
Jones: It won't do no good. She can free herself if she wants to.
Beckett: I held her captive once before.
Tia: Only because I chose to allow you to do so.
Beckett: *suddenly suspicious* So why did you allow me to regain Jones' heart? Who's side are you on?
Tia: *strokes Beckett's cheek* What side? Davy, tell him what side I am on.
Jones: *snorts* She's a woman, Beckett. Doesn't that answer your question?
*Tia looks sharply at Jones. Jones glares back. Beckett ponders this for a moment, then wisely decides that being in the middle of an argument between those two is not a good idea.*
Beckett: I will be in my cabin. I will call for you shortly. Until then, keep an eye on her.
*Beckett goes into the Captain's quarters. Jones and Tia regard each other silently for a moment, obviously unsure of what to say. Finally, Jones offers his arm to Tia, and she accepts it as they stroll along the deck of the Dutchman.*
Jones: He doesn't know that the heart is gone.
Tia: No. And he must not know yet.
Jones: *stops walking and looks at Tia* What is your plan, goddess?
Tia: *gazes out at the water* It is time.
Jones: *also ponders the sea* Yes. Yes it is.
Tia: We have very little time left.
Jones: I have much to do. But first...
*Jones raises his tentacled hand to Tia's face. For a moment, it becomes a human hand, and he touches her cheek.*
Jones: I beg forgiveness of you. I was given a task and I have failed in it. You gave me your love freely, and grew jealous of any who also lay claim on you.
Tia: De sea never looks back, Davy. Even as long as you have sailed, you have never crossed de same water twice.
Jones: *wryly* I suppose that is a fancy way of saying that you forgive me.
*Tia only smiles at Davy. She scowls then, and for a moment Davy thinks it is at him, but then he hears a footfall behind him and he turns. Beckett is there, smirking.*
Beckett: Touching, Jones. Very touching. I order you to give me the coin back. I need to have a little conversation with James before the battle begins.
*Jones hesitates for a split second, but Tia pokes him in the back and he reluctantly hands over the coin to Beckett.*
Beckett: Very good. I expect you to meet me at the Admiral's new accomodations. Bring the sea witch with you when you come.
*Tia is obviously angry at this lack of respect. Jones looks furious himself, but manages to just barely hold off from striking Beckett. When the man has vanished belowdecks, Jones turns to Tia.*
Tia: His disrespect will be duly punished. *she glances to where Beckett has gone*
Tia: We must follow him. I have a bad feeling about what dis man is going to do to James.
Jones: *grumbling, half-teasing* Must you always be on a first name basis with all these men?
Tia: *indignantly* The sea has many lovers. James is one of the best, and one of the most faithful.
Jones: *slows down* When you say 'lover'...what did you mean?
Tia: *makes an impatient noise and pokes Davy to get him moving again.* And dis is your business how...?
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Ok, this is part one. If someone wants to add something from the other ships in, that would be cool. 😄 Sorry for the delay. I'll get part two up in a bit. 😄
Oh, and thanks to everyone who has been reading this, and big thanks to everyone who has left a kind review. 😄 Getting feedback is a great motivator to continue writing. 😄
okay, i just need to take a minute and truly appreciate that post. I know I say this a lot, but I really do mean it, that was some of your best work, Surreal, really, really beautifully written--- the line Jones has about "she's a woman..." that was sooooo poignant, ah, wonderful wonderful.
I am really pleased with the vibe b/w Jones and Tia (sort of reminds me of another couple, hmmm) and how they seem to have their own secret planning level and ideas about what's going on.
I cant wait for part 2!!!
PM me, Surreal. I don't think I got my fix of smarts today, but I need a catch-up on what's going on on Jones' ship. It's well-written, I just need a bit of an explanation.
CUT TO OUR HEROES
Will: Why shouldn't I stab it?
Anamaria: You'll take his place.
Will: What?
Jack: It's the truth.
Will: Then how are we going to defeat Jones?
Bootstrap: We'll get him to stab it.
Will: Father, that would never happen.
Bootstrap: Oh yes it would.
Liz: (to Jack and Boostrap and all) Make sure he doesn't do anything stupid. (runs below deck)
Gibbs: Where do you think you're going?
Liz: Someone has to go back for James.
(Barbossa grabs her)
Liz: Unhand me!
Barbossa: Permission to put her in the brig, Jack.
Jack: Meh.
Liz: Jack! (Barbossa heaves her over his shoulder)
Barbossa: Can't see why the lesser crew can't do this.
Will: That's not going to solve anything.
(Anamaria grabs the heart while he's distracted)
Will: Hey!
Anamaria: I'm sorry, Will. I can't trust you with this.
Barbossa: Calm down, missy (to Liz). The brig's warm, comfortable. We thought about puttin' you there when you was my guest on this ship, but we wanted you up here with us.
Liz: What about James? Damn it, Barbossa! (wriggles free but falls to the ground)
Bootstrap: Think about it, Elizabeth. What will you be able to do?
Liz: I can't leave him!
Gibbs: You won't. We're all going back for him (shrugs), just not right now.
Jack: Wait till the rest arrive, love.
(Anamaria shoves the heart into her coat pocket. No one sees where she's hidden it)