Where the pain ends - Bardock's Poetry

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Originally posted by Victor Von Doom
****ing hell.
Haha.

Deep Thoughts

Standing in line
Thinking about pain
Love, life, war
What is there to gain?

The autumn started
Or do we call it fall
And when a life ends
Is that really all?

Why don't people understand what's right?
It's all so clear to see
Why do people always fight
And still are never free?

That one was real, wasn't it.

I liked it. Dylan Thomas-esque.

Prrmpf.

Thanks guys.

Here are two poems I wrote as a sort of...homage, to my favourite poet, Paul N. M. Johnstone.

Swanery

Death of Swans
A topic we can feel
The darkness of the end bizarrely hovering on shallow ground
In a pond of sadness their tears lie
Alone
Forever

Why?

Bubbles in a fiery soul
The weak skin of your body burned
Around and around and around
And around
By now it is clear
Random words connected by trivial thoughts of insignificant meaning
Dying as a whisper on your lips.

The second verse, no happier
Sorrow is all it can predict
Rhymes have long gone
Sometimes a genius is just not discovered

The last is a bit self pityful. I was a bit unhappy at the time, I had submitted some poetry to my teacher at school and they said it was immature and needed work. Meh, at least you guys see what I try to say.

Originally posted by Bardock42
The last is a bit self pityful. I was a bit unhappy at the time, I had submitted some poetry to my teacher at school and they said it was immature and needed work. Meh, at least you guys see what I try to say. [/B]

Same here. Whenever I have an idea for a dark poem, my frickin' english teacher(catholic)always dismissed it as immature. Very, very nice poems, by the way.

Originally posted by Skydude033
Same here. Whenever I have an idea for a dark poem, my frickin' english teacher(catholic)always dismissed it as immature. Very, very nice poems, by the way.

Bookmark this page, and return to it in a few years.

It's a joke. If you thought any of those were good, you are an idiot (or really, really like me too much...I'm talking creepy here).

Mine are better. 😖mart:

j/k
Good work Bardock

Originally posted by Deja~vu
Mine are better. 😖mart:

j/k
Good work Bardock

No, they aren't.

But thanks.

Okay, now write some real stuff.

Pullin ya, you know. LOL

Originally posted by Deja~vu
Okay, now write some real stuff.

Pullin ya, you know. LOL

Nah, if I did it would make this forum pointless as my thread would be the only one that needs to be visited.

new stuff plz?

Originally posted by Selphie
new stuff plz?
You didn't read my recent announcement did you? 😐

I did! I did, and I loved it!

Originally posted by Selphie
I did! I did, and I loved it!

Fair enough

The End

The moon shines in the dark night,
Mocking every tear I shed.
Why have you left me without a fight,
And how, will I ever get you back?

I feel but sorrow in this cold lonely light,
Longing for darkness that might make things right.
But feeling empty, with no hope in sight.
Can I change it, make things again right?

The floor embraces my lifeless form.
No muscle in my body moves without you
My thoughts are racing, what can I do.
My life is over, I wish I wasn't born.

The poision runs slowly through my sore throat,
The breathing gets slower as I shut my eyes.
Receive me now Phlegyas, in your loving boat!
My last thoughts of you, where my love still lies.

Vinny's Poem

Vinny, vinny, my dear old friend
You wrote me a poem and now here I am
My fingers are flying, but still is my hand
And now I wish you weren't Vin, cause I can rhyme with Sam

That last line was lame and you derserve surely more
But on the other hand what am I even writing this for
In a thread with the purpose to mock poetry
It's not meant as an insult, I hope you can see

And last but not least I write this little verse
As a poem with two stanzas is really lame
And damn that Joey he's wearing a purse
Oh sorry, I forgot, we are not watching the same.

Originally posted by Bardock42
[b]Vinny's Poem

Vinny, vinny, my dear old friend
You wrote me a poem and now here I am
My fingers are flying, but still is my hand
And now I wish you weren't Vin, cause I can rhyme with Sam

That last line was lame and you derserve surely more
But on the other hand what am I even writing this for
In a thread with the purpose to mock poetry
It's not meant as an insult, I hope you can see

And last but not least I write this little verse
As a poem with two stanzas is really lame
And damn that Joey he's wearing a purse
Oh sorry, I forgot, we are not watching the same.
[/B]


😂 😂

hysterical

You are a legend, Bardock.

Originally posted by Bardock42
It's a joke. If you thought any of those were good, you are an idiot (or really, really like me too much...I'm talking creepy here).

😆

Very nice.

lolz at the guy who mentioned Dylan Thomas...