bluewaterrider
Senior Member
Originally posted by juggerman
Any problems with this that should be corrected?
For the most part, I plan to let you proceed unmolested, for I am genuinely interested in what you come up with, and, for the most part, it's not too bad. You're largely arguing the people in character, which most posters do not, which already puts you ahead of the curve, and it's proceeding more or less logically.
If you really truly want some input, though:
The parts 1, 2, and 3 are your numbering of what you yourself wrote, not the entire story to this point. The "prequel" portions have important implications, though.
For instance, I'm still wondering how Ares met his end.
It's a significant detail.
For if Ares was ripped apart barehanded by Prime, that would make Tony real hesitant to send War Machine (WM), who happens to be his good friend James Rhodes, to be essentially mauled in similar fashion.
If Tony saw Prime's VISION blasting Ares apart, however, he would not fail to tell WM: "Rhodey, white armor. NOW."
(Suit to external laser and heat reflective surface, as I showed you several pages ago.)
For Tony generally follows practical strategy as a leader, which, in this situation, it's natural he would be.
Perhaps even before that, though, I'm wondering what general knowledge the group is to have of Prime.
The forum rules themselves tell us the knowledge of Superman, for instance, is such that people know he is vulnerable to kryptonite.
Earlier DS also said the Avengers would reasonably be expected to know
that Prime is either powered by yellow sunlight, or weakened by red.
Which implies they know Prime functions as a Kryptonian.
Which carries implications of itself. A vulnerability to sonic and hypersonic attack, for starters. Laser eyesight, which needs to be prepared for, defended against, and can be deflected back as a weapon. Sensitivity to sudden and massive changes in gravity, if you can arrange such a thing (which this group, if owing to nothing more than Thor's ability to arrange dimensional travel, can).
At any rate, what general knowledge the Avengers have of Prime and how they reasonably got it is not spelled out.
Incidentally, Prime's suit?
That actually functions as a yellow sunlight collector.
If Prime's actually fighting IN yellow sunlight, it's more or less a non-factor, since the ample sunlight of the day would be powering him anyway.
On the other hand, if you arrange some special condition, like say, red sunlamps flooding the area, THEN the fact that he has that compensating suit becomes significant, for it would enable Prime to counter that attack.
(And, of course, if you're envisioning a fight at night or some dark place, it's absolutely vital Prime have that suit if he's to last even 30 seconds.)
Right now, in fact, the most truly jarring aspect of your story is that your Avengers are so busily trying to get that suit off Prime without knowing why.
How they got to the point of knowing that should be mentioned.
They might come equipped knowing, for instance, that Prime battled some of their hero friends elsewhere.
Which makes sense.
MANY worlds were present at Infinite Crisis, and Prime is regarded as a multiversal threat that people would tend to warn each other of, or at least talk of as news at some point.
Do they know said multiversal threat Prime was successfully contained once the New Earth heroes got that suit off him, and arranged for red sunlight?
THEN it makes perfect sense the Avengers know this to be the key, and forum rules and previous DC/Marvel crossover history suggests they would.
Otherwise, though, they would need to invent a way to discover this.
Which WOULD, by the way, be in character for the Avengers to do, probably, from least to most likely, in this order:
Rhodey < Thor < Rulk < Hulk < Tony
Please note, that, in-character, Thor WILL slow down and become an investigative tactical fighter once enough of his methods fail.
(Re-read, for instance, the Link version of the 2nd Juggernaut fight I posted, Thor 429, where Thor actually uses a bolt or blow from his hammer to "probe" Juggernaut's forcefield to test if it is magic or not.)
