Originally posted by BlackC@t
Ush can speak for himself, theres no need for your input. You say you have a life when you've got nothing better to do then tell others how to think and act. Quit posting here Stormy Day, you are making my story go off-topic. Here's the next bit:MORE SOON (if Stormy Day doesn't keep interupting)
Ush can speak for himself ? 😱 😛
Make me 😐
That part of the story was quite entertaining 🙂,but I dont understand how the townspeople know that hes a boy and not a man 😕
Originally posted by Stormy_Day
Its called a opinions people give bad reviews on books all the time.She'll get over it.You dont have to be Ush's best friend to know that hes not going to approve a game without people joining before it starts 😬
Dude, you posted that like five minutes after the original person. There was no time for anybody to reply. I'll shut up now since I'm just cluttering BC's thread...
Sorry people, when I went into KMC last night the site wouldn't work so I couldn't post anything, but heres the next part:
Terry pulled his scarlet-sweater over his messy hair and tied his shoe laces. Today he was meeting Sora for lunch, and just incase a crime was in progress he had his suit safely under his clothes. "Bye Mom" Terry bid as he left for the restraunt, hastly stuffing his mask in his pocket. By the time Terry had walked several blocks his muscles in his legs felt if though the were on fire. "Just a bit longer....." he kept repeating. Usually his strength made his legs very tought but he was extremly tired right now. Finally, after repeating 'Just a bit longer' 15 times he was at the foot of the world-interprise building (the restraunt sat on top) an anxious Terry pressed the button to the seventeenth floor and waited, hoping the butter-flys in his stomach would leave, why was he so nervous!? the answer finally struck him in the feeling of a sharp tingle in the back of his head, he spider-sense..........the instinct told him nothing else except it was danger. Walking down the hllway he heard the cry of many people on the streets below. Looking out of the window his jaw dropped open. The metal bridge that connected the two buildings looked if thought a helicopter had struck it, the helicopter had managed to fly off with out exploding, people on the bridge clambered and scrawled safely to the roof-tops, all except for one girl. "Sora!" Terry screamed in terror. She was hanging onto the side of the bridge, her legs dangiling dangerously. Acting quickly, Terry hurried into a broom closet and changed quickly then emerging. "Hey isn't that Spider-Boy!? it is!" the people down the hallway cried. Looking through his eye-piece he saw a terrorfied Sora plunge to her death. Spider-Boys heart sunk faster then any swing. He smashed though the window and sprinted down the building as fast as he could. He finally caught up with Sora. "Need a hand?" he asked. Sora looked in amazement, a boy running down the wall of a building......incredible. Spider-Boy lept off the wall and caught the screaming girl, she wrapped her arms around his neck as they both fell to their doom. "Gotch'a!" he yelled.
"You've got me! but who's got you!?" she asked in utter terror. Terry smiled from beyond his mask and let out a webline. "Excuse me for this, I'm kinda still getting the hang of it." The both swung through the air together. The crowd bellow wooped and cheered in amazement and gratitude. Sora looked down upon the streets below and then turned her attention back on Spider-Boy. So the papers were true, there really was a boy with the abilities of Spider-Man.......He finally swung on top of a down-town building. Sora laughed gently, the feeling of swinging was fun and igzilerating. "Well it's kinda scary but it's faster then a car or train!" Spider-Boy remarked. Sora laughed at his little joke. "Well I gotta go, see ya!" he ran to the edge and was about to leap off when Sora cried "Wait! will I ever see you again?" she asked.
"If your ever in trouble" he cracked yet another joke. Spider-Boy sumer-saulted off the building, plummeted a few feet then released a web-line. "Woooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!" he screamed with delite while releasing more webbing. Sora watched in amazement until he was far form view............
MORE SOON.
That one has a lot of mistakes, this one doesn't:
Here's the next bit:
Terry pulled his scarlet-sweater over his messy hair and tied his shoe laces. Today he was meeting Sora for lunch, and just incase a crime was in progress he had his suit safely under his clothes. "Bye Mom" Terry bid as he left for the restraunt, hastly stuffing his mask in his pocket. By the time Terry had walked several blocks his muscles in his legs felt if though the were on fire. "Just a bit longer....." he kept repeating. Usually his strength made his legs very tough but he was extremly tired right now. Finally, after repeating 'Just a bit longer' 15 times he was at the foot of the world-interprise building (the restraunt sat on top) when he stepped into the elevator, an anxious Terry pressed the button to the seventeenth floor and waited, hoping the butter-flys in his stomach would leave, why was he so nervous!? the answer finally struck him in the feeling of a sharp tingle in the back of his head, his spider-sense..........the instinct told him nothing else except it danger was lurking near-by. Walking down the hallway he heard the cry of many people on the streets below. Looking out of the window his jaw dropped open. The metal bridge that connected the two buildings looked if though a helicopter had struck it, luckily the helicopter had managed to fly off with out exploding, people on the bridge clambered and scrawled safely to the roof-tops, all except for one girl. "Sora!" Terry screamed in terror. She was hanging onto the side of the bridge, her legs dangiling dangerously. Acting quickly, Terry hurried into a broom closet and changed quickly then emerged. "Hey isn't that Spider-Boy!? it is!" the people down the hallway cried. Looking through his eye-piece he saw a terrorfied Sora plunge to her death. Spider-Boys heart sunk faster then any swing. He smashed though the window and sprinted down the building as fast as he could. He finally caught up with Sora. "Need a hand?" he asked. Sora looked in amazement, a boy running down the wall of a building......incredible. Spider-Boy lept off the wall and caught the screaming girl, she wrapped her arms around his neck as they both fell to their doom. "Gotch'a!" he yelled.
"You've got me! but who's got you!?" she asked in utter terror. Terry smiled from beyond his mask and let out a webline. "Excuse me for this, I'm kinda still getting the hang of it." before they swung away, Spider-Boy shot up another web-ine at the bridge, making it stick to the wall for the time being. They both swung through the air together. The crowd bellow wooped and cheered in amazement and gratitude, Sora looked down upon the streets below and then turned her attention back on Spider-Boy. So the papers were true, there really was a boy with the abilities of Spider-Man.......He finally swung on top of a down-town building. Sora laughed gently, the feeling of swinging was fun and igzilerating. "Well it's kinda scary but it's faster then a car or train!" Spider-Boy remarked. Sora laughed at his little joke. "Well I gotta go, see ya!" he ran to the edge and was about to leap off when Sora cried "Wait!.......will I ever see you again?" she asked.
"If your ever in trouble" he cracked yet another joke. Spider-Boy sumer-saulted off the building, plummeted a few feet then released a web-line. "Woooooooooooooooooooooooo hoooooooooooooo!!!!" he screamed with delite while releasing more webbing. Sora watched in amazement until he was far form view............
MORE SOON.
I having two problems with the story
1.Im having a hard time believing these kids are actually 11
2.The last part was a total rip-off of Spider-Man.Where he saves her from the goblin then takes her to the building.When hes about to go off she calls out for him.He answer and flys away yelling "wwwooooo" 😗