Why is it so F#$#@@@!!! hard to live in this world?

awww that's such a sweet poem 😊

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Heaven

To sir across from you
In a dark and smoky room,
Seeing firelight dance,
Your eyes light up the gloom,
To hold you close to me,
Dancing on dew-moist grass at night,
The only witnesses the stars overhead,
To hear your musical laughter
Tickling the air sonorously,
Seeing a smile from you
Lifts my spirits wondrously...

To be near you, to know you,
is Heaven. ..... To me.

I don't like it and I'll tell you why; It's immature, derivative, lacking in any recognisable structure - which isn't a compliment, you're not Joyce - and basically rather pronderous. Please improve.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
I don't like it and I'll tell you why; It's immature, derivative, lacking in any recognisable structure - which isn't a compliment, you're not Joyce - and basically rather pronderous. Please improve.

Not all poetry needs to have perfect structure. There's a thing called free-verse poetry. Free verse poems are poems without a metrical pattern and/or without rhyming verses. Just because you do not like someone's work, does not mean they have to improve.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
I don't like it and I'll tell you why; It's immature, derivative, lacking in any recognisable structure - which isn't a compliment, you're not Joyce - and basically rather pronderous. Please improve.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
I don't like it and I'll tell you why; It's immature, derivative, lacking in any recognisable structure - which isn't a compliment, you're not Joyce - and basically rather pronderous. Please improve.

Will wonders never cease.

Originally posted by Coldfire
Hmmm.... I'm seeing a pattern here... everyone else seems to like his poems.... Tell me, do you like ANYONE'S poems??!!

This guy's are pretty good:

Poems I like...

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
This guy's are pretty good:

Poems I like...

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
If I hadn't seen your s/n and avvy...I'd think someone else had written this post. This by far is the nicest thing you've ever said.

Will wonders never cease.

I'm really not a grump, I just hate most of the poems here.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
This guy's are pretty good:

Poems I like...

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
I'm really not a grump, I just hate most of the poems here.

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
I'm really not a grump, I just hate most of the poems here.

Originally posted by Coldfire
🙄

if you hate em so much then you don't have to read them....

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
And yet, you have to like a thing before you can hate it. Or so I've heard. I could be wrong, but not always. Sadly, poetry is meant to be read, else what is the point of writing poetry? For no one to read?

HOW BOUT THIS: You hate my poems, Ou le Bow Hoo? Great, then stay off my f@#king page you imbecilic fecal-munching maggot. dont ever and I mean EVER post here again. If the moderators don't do something to get rid of you, I will.

Anyway, Here is an awesome song from BREAKING BENJAMINs. Check it out.

"Forget It"

It's a crime you let it happen to me
Nevermind, I'll let it happen to you
Out of mind, forget it there's nothing to lose
But my mind and all the things I wanted

Everytime I get it I throw it away
It's a sign, I get it, I wanna stay
By the time I lose it I'm not afraid
I'm alive but I can Surely fake it

How can I believe when this cloud hangs over me
You're the part of me that I don't wanna see

Forget it

There's a place I see you follow me
Just a taste of all that might come to be
I'm alone but holding breath you can breathe
To question every answer counted

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way

Forget it

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way

It's a crime you let it happen to me
Out of mind, I love it, easy to please
Nevermind, forget it, just memories
On a page inside a spiral notebook

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way
I can live forever here

Forget it

How can I believe when this cloud hangs over me
You're a part of me that I don't wanna see

I can live forever here

Originally posted by Ya Krunk'd Floo
This guy's are pretty good:

Poems I like...

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Anyway, Here is an awesome song from BREAKING BENJAMINs. Check it out.

"Forget It"

It's a crime you let it happen to me
Nevermind, I'll let it happen to you
Out of mind, forget it there's nothing to lose
But my mind and all the things I wanted

Everytime I get it I throw it away
It's a sign, I get it, I wanna stay
By the time I lose it I'm not afraid
I'm alive but I can Surely fake it

How can I believe when this cloud hangs over me
You're the part of me that I don't wanna see

Forget it

There's a place I see you follow me
Just a taste of all that might come to be
I'm alone but holding breath you can breathe
To question every answer counted

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way

Forget it

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way

It's a crime you let it happen to me
Out of mind, I love it, easy to please
Nevermind, forget it, just memories
On a page inside a spiral notebook

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way
I can live forever here

Forget it

How can I believe when this cloud hangs over me
You're a part of me that I don't wanna see

I can live forever here

nice

Love that song. Hurts like a mother to hear it, and it is running through my head right now... haha... so f#@king lonely it actually physically hurts.... *sighs* oh well. is good inspiration!

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Anyway, Here is an awesome song from BREAKING BENJAMINs. Check it out.

"Forget It"

It's a crime you let it happen to me
Nevermind, I'll let it happen to you
Out of mind, forget it there's nothing to lose
But my mind and all the things I wanted

Everytime I get it I throw it away
It's a sign, I get it, I wanna stay
By the time I lose it I'm not afraid
I'm alive but I can Surely fake it

How can I believe when this cloud hangs over me
You're the part of me that I don't wanna see

Forget it

There's a place I see you follow me
Just a taste of all that might come to be
I'm alone but holding breath you can breathe
To question every answer counted

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way

Forget it

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way

It's a crime you let it happen to me
Out of mind, I love it, easy to please
Nevermind, forget it, just memories
On a page inside a spiral notebook

Just fade away
Please let me stay
Caught in your way
I can live forever here

Forget it

How can I believe when this cloud hangs over me
You're a part of me that I don't wanna see

I can live forever here

Originally posted by ShapedByWords
lol crazy ass

Burning

Licking at my heart, eating away all feeling.
Laughing in my face, you caught me kneeling.
Kicking while I'm down, You sent me reeling.

I can no longer stand up alone, I am broken inside,
I can't move on my own, my pain no longer hides,
It bursts through my mask, and it rears it's ugly head,
Forcing my heart to the surface, as I lay here in bed,

I am dying a lonely slow and heart-wrenching death,
Immortality is worthless when your soul is out of breath,
And mine tires of the life I live, and all the lies that bind,
Nothing seems worth saving, as I review my mind,

But I can't let go or release, my power is sapped and dry,
My blood feels like it would freeze, and my tears are cold as ice,
I am in this crystal prison, the blue flames licking at my soul,
I cannot escape this torment, without that center to make me whole.

Originally posted by Coldfire
good job 😊

Really? I was thinking more towards the line of dumbass....

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
haha... that is the Benjamin's song, not mine... hahah.. and yeah. more dumb than crazy. fine line, and it has been crossed.