Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Jonesing for youFeeling empty, like I have eaten nothing,
My food turns to ash in my mouth.
The coolest waters to quench my thirst
Burn like hellfire going down.
My eyes drip tears of bitter brine,
But feel as dry as the sands of time,
My heart pumps my blood through this shell,
But you cannot find my pulse.
My ears hear nothing but the splash of sweat
Running down my face to puddle beneath me.
I have rested for days but feel only pain,
Like I never even slept at all.This dream ends, and I wake up in a shock,
Look over and see the emptiness beside me,
But no tears form, and the sadness fades,
I realize a beautiful truth in this loneliness.
I am alone, and learning so much,
And when I have you, I'll be the best!
Very interesting at beginning for a poem🙂
Originally posted by Lara
not your usual subject sweetie, very dark great as always 😄nice pic a little on the scary side though! bad bad bad bad flash!
me a tart!? 😕 I'm far from that angel 😂
haha.... yup... how one feels is an amazing collaboration of emotional insanity, pleading for release from this pitiful shell of existense..... sorry, got a little deep there for a sec... hahah you are a tart, you! hahahha! 😉
Cold, vay, thanks... haha. a bit morbid, and sorry for that... 😂
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
haha.... yup... how one feels is an amazing collaboration of emotional insanity, pleading for release from this pitiful shell of existense..... sorry, got a little deep there for a sec... hahah you are a tart, you! hahahha! 😉Cold, vay, thanks... haha. a bit morbid, and sorry for that... 😂
Originally posted by Coldfire
lol well I've written my share of kinda morbid poems so don't worry about it 😛
not too much, nope. haha! hey, some new blood.
Get a seat, down a brew, grab another, have a few,
Laugh and smile, play down the pain, put up your fronts, act insane,
Smoke that stick, watch the crowd, drunk and foolish, getting loud,
Dive on in, clothes and all, see them weave, see them fall,
Feel that heat, the burning desire, let him touch you, quench that fire,
Revel in hedonism, enjoy love so brief, exit early, get no relief,
Take you home, laugh on the way, an interesting party, a wild day,
Lay down and think, you never see, while you get drunk, I watch over thee...
*sigh* I wish some of the women I know could feel better about themselves and not get nuts like that.... but, nothing you can do except protect em, and know enough first aid to save their life if need be....
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
not too much, nope. haha! hey, some new blood.Get a seat, down a brew, grab another, have a few,
Laugh and smile, play down the pain, put up your fronts, act insane,
Smoke that stick, watch the crowd, drunk and foolish, getting loud,
Dive on in, clothes and all, see them weave, see them fall,
Feel that heat, the burning desire, let him touch you, quench that fire,
Revel in hedonism, enjoy love so brief, exit early, get no relief,
Take you home, laugh on the way, an interesting party, a wild day,
Lay down and think, you never see, while you get drunk, I watch over thee...*sigh* I wish some of the women I know could feel better about themselves and not get nuts like that.... but, nothing you can do except protect em, and know enough first aid to save their life if need be....
Originally posted by Coldfire
hmmm I know a lot of girls who are prolly like that every weekend.... I honestly can't see what's so great about getting drunk out your mind, maybe throwing all of it up, or even passing out and waking up with one hell of a hangover 😬 But then again, that's just me *shrugs*
I dunno.... just there as a guardian, both for injury and a-hole guys that threaten her. Nothing else I can do, so nothing else to do. Ha... but it was a good party. 🙂
and some new stuff!
Sending an Angel to Love
You cried up to Him, you begged Him "Please,
Send one for a while"
He smiled and said, "Not a problem, here,
Have one my child,"
He sent you an angel to love,
Cast him down straight from heaven,
He sent you an angel to love,
Love him now, before he leaves for heaven.
Now on this dark and painful world
He lives this life,
He comforts those and speaks the words
To free that knife
You've got an angel to love,
But you're blind, He's gonna go to heaven,
You've got this angel to love,
Don't wait till he has gone to heaven...
Now open up closed eyes of green,
And view him again,
He stand before you to free
Him from this sin
And only you and your touch
Can clear his mind
So would you please just reach out,
An be so kind?
This is your angel to love,
He wants you to come with him to heaven,
This is your angel to love,
Are you aware He'd take you into heaven?
(yes, I ripped the idea from Garbage's song, My lover's Box. very cool song, and the idea for this redux was from what a female friend said a while ago...)
Hilarious Mistakes
Your heart cries those bitter bloody tears,
You let all existence listen
You tell the wind your pain,
Hoping it will be carried away,
Searching for that perfect man,
Looking into every darkened hole,
Furiously tearing your soul apart,
Seeking what you think you are losing,
And all the while you cannot see,
Here is the forest for the trees.
Blind by your own foolish will
The drunken stupor, the drugged days,
The crying games and the lies you say,
Those you believed, and those you spread,
You are trapped in your own maze.
That mind of rot that you think is clear,
You have fallen for your own deception.
And when he walks away, head shaking,
You see too late who was there for you,
Who was giving it all for you,
Who gave a damn for you,
Who truly could have forever loved you.
Not for anyone in particular and yet for someone...... ha......
Aww! The ending to the last poem really shook some inspiration into me.. 😐 Interesting, as I've been quite uninspired lately dontgetit
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Jonesing for youFeeling empty, like I have eaten nothing,
My food turns to ash in my mouth.
The coolest waters to quench my thirst
Burn like hellfire going down.
My eyes drip tears of bitter brine,
But feel as dry as the sands of time,
My heart pumps my blood through this shell,
But you cannot find my pulse.
My ears hear nothing but the splash of sweat
Running down my face to puddle beneath me.
I have rested for days but feel only pain,
Like I never even slept at all.This dream ends, and I wake up in a shock,
Look over and see the emptiness beside me,
But no tears form, and the sadness fades,
I realize a beautiful truth in this loneliness.
I am alone, and learning so much,
And when I have you, I'll be the best!
A little unlike your usual style but you pulled it off quite smoothly... what more can I say? Well done.. XD
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Hilarious MistakesYour heart cries those bitter bloody tears,
You let all existence listen
You tell the wind your pain,
Hoping it will be carried away,
Searching for that perfect man,
Looking into every darkened hole,
Furiously tearing your soul apart,
Seeking what you think you are losing,
And all the while you cannot see,
Here is the forest for the trees.
Blind by your own foolish will
The drunken stupor, the drugged days,
The crying games and the lies you say,
Those you believed, and those you spread,
You are trapped in your own maze.
That mind of rot that you think is clear,
You have fallen for your own deception.
And when he walks away, head shaking,
You see too late who was there for you,
Who was giving it all for you,
Who gave a damn for you,
Who truly could have forever loved you.Not for anyone in particular and yet for someone...... ha......
Originally posted by Tassie
Aww! The ending to the last poem really shook some inspiration into me.. 😐 Interesting, as I've been quite uninspired lately dontgetitA little unlike your usual style but you pulled it off quite smoothly... what more can I say? Well done.. XD
Thanks babe. yeah, been feeling great, and wanted to branch out some. ha. hoped it came off decent,
Originally posted by ShapedByWordsthanks man... really love being in this boat, where a lovely woman cant see cause she looks too hard. 😆 so f#@king screwed up somedays... hahahah..... oi.
awesome work.
this was the stupid 10-minute poem that DW's last one inspired me to write.. and he forced me to post it lol
Truly
If only you knew
How I cared for you
How all I am and all I've done
dissolves in your presence
and my worth seems so few
If only you knew
How I craved to hold you
Though already my heart was yours,
I have never been enough for you.
Maybe if you knew,
Just how much I needed you
Maybe just once, you would smile
If you knew how loved you had been
Maybe, just once, you wouldn't have cried
And I would still give it all away
Even if for one moment
Only to hear you say
That you fell for me,
I would have drowned in your pain
to erase the tears you cried
And I would have died
Before I let the girl you loved
Hurt you so much again.
Why didn't you let the one who cared
Be there for you instead
Why could you not reveal yourself to her
forfeiting all you feared
Was it love: too much or not enough;
Did you fall right through for me?
You hurt us both, the one I loved
If only you knew what you did to me...
Keep on inspiring, dude. 😛
Originally posted by Tassie
this was the stupid 10-minute poem that DW's last one inspired me to write.. and he forced me to post it lolTruly
If only you knew
How I cared for you
How all I am and all I've done
dissolves in your presence
and my worth seems so fewIf only you knew
How I craved to hold you
Though already my heart was yours,
I have never been enough for you.Maybe if you knew,
Just how much I needed you
Maybe just once, you would smile
If you knew how loved you had been
Maybe, just once, you wouldn't have criedAnd I would still give it all away
Even if for one moment
Only to hear you say
That you fell for me,
I would have drowned in your pain
to erase the tears you cried
And I would have died
Before I let the girl you loved
Hurt you so much again.Why didn't you let the one who cared
Be there for you instead
Why could you not reveal yourself to her
forfeiting all you fearedWas it love: too much or not enough;
Did you fall right through for me?
You hurt us both, the one I loved
If only you knew what you did to me...Keep on inspiring, dude. 😛
I "forced" you cause it is a great poem, sissy. 😂
And I will try to, babe.
Originally posted by Tassie
this was the stupid 10-minute poem that DW's last one inspired me to write.. and he forced me to post it lolTruly
If only you knew
How I cared for you
How all I am and all I've done
dissolves in your presence
and my worth seems so fewIf only you knew
How I craved to hold you
Though already my heart was yours,
I have never been enough for you.Maybe if you knew,
Just how much I needed you
Maybe just once, you would smile
If you knew how loved you had been
Maybe, just once, you wouldn't have criedAnd I would still give it all away
Even if for one moment
Only to hear you say
That you fell for me,
I would have drowned in your pain
to erase the tears you cried
And I would have died
Before I let the girl you loved
Hurt you so much again.Why didn't you let the one who cared
Be there for you instead
Why could you not reveal yourself to her
forfeiting all you fearedWas it love: too much or not enough;
Did you fall right through for me?
You hurt us both, the one I loved
If only you knew what you did to me...Keep on inspiring, dude. 😛
Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Hilarious MistakesYour heart cries those bitter bloody tears,
You let all existence listen
You tell the wind your pain,
Hoping it will be carried away,
Searching for that perfect man,
Looking into every darkened hole,
Furiously tearing your soul apart,
Seeking what you think you are losing,
And all the while you cannot see,
Here is the forest for the trees.
Blind by your own foolish will
The drunken stupor, the drugged days,
The crying games and the lies you say,
Those you believed, and those you spread,
You are trapped in your own maze.
That mind of rot that you think is clear,
You have fallen for your own deception.
And when he walks away, head shaking,
You see too late who was there for you,
Who was giving it all for you,
Who gave a damn for you,
Who truly could have forever loved you.Not for anyone in particular and yet for someone...... ha......
Sorry DW...after having read your last pieces. I find it not your best. I see a ray of talent in you and some classical influences. Most of it are on a good start, but some lines meander a bit here and there. You've posted too many for me to pick just one, but if you want to know ask me and I'll dissect it.
This is not to say you're bad at what you do, but you do seem to have the seed of some very good themes and ideas! The work is the key!