Originally posted by Syreni try smthin while readin her poems i try to visualate myself in tht position watever it maybe like if rain i imagine myself as a raindrop
😂 Ok, sorry... basically I like the imagery she used, the comparisons in almost every verse, that sort of thing. I said she did it very well.
Originally posted by Coldfireha... what is it with females and babies... hahaha. well, glad it went great ! 🙂
Twas good other than that 😊 Spent lots of time around the campfire (partly cuz I was cold 😛 ), and chatted with the neighbors down there, and even got to see this one couple's new baby. Omg she was sooooo cute 😍
Originally posted by Syren
Coldfire, I just read the first of your poems in this thread, 'Sinking' and 'Betrayal' and I will read the rest when I get the chance. I haven't actually posted here and I feel like I've been quite rude 🥷Anyway, I really love your re-write of 'Sinking', including the metaphors... they are fantastic. It takes powerful imagination to think of even a few different metaphorical references and you've filled that piece excellently... I was really moved. You're very talented 😉
Originally posted by Syren
It's called maternal instinct, that's what it is 😛
Here's something I did today out of nowhere... I guess it's kind of a song... *shrugs*
Get Out
I see you sitting there,
Looking so smug in that chair,
A smirk upon your face,
Thinking you’ve put me in my place.
Your eyes they laugh at me,
Scorning me for all to see,
You may think that you have won,
But the battle has only just begun.
Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…
It always pleased you to beat me down,
Intimidating me with that dark frown,
Shoved my face in your glorious victory,
With you I can never, ever be free.
You thought that you had gained a hold,
But in this thought you were too bold,
Although I have to admit, I must say,
That I, as well, used to think this way.
Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…
Never again will I be mislead,
From now on I’ll watch where I tread,
You crumbled my trust, I won’t forget,
What you did, I’ll get you for yet.
I am much more than I appear,
Apparently to you this was not clear,
I can move on, I must, I will,
Through shattered love I’ll live on still.
Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…
You don’t see the damaged you’ve done,
And it’s like you do this just for fun,
But you did teach me one thing, this is true:
To never, ever give myself to people like you.
Never again....
Originally posted by Coldfirei likes d im officaially outa complimants i donno wat say but awsome sweetie
Here's something I did today out of nowhere... I guess it's kind of a song... *shrugs*Get Out
I see you sitting there,
Looking so smug in that chair,
A smirk upon your face,
Thinking you’ve put me in my place.Your eyes they laugh at me,
Scorning me for all to see,
You may think that you have won,
But the battle has only just begun.Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…It always pleased you to beat me down,
Intimidating me with that dark frown,
Shoved my face in your glorious victory,
With you I can never, ever be free.You thought that you had gained a hold,
But in this thought you were too bold,
Although I have to admit, I must say,
That I, as well, used to think this way.Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…Never again will I be mislead,
From now on I’ll watch where I tread,
You crumbled my trust, I won’t forget,
What you did, I’ll get you for yet.I am much more than I appear,
Apparently to you this was not clear,
I can move on, I must, I will,
Through shattered love I’ll live on still.Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…You don’t see the damaged you’ve done,
And it’s like you do this just for fun,
But you did teach me one thing, this is true:
To never, ever give myself to people like you.Never again....
Originally posted by Coldfireodd...i was almost singing to this one.
Here's something I did today out of nowhere... I guess it's kind of a song... *shrugs*Get Out
I see you sitting there,
Looking so smug in that chair,
A smirk upon your face,
Thinking you’ve put me in my place.Your eyes they laugh at me,
Scorning me for all to see,
You may think that you have won,
But the battle has only just begun.Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…It always pleased you to beat me down,
Intimidating me with that dark frown,
Shoved my face in your glorious victory,
With you I can never, ever be free.You thought that you had gained a hold,
But in this thought you were too bold,
Although I have to admit, I must say,
That I, as well, used to think this way.Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…Never again will I be mislead,
From now on I’ll watch where I tread,
You crumbled my trust, I won’t forget,
What you did, I’ll get you for yet.I am much more than I appear,
Apparently to you this was not clear,
I can move on, I must, I will,
Through shattered love I’ll live on still.Get out, get out,
Get out of my bed,
Shouldn’t have, shouldn’t have,
Believed what you said,
Shoved these, shoved these,
Thoughts into my head.
Just leave me alone!
Please, oh please, just leave me alone…You don’t see the damaged you’ve done,
And it’s like you do this just for fun,
But you did teach me one thing, this is true:
To never, ever give myself to people like you.Never again....
*gets out guitar...plays G, Dm, Am chords*
I like it!