Coldfire's Poetry Stuff

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loooong poem I wrote for English... does not reflect my emotions, so please don't worry about that 🙂

Raindrops

raindrops
fall
like tears
from the eyes
of a disappointed Goddess.

one single
shimmering bead of
innocent perfection
tumbles onto my
ashen cheek,
dashes down
the well used track
worn smooth
by a steady stream
of moisture,
the liquified symbol
of such agony and
anguish.

quite noticeably
thunder growls,
like the stomach
of a starving,
emaciated child.

the wind it
shrieks,
voicing the cries
I longingly wish
to enunciate, but
dare not to,
for fear of
repercussions.

reflections,
so accusing,
staring out from
teh scintillating surface
of this sharp
blade
I grasp in my hand,
so tenderly,
as I would a
newborn
swaddled in soft,
downy blankets.

the possible sensations
screaming through me
if this blade were to
pierce my soft, defenseless
flesh,
seem so endless.

also my blood,
the colour so lusciously
vibrant in the
haziness of my sight,
shall streak my skin,
the drops of
scarlet
sliding down the
silver of my blade in a
stream of shining jewels
of ruby,
shall be a wonderful issue
to investigate further...

it should be so easy...
all it takes
is one swipe,
one slash,
and the task
is finished...

no.

my passing shall
solve nothing;
it is only a
convenience
for those too
spineless to
seek other solutions.

staggering,
I release the knife,
slipping from fingers
too insensate to feel,
making aquaintances with
the solid soil beneath me,
reality
imposing itself into
my hazy thoughts.

raindrops,
glittering on my
overexcited and exposed
flesh,
cleansing me
of such impurities in
my mystified notions,
releasing the ballast
of guilt off my shoulders,
off my heart.

and in this cognition,
I am satisfied
to resume existing
for one more day.

Originally posted by Coldfire
aw thankies 😊
No prob. 😊

VERY nice..I'd give it a 20/10 😊

You made one little mistake though..

reflections,
so accusing,
staring out from
teh scintillating surface
of this sharp
blade

Merely a typo I'm guessing 😛

Originally posted by Coldfire
loooong poem I wrote for English... does not reflect my emotions, so please don't worry about that 🙂

Raindrops

i declare, in soft words, that hold steadfast the eyes that read. this poem, such delicate form like rice paper that wold tight to the sides of a dojo. to puncture it would bring.....uhm...lost

was very good. heh heh

Originally posted by Spawn_Master
VERY nice..I'd give it a 20/10 😊

You made one little mistake though..

reflections,
so accusing,
staring out from
teh scintillating surface
of this sharp
blade

Merely a typo I'm guessing 😛


haha yeah I see that now tee hee 😛 And thankies 😄
Originally posted by justjakk
i declare, in soft words, that hold steadfast the eyes that read. this poem, such delicate form like rice paper that wold tight to the sides of a dojo. to puncture it would bring.....uhm...lost

was very good. heh heh


Gracias 😊

they all rock!! 🤘 🤘

Originally posted by mikeydude
they all rock!! 🤘 🤘

😱 Aww thankies! hug

Originally posted by Coldfire
😱 Aww thankies! hug
More 😱

Originally posted by Ritoshi
More 😱

lol maybe this weekend 😛

😖hifty:

Originally posted by Coldfire
loooong poem I wrote for English... does not reflect my emotions, so please don't worry about that 🙂

Raindrops

Wow, Coldy. I'm supremely impressed with your way with words.

You're English teacher better give you an A. bat

... seriously though, I look forward to going back through your thread and reading what I've missed.
Cuz you got skills, luv. 😉

Originally posted by Ritoshi
😖hifty:

Or maybe not that weekend haha 😛 We need some more ideas hun 😖hifty:

Originally posted by Coldfire
loooong poem I wrote for English... does not reflect my emotions, so please don't worry about that 🙂

Raindrops

raindrops
fall
like tears
from the eyes
of a disappointed Goddess.

one single
shimmering bead of
innocent perfection
tumbles onto my
ashen cheek,
dashes down
the well used track
worn smooth
by a steady stream
of moisture,
the liquified symbol
of such agony and
anguish.

quite noticeably
thunder growls,
like the stomach
of a starving,
emaciated child.

the wind it
shrieks,
voicing the cries
I longingly wish
to enunciate, but
dare not to,
for fear of
repercussions.

reflections,
so accusing,
staring out from
teh scintillating surface
of this sharp
blade
I grasp in my hand,
so tenderly,
as I would a
newborn
swaddled in soft,
downy blankets.

the possible sensations
screaming through me
if this blade were to
pierce my soft, defenseless
flesh,
seem so endless.

also my blood,
the colour so lusciously
vibrant in the
haziness of my sight,
shall streak my skin,
the drops of
scarlet
sliding down the
silver of my blade in a
stream of shining jewels
of ruby,
shall be a wonderful issue
to investigate further...

it should be so easy...
all it takes
is one swipe,
one slash,
and the task
is finished...

no.

my passing shall
solve nothing;
it is only a
convenience
for those too
spineless to
seek other solutions.

staggering,
I release the knife,
slipping from fingers
too insensate to feel,
making aquaintances with
the solid soil beneath me,
reality
imposing itself into
my hazy thoughts.

raindrops,
glittering on my
overexcited and exposed
flesh,
cleansing me
of such impurities in
my mystified notions,
releasing the ballast
of guilt off my shoulders,
off my heart.

and in this cognition,
I am satisfied
to resume existing
for one more day.

wow very beautiful poem
i love it
🙂

Originally posted by D-Double
Wow, Coldy. I'm supremely impressed with your way with words.

You're English teacher better give you an A. bat

... seriously though, I look forward to going back through your thread and reading what I've missed.
Cuz you got skills, luv. 😉


She did... a 93% I think 😊

aww thankies hun hug

But most of my stuff is on http://www.nightfeather.deviantart.com ... I'm lazy so I don't put as much here lol 😛

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
wow very beautiful poem
i love it
🙂

Thanks! 😄 Nice to see you back again hun!

*bump*

lol 😛

Originally posted by Coldfire
*bump*

lol 😛

You Bumped and now you got to deliver more Poems 😖hifty:

Originally posted by Ritoshi
You Bumped and now you got to deliver more Poems 😖hifty:

But I'm too lazy right and tired right now shock

Originally posted by Coldfire
But I'm too lazy right and tired right now shock
How about now 😖hifty:

Originally posted by Coldfire
But I'm too lazy right and tired right now shock
hey babes, hope you are somewhat going good during this hot a.. summer! got online finally for a bit, gonna be back on regularly soon... miss you and JJ and Vay and all of ya'll alot. Email me your addy for a wedding invite, I am gettting married to Rebecca July 1st.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hey babes, hope you are somewhat going good during this hot a.. summer! got online finally for a bit, gonna be back on regularly soon... miss you and JJ and Vay and all of ya'll alot. Email me your addy for a wedding invite, I am gettting married to Rebecca July 1st.

I missed you too hun... it felt so odd not having you here, to tell you the truth lol. omg that's awesome!!!!!!! 😱 Congratulations dear!! hug