Originally posted by Darth_Janus
Well well. Nice work, guys. Windu, love it, but try breaking up the paragraphs a bit for user friendliness. otherwise, great. Fishy, nicely done, but I am thinking we could use more descriptions of the characters themselves. Give this picture some color, so to speak.
Actually I want them to stay like that for now, I'll elaborate on all of them later on... But I haven't written that much yet 😛
This is off topic but, no one looks at the other thread I put it in. . .
I think that GL's quote was misread. I think he meant Anakin to be 160% of Sidious, not 200%. I belive what he said was that Anakin would have been far more powerful than even Sidious, but after his fall on Mustafar, he had only half of his potential, about 80%. It makes sense, but I just want to see the quote again to make sure. If I'm right, it would clear up a lot of things, or at least simplify it. If someone knows the site, find out and copy the page onto a thread made for this purpose. Or, tell me the site and I'll check it out.
Anakin Skywalker
The golden Delta-7 Aersprite landed on the docking bay, shining like the rising Naboo sun. It landed quietly, the only sounds coming from the gentle vibrations of the engine and the beeping R2 droid in the ship's droid socket. The bulbous cockpit opened, and out stepped the most powerful being the galaxy had ever known.
Standing above six feet tall, garbed in a customized tunic, robed in a black armorweave cloak, and wearing an expression of almost unbelievable serenity, was Anakin Skywalker.
His gait was one of utmost confidence, tempered by decades of meditation, learning, and discpline. His dark, wavy hair was still in the vaccuum of space, the only thing keeping him from being sucked out into the endless void being a customized blue forcefield drawn across the small opening in the rock wall of the asteroid.
As he approached the durasteel door to the interior, Skywalker's droid companion, R2-D2, popped from the socket and raced to the door. An electric droid arm extended from the astromech's polished blue, white, and silver casing and slid itself into a small outlet. As the door opened, Anakin smiled and muttered a thanks to his droid, which foolowed him into the complex. It was a marvel to behold.
Shining, wide halls glistened white as seafoam, spreading elegantly into a large room, one that rivaled the most elaborately decorated collector's museum in its extravagance. Home, thought Anakin, smiling to himself.
Anakin had built this place for padme an dthe children after their birth on Polis Massa. He'd had help from various sources, including industrial owners who'd felt indebted to him for his services in the Clone Wars. Walking over to a lift, he stepped on the transparasteel platform and was carried an instant later to his chamber.
This was where he came to find peace and solace when the presence of Padme and the children was lacked. His family had flown off to the countryside of Naboo, where Padme's parents lived. As Anakin took of his robe and sat down in the middle of the room, he remembered one of his lessons with Obi-Wan. How he missed his old master.
Obi-Wan had been like a father to him, until the day he was cut down by the Sith Lord Darth Sidious, whom Anakin had once known as friend and mentor Palpatine. When the Sith Lord, in a stunning and unpredictable move, had revealed his plans to take over the Republic, Anakin had been stunned. On the verge of killing his old friend, Anakin turned away and left the building, running to his ship and returning to the Temple to report this to the Jedi Masters there.
Surprisingly, and to Anakin's relief, Obi-Wan had returned from Utapau, the droid general, grievous, having been shot down by a Republic Gunship. After telling his former Master the news, Anakin had been told to wait at the Temple as Obi-Wan, accompanied by Mace Windu, Kit fisto, Saesee Tiin, and Agen Kolar went to the Sith Lord's room to apprehend him.
Unable to wait while his friends died, for he felt their deaths in the Force, Anakin flew to the room to see Mace Windu and Obi-Wan standing over the Sith. he ran to their side and looked down at his former friend; and the one man who he thought could save Padme. As Mace Windu brought his saber in the air to strike down his enemy, Anakin had leapt at him, knocking him aside. Obi-Wan, in shock, threw Anakin out of the way as Plpatine launched lightning at Mace, throwing the Jedi out the shattered window to his death.
In his haste to rid himself of his enemies however, he'd struck Anakin and Obi-Wan partially with his attack, knocking Anakin to the ground and staggering Kenobi. Calling his Windu's saber to him, the Dark Lord had leapt up, and struck out at at Obi-Wan, dealing him a fatal blow. As Anakin screamed in emotional pain, he came to the realization that palpatine could not save Padme; only Anakin himself could. And with that knowledge, Anakin threw grabbed the shocked Sith Lord and threw him bodily out the window.
Running back to his friend Kenobi, he let his tears fall upon the Jedi's face, cradling him as his Master passed away and joined the Force.
Since that day, Anakin Skywalker had joined Yod and the other Jedi in assisting to rebuild the shattered Republic, slaving day and night, traveling from system to system, in the hopes of re-kindling the peoples' trust in the Jedi, and their faith in the Republic.
Now emerging back into the present, Anakin's mind was beginning to clear away the thoughts of twenty years ago, readying him for his meditation. A moment later- a tremor in the Force. Anakin opened his eyes, divining that the ripples in the Force could mean one thing; there was somone else in his presence. He was alone no longer.
Here's the revised version, lol, to make Kamikz and me happier.
The customized golden Delta-7 Aersprite landed on the docking bay, shining like the rising Naboo sun. It landed quietly, the only sounds coming from the gentle vibrations of the engine and the beeping R2 droid in the ship's droid socket. The bulbous cockpit opened, and out stepped the most powerful being the galaxy had ever known.
Standing above six feet tall, garbed in a customized tunic, robed in a black armorweave cloak, and wearing an expression of almost unbelievable serenity, was Anakin Skywalker.
His gait was one of utmost confidence, tempered by decades of meditation, learning, and discpline. His dark, wavy hair blew softly in the cleansing, chemically altered, artificial wind. The only thing keeping him from being sucked out into the endless void was a customized blue forcefield drawn across the small opening in the rock wall of the asteroid.
As he approached the durasteel door to the interior, Skywalker's droid companion, R2-D2, popped from the socket and raced to the door. An electric droid arm extended from the astromech's polished blue, white, and silver casing and slid itself into a small outlet. As the door opened, Anakin smiled and muttered a thanks to his droid, which foolowed him into the complex. It was a marvel to behold.
Shining, wide halls glistened white as seafoam, spreading elegantly into a large room, one that rivaled the most elaborately decorated collector's museum in its extravagance. Home, thought Anakin, smiling to himself.
Anakin had built this place for Padme and the children after their birth on Polis Massa. He'd had help from various sources, including industrial owners who'd felt indebted to him for his services in the Clone Wars.
Walking over to a lift, he stepped on the transparasteel platform and was carried an instant later to his chamber.
This was where he came to find peace and solace when the presence of Padme and the children was lacked. His family had flown off to the countryside of Naboo, where Padme's parents lived. As Anakin took of his robe and sat down in the middle of the room, he remembered one of his lessons with Obi-Wan. .
Obi-Wan was like a father to him, even after the day he was betrayed by Anakin and almost cut down by the Sith Lord Darth Sidious, whom Anakin had once known as friend and mentor Palpatine. When the Sith Lord, in a stunning and unpredictable move, had revealed his plans to take over the Republic, Anakin had been stunned. On the verge of killing his old friend, Anakin turned away and left the building, running to his ship and returning to the Temple to report this to the Jedi Masters there.
Surprisingly, and to Anakin's relief, Obi-Wan had returned from Utapau, the droid general, grievous, having been shot down by a Republic Gunship. After telling his former Master the news, Anakin had been told to wait at the Temple as Obi-Wan, accompanied by Mace Windu, Kit fisto, Saesee Tiin, and Agen Kolar went to the Sith Lord's room to apprehend him.
Unable to wait while his friends died, for he felt their deaths in the Force, Anakin flew to the room to see Mace Windu and Obi-Wan standing over the Sith. he ran to their side and looked down at his former friend; and the one man who he thought could save Padme. As Mace Windu brought his saber in the air to strike down his enemy, Anakin had leapt at him, knocking him aside. Obi-Wan, in shock, threw Anakin out of the way as Palpatine launched lightning at Mace, throwing the Jedi out the shattered window to his death.
In his haste to rid himself of his enemies however, he'd struck Anakin and Obi-Wan partially with his attack, knocking Anakin to the ground and staggering Kenobi. Calling his Windu's saber to him, the Dark Lord had leapt up, and struck out at at Obi-Wan, dealing him a deadly blow. As Anakin screamed in emotional pain, he came to the realization that Palpatine could not save Padme; only Anakin himself could. And with that knowledge, Anakin threw grabbed the shocked Sith Lord and threw him bodily out the window.
He ran back to Obi-Wan, who lay on the floor gasoing, clutching his wounded stomach. Anakin quickly inspected the wound; it was not fatal.
He felt light-headed in his relief, and grinned at his master.
"Oh, come now, Master. You've been through worse ordeals than this," said Anakin.
"You're right," replied Obi-Wan wryly. "And seems you put me through every one of them."
Smiling and laughing in his happiness, Anakin half carried his wounded comrade to his ship, where he flew to the Med-Center and had Obi-Wan taken care of.
Since that day, Anakin Skywalker had joined Yoda, Obi-Wan, and the other Jedi in assisting to rebuild the shattered Republic, slaving day and night, traveling from system to system, in the hopes of re-kindling the peoples' trust in the Jedi, and their faith in the Republic.
Feeling he owed Obi-Wan and the other Jedi an explanation for his actions, Anakin had told them about his secret marriage to Padme, and why he had defended Palpatine in a manner that had cost a Jedi his life. After some pondering, the Council had acepted him back into the Order with open arms.
In the years since then, Padme had given birth to twins, a son named Luke, and a daughter named Leia. Anakin had trained Luke himself, while Obi-Wan took over the tutelage of Leia. Leia took after her mother, focusing on diplomacy over combat. Obi-Wan was eager to take an apprentice with qualities reminiscent of his. Luke, on the other hand, was a firce fighter, even at his young age. Impulsive, yet disciplined, he would be a Force to be reckoned with.
Now emerging back into the present, Anakin's mind was beginning to clear away the thoughts of twenty years ago, readying him for his meditation. A moment later- a tremor in the Force. Anakin opened his eyes, divining that the ripples in the Force could mean one thing; there was somone else in his presence. He was alone no longer.