Supernovadragons Poetry Thread

right dont be mean and just pass my poetry if u think it is crap. 😮 😛 😄

Assasin
Creeping slowly in the darkness
hidden in the shadows
He waits for the right moment
on which to make his move
He finds his target
Attaches the silencer to his pistol
and pulls the trigger
the trigger makes the hammer strike and the bullet is away
It hits the target in the head and strait into the brain
One shot was all it took

Srry it is so dark and evil but they wont all be like this 😆

I find this one has lots of imagery 🙂 Lol and don't worry about if its dark and evil or not... I kinda felt that way a couple times this weekend myself...

Originally posted by Coldfire
I find this one has lots of imagery 🙂 Lol and don't worry about if its dark and evil or not... I kinda felt that way a couple times this weekend myself...

thx i feel that way most of the time at skool Coldfire hug

feel free to add comments and your own poetry

Originally posted by supernovadragon
thx i feel that way most of the time at skool Coldfire hug

Originally posted by Coldfire
That's not right at all... Although I've felt like that at school many a time myself....

Originally posted by supernovadragon
well if u went to my skool and stayed in my class u would understand

Originally posted by supernovadragon
right dont be mean and just pass my poetry if u think it is crap. 😮 😛 😄

But if those who think your poetry is bad do not judge it and offer advice on improving it, how will you grow and learn as a poet? IMO, your 'Assasin' poem, could have used some softer words to create more of a flow for the reader to follow, especially on the line: "Attaches the silencer to his pistol". Please don't be offended, I'm trying to help you, in no way am I trying to be cruel.

Originally posted by intoxicatedpoet
But if those who think your poetry is bad do not judge it and offer advice on improving it, how will you grow and learn as a poet? IMO, your 'Assasin' poem, could have used some softer words to create more of a flow for the reader to follow, especially on the line: "Attaches the silencer to his pistol". Please don't be offended, I'm trying to help you, in no way am I trying to be cruel.

Offering advice is not meant to be cruel... Like intoxicatedpoet here did with one of my poems... and after I changed what he suggested it sounded better 😄

ok u can say stuff to help me improve, oh and wtf does IMO mean

Originally posted by supernovadragon
ok u can say stuff to help me improve, oh and wtf does IMO mean

Very Freakin Awesome dude! glad to see your thread up and runnin! hahaha bring it on!

It's short and the imagery fits, I especially like the line "the trigger makes the hammer strike and the bullet is away", and, like ap said, to set the tone even better you could probably use some more effective words to replace "waits", etc. 🙂
Otherwise, well done. 👆 More. XD

Thx guys u are all the best

Bass Songs
The feel
The Rattle
The shaking
U know its bass
When u get that bass feeling

haha nice. yeah, be careful about anger and schools dude. had a big problem with mine till 11th grade. wanted to take out most of my class, and sought some counseling. if it is getting you that angry, go talk to your school counselor or to a minister. get it out. and bring some more poems man!

Cars
The speed
The Sound
The adrenaline
Gone in 10 seconds
well it not really good but atleast it is a poem.

neat. do one on swords, if you will.

Swords
The crisp, sharp blade
The shining metal
The soft handle
The Beauty
The craftsmanship
The Killing
This on goes out to dreaming warrior

Thank you dude! nice work. hahah!