Originally posted by Ultraman Baltan
Midnight in Midtro City is always calm and cool. A jungle of buildings upon the area are found everywhere. Think of a New York City that sleeps. Very few are out at any time of night in this particular street.
A small boy runs out into the street with his small Spiderman action figure.
“I’m gonna get you Tommy!” he shouts.
“Nuh uh!” says little Tommy.
They run across the entire neighborhood, screaming and jumping.
“Peter! Tommy! Stop it!” shouts their mother. “People are trying to sleep! You aren’t even allowed to be up this time!”
“Come on! Five more minutes?” pouts Peter.
“You heard what your mother said, boys.” replied the father who just came out of the house.
A few seconds later, a loud motor is heard. Every moment it grows louder, until the reason shows itself. A large motorcycle starts to bolt down the street, almost hitting the kids. The rider pulls out a hand grenade and chucks it into the open window of a car, utterly destroying it and causing thousands of pieces of flaming metal to rain upon the street. He then begins firing a handgun at the windows of the innocent homes. Again and again the chaos continues until everything on the street is a pile of ashes and trash.
The kids run to their mom, sobbing and screaming. The neighbors rush out side to see what the matter is, but it’s too late. The destruction was finished.
“My car!” screams a man. “What did that bastard do to my car!”
“That’s never happened before!” says an old woman.
Suddenly, the motor is heard again. But no longer is there one ringing noise, but two. Then ten. Then fifty.
“Get in the house, boys.” says the father with a fear struck look.
“But dad........”
“Dammit, Peter! Get in the house!”
Everyone on the streets ran into their houses like mice being chased by a cat. They knew what was going to happen, and they were hoping to God they survive.
Originally posted by Ultraman Baltan
😐 It was a part that I wrote leading to something, thus giving no value or spoiler to the story and maintains the novel a secret to those interested.
But it also does nothing at all to really attract any attention or make someone think "I wonder what's next" and make them be interested in wanting to read more.
And please learn to use the edit button.
Originally posted by Lana
But it also does nothing at all to really attract any attention or make someone think "I wonder what's next" and make them be interested in wanting to read more.And please learn to use the edit button.
I have the edit button and know how to use it, yet it seems you do not understand the process of how the developement of sneak peaking works. I do not mind you being interested or not until the book becomes a functional work, but this is just a tidbit of what is yet to come.
And it seems that you honestly believe the second part to be real when I clearly stated that it was merely a hoax.
Originally posted by Ultraman BaltanAnd you think this is going to be good......nonekok
New part!He SaT qutly on the stairs eatin his grape jely.
"What if i wanted to kill Bob?" he wondered. But, he didn't care too much as he sat down and ate more. "Idea!" he said. "I'll go save the world!"
He then ran of with his cape tied to his shirt and went to stopp Luth Lexor once and fur al.
Originally posted by Ultraman Baltan
I have the edit button and know how to use it, yet it seems you do not understand the process of how the developement of sneak peaking works. I do not mind you being interested or not until the book becomes a functional work, but this is just a tidbit of what is yet to come.And it seems that you honestly believe the second part to be real when I clearly stated that it was merely a hoax.
I know plenty about writing, thanks, but what does that have to do with your double-posting? Nothing.
And I did not believe the second part to be anything real. I'm talking about your first little 'sneak peak'. The whole point of a preview like that is to try and attract people's attention and get them interested in reading more, and your preview does not succeed in that.
Originally posted by Ultraman BaltanWhat to put in your novel: Good stuff.
Even though I just said it had little relivence to the actual story and is merely a test to what and what not to put into my novel. My dear King Of Kings, you disappoint me.
What to not put in your novel: Anything you wrote.
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