A Broken Heart Is Hard To Heal

haha.... dont b, i was just messin around... it wasnt that bad of a musical.... luckily i love cats... so i wont hold a grudge doped

Ok Ok Now Back 2 Writing and Poems

post some more, and ill comment on poems, but til then...... we shall talk.... somewhere else tongue

Retrained
Hurt and scared my hearts restrained
By a steel cold hard chain
The chain blocks the way of what could be
It's halfway broken but thats from me
The other half must be torn by him
But the chances of that are very dim
I cry and bleed for him to break the chain
One day he'll do it very fain
Til then I wait depressed and restrained
On my heart by that cold steel chain

How do u guys like this one make suggestions ppl

What dya mena by 'one day nhe'll do it very fain'? I don't get it, apart from that it's ok.
Still hangin onto rhyming I see?

well im workin on not rhymin but yea in that one it rhymes but 2 do it very fain is 2 do it very glady or happily

Anger Depression Sadness
Will he ever love me
Confusion Heartbreak Lies
Does he notice me at all
Forgiveness Pain Wondering
How can he still let me fall
Hatred Suffering Goodbyes
Why can't he see my true feelings
Restraint Chains Darkness
How can he keep my heart locked up inside
Blood Sharpness Falling
Now I say my final goodbyes

I tried somthing a little new I think it kinda sucks but its up 2 u guys

I think it's great, I love the whole wording thing, you know, three seperate words that reflect a dark emotion after every few lines, keep it up!

Thx I was kinda nervous 2 do that but thx immortality

No probs, I'm sooooo bored, any more poems?

umm idk I gotta write em lol and I'm bored 2 so I guess I'll write sum more

Cool, look forward to readin more!

Falling
Falling hard down a deep crevase
Not knowing when I'm going to hit
Hoping he will be there to catch me
Darkest of night can't see the bottom
Wondering if I'll live or die
Crying in pain calling for help
No one can save me now
Ready to give up and land
Feeling closer and closer to death
Seeing the bottom ready to say goodbye
Waking up in a cold sweat
Never knowing if I was saved or not
Grabing the covers hiding my face
Crying in fear and pain
Waiting another night to face my fate

Cool, nice one! Man, this guy in your poems sounds like a real bastard. Is it based on somebody real or is it just a random 'he'?
Nice rhythm, also no use of punctuation, which adds to the effect, very good! (Oh God! I'm starting to sound like a teacher!)

Well hes not that bad but sumtimes he just confuses me and yea its based on a real guy thx

Yeah I got that, still cool.

thx

hmm, bored?

yea bored