Originally posted by Nemesis X
I was on the Epic Games Forums and made some FanFics. Here are the links:http://forums.epicgames.com/showthread.php?t=693082
http://forums.epicgames.com/showthread.php?t=688292
http://forums.epicgames.com/showthread.php?t=672615
http://forums.epicgames.com/showthread.php?t=660233
So tell me, what do you think of them?
Your stories need more structure. It's as if you're writing it as you go without giving much thought into it. A vitality when writing a story, any story, is your sense for details. It is hard to find the perfect balance between too little details (Your stories) and too much details (Can't think of any right now, but I've read a book like that). You don't have to describe how someone scratch themselves spontaneously because of an itch, but you should consider a variety of other aspects of description.
Physical descriptions of characters, the main characters and newly arrived is a very popular detail to include and a vitality for any fan of proper literature. The location, or various rooms in which you and your characters are is another aspect of description of preference by readers. Unless it's a bland building, at which point an overall description of the nature of the building is adequate, you should include various furniture, objects, landmarks or plainly the nature of the area when you write about it.
"The forest haunt had an omnious glow about it, presumably originating from the unnatural color of the moon and as Bertrand exited the density of the forest and stepped into the opening, an eerie feeling began to creep up on him. Something wasn't right." in place of "There was a creepy opening in the forest, but he was not afraid and walked over there"
Something some oppose while other approve of is the controlling of characters that the story does not focus on. Many that write fanfiction (Or amateur novels at all) generally forget to give characters that are not focused on colors. A common mistake for example is a man entering, say a castle, and he soon come across a couple of palace guards and the writer neglect describing these guards. There's no harm in describing the armor they wear, the posture at which they approach, if they seem friendly or hostile and various indications of their intentions through a viewing of their appearance and movement.
Also, and this is quite important, keep in mind that you are writing an amateur novel, not a movie. You will need to include details you normally wouldn't come across in games and movies. This include, but is not limited to facts that the viewer of a movie or player of a game does not come across through appearance. This is one of the reasons why some prefer reading a book over watching a movie, because reading the book gives you greater insight of a story. It does not only describe what you see, but it also describe how various characters feel, their thoughts and intentions. Unless the movie is narrated, it all comes down to acting out thoughts and intentions through bodylanguage and words. When you write a novel, or fanfiction, you have the privilege of sharing the thoughts, feelings and past of the characters.
You can slip in fragments of what the future holds, you can include details on their past, their childhood or, say military background.
"Being a former warplane pilot, Captain Isaac Chevalier was not entirely unfamiliar with maneuvers of this nature. It was a simple task for a man of his experience to device a plan" in place of "He knew what to do"
Basically, in your stories, you never give people a chance to get involved. You force the events onto them and that's all.
Originally posted by Obsidian Fury
Much of that video is a technique called Parkour. If I may be blunt, though, you are impressed by the wrong things in that video. While 0:50-1:00 is sweet, I myself think 1:14-1:21 is way more impressive and that's not even the most impressive thing in it.And as sidenote, the choice of song is terrible. While a fine song, it's not propriate for that video.
Oh don't get me wrong, I know it's Parkour, and I know there's much better showings. I just thought that particular scene was the most hilarious, since I posted the vid for laughs more than anything. You're, right, too, 1:14-1:21 is amazing.
Originally posted by Obsidian Fury
Your stories need more structure. It's as if you're writing it as you go without giving much thought into it. A vitality when writing a story, any story, is your sense for details. It is hard to find the perfect balance between too little details (Your stories) and too much details (Can't think of any right now, but I've read a book like that). You don't have to describe how someone scratch themselves spontaneously because of an itch, but you should consider a variety of other aspects of description.Physical descriptions of characters, the main characters and newly arrived is a very popular detail to include and a vitality for any fan of proper literature. The location, or various rooms in which you and your characters are is another aspect of description of preference by readers. Unless it's a bland building, at which point an overall description of the nature of the building is adequate, you should include various furniture, objects, landmarks or plainly the nature of the area when you write about it.
"The forest haunt had an omnious glow about it, presumably originating from the unnatural color of the moon and as Bertrand exited the density of the forest and stepped into the opening, an eerie feeling began to creep up on him. Something wasn't right." in place of "There was a creepy opening in the forest, but he was not afraid and walked over there"
Something some oppose while other approve of is the controlling of characters that the story does not focus on. Many that write fanfiction (Or amateur novels at all) generally forget to give characters that are not focused on colors. A common mistake for example is a man entering, say a castle, and he soon come across a couple of palace guards and the writer neglect describing these guards. There's no harm in describing the armor they wear, the posture at which they approach, if they seem friendly or hostile and various indications of their intentions through a viewing of their appearance and movement.
Also, and this is quite important, keep in mind that you are writing an amateur novel, not a movie. You will need to include details you normally wouldn't come across in games and movies. This include, but is not limited to facts that the viewer of a movie or player of a game does not come across through appearance. This is one of the reasons why some prefer reading a book over watching a movie, because reading the book gives you greater insight of a story. It does not only describe what you see, but it also describe how various characters feel, their thoughts and intentions. Unless the movie is narrated, it all comes down to acting out thoughts and intentions through bodylanguage and words. When you write a novel, or fanfiction, you have the privilege of sharing the thoughts, feelings and past of the characters.
You can slip in fragments of what the future holds, you can include details on their past, their childhood or, say military background.
"Being a former warplane pilot, Captain Isaac Chevalier was not entirely unfamiliar with maneuvers of this nature. It was a simple task for a man of his experience to device a plan" in place of "He knew what to do"
Basically, in [b]your
stories, you never give people a chance to get involved. You force the events onto them and that's all. [/B]
Well I'm glad to see someone in this forum is giving an honest but most importantly, an intelligent opinion. All I've been getting was a barrage of "you're an idiot" and "you suck." Considering that I never meant to bash anybody, they show to be the idiots when they leave comments like that. Glad to know that the world doesn't have a short supply on people who think. After reading your post, I will think about making better FanFics.
Originally posted by RE: Blaxican
Lord of the Rings?
I have not read the books but now that you mention it, I have heard that being said before.
Originally posted by Nemesis X
Well I'm glad to see someone in this forum is giving an honest but most importantly, an intelligent opinion. All I've been getting was a barrage of "you're an idiot" and "you suck." Considering that I never meant to bash anybody, they show to be the idiots when they leave comments like that. Glad to know that the world doesn't have a short supply on people who think. After reading your post, I will think about making better FanFics.
Glad I could help (If you decide to write better pieces). Happy to hear you will think about it.
Originally posted by Peach
How have you not read LOTR?And yes, they are incredibly descriptive. Tolkien is a master world-builder, above all else.
Lord of the Rings has never interested me as a franchise, so I have never taken the time to sit down and read it. The movies could not be avoided, of course.
I love the movies, but I find I can't really rewatch them.
The books on the other hand, I've read so many times that they've fallen apart.
Also, this made me laugh so much...
http://i10.photobucket.com/albums/a122/drice794/gifs/000az5cg.gif
