POTC 5 ...our next version

Started by tee_pirategirl30 pages

wooooooooooooow luuuuuuuurv it pleasy pleasy do one more part and then I'll do one again..that's so great now someone knows and someone is gonna help him I was wondering how to do that..that was great..

okay...but I need some minutes!!

ok and mean while i'm gonna start typing something(don't worry it will have nothing to do with yours) for later

you're making jack feel good! haha... he's such a crazy joker... 😬

Next morning, after everyone is awake. The sun is shining and a soft wind is blowing. Jacky was the whole night thinking about how she could help him.

Jacky: (walks over to Jack) Do you know where Liz wanted to go?

Jack: Well, she said something....she wanted to settle..I’ve heard...she wanted to go to England again...

Jacky: England? Oh, alright then....I have a friend there...called....(to herself) well what was his name? ....Ah!!..Julian!! He’s a blacksmith!!

Jack: Oh, god...not another eunuch!!

Will: Jack!! I’ve heard that!! You could be more friendly to me, I’ve saved your life.

Jack: Well, then you expect that thanks are in order then?

Will: Yes...

Jack: (to Jacky) Alright do you have a course now??

Jacky: Mr. Gibbs....set sail in the direction of England...we have to do something there.

Norri comes and wants to kiss Jacky, but she moves away. Later Jacky is alone in Jacks cabin...while Norri enters.

Norri: Why do you run away from me?

Jacky: I do not! But I don’t want to see Jack suffer more then he does now.

Norri: It’s his own fault!

Jacky: How can you say that. He’s my brother. (she glances at him) Maybe I am excatly like him. (she knew that she has hurt him with that)

Norri: Very fine...then you should maybe think again if you really want to marry me. (with that he leaves the cabin)

Jacky throws an empty bottle to the door, which is opening in that moment! PLOING!!
Jack has got the bottle on his head. Now he falls down to the ground.

Jacky: Oh, shit!!

She runs to Jack and shakes him. He slowly awakes.

Jack: Oh, my head!

Jacky: Oh, I’m terribly sorry, I didn’t know! I was just so angry.

Jack: Well...I think that’s in our blood, always to destroy something.

Jacky helps Jack on his feet and he walks over to his bed, falling down on it.

Jack: I’m really happy to know you...you’re as crazy as me

Jacky: (blushes, she didn’t know why, but she did) Oh, thank you!

Jack was glancing at her. He was wondering why she starts to blush. He has just said that he admires her. Was that wrong?

Jacky knew she was thinking too much about him, especially the last days. She knew more then enough that he was his brother, alright his stepbrother , but nonetheless his brother. She hated herself for this kind of thoughts.

Jacky: I have to go....I....I must...speak to my fiancee...I think....he’s angry at me.

With that she leaves his cabin!!

OH MY GOD you have a twisted mind very twisted

I LOVED IT

yes, I have....but I don't know to continue....there are some opportunitys

1) Jacky is not his brother....grant could have married another woman and she had a daughter not with him
2) Jacky is just a bit confussed because of norri
3) Jacky somehow, when jack is drunk again, gets just a kiss (but a good one), but that's enough and realise that's because she was afraid of norri
4) i have no idea

the 3rd is good as long as liz/jack get together and jack doesn't remember it happened

alright!

so shal I write something? you can pick another option if you like though all sound fine to me

no, it's a good option...and yes, you can continue!!

ok in a few mins

well, but then both can't remember, it'S better for the story, alright?

camera cuts to alizabeth who is laying on her bed it's just getting dark outside..fast asleep you can tell she fell asleep crying..her face is wet and a single drop of tear strays along her cheek..suddenly we hear a CRACK in the distance..not loud at all but liz having have led the pirate life for so long has practiced ears her eyes pop open as she tip toes toward her window only to see victoria moving along in the bushes.
liz(whispers)-knew it!
grabs the box from it's hiding place.
liz(still whispering)something tells me I"ll be needing these especialy the sword.
camera cuts to victoria glancing at some gaurds from behind a bush.
liz(OS) let me tell you something...
victoria nearly screams but liz's hand covers her mouth and drags her behind a bush further from the gaurds.liz lets go of her.
liz-vic,just listen to me please..just give me a chance to..
vic(calmly) we're leaving tonight wether you like it or not..
liz-fair enough but please listen..
vic notices that there are tears in elizabeth's eyes, she knows it's seriouse.
liz- victoria..i would never ask you not to leave if I didn't have good reason.I was you once and I did the same and...victoria I'm going to tell you something I haven't told your parents not a word alright?
vic zipps her lips in an imagionary motion.
liz- the story wasn't that I didn't love will and...we split..truth is I fell in love...with a man..a-a captain and..and
camera cutas to jack talking to grant.
jack- I was head over heals in love with her..
cuts back to liz.
liz-we got married very shortly after we got together...
cuts to jack.
jack- those were the days! we had adventure...
camera moves fast between the two scenes now.
liz-adventure beyond anything you can imagine...
jack-I made a mistake..hugest mistake of my life...
liz-I was disgusted with him
the camera now shows half of the screen is liz the other half jack they're facing eachother liz's background is loads of bushes and jack's his cabin.
liz and jack in unison- can you keep the biggest secret of my life?!
jack takes all of the screen.
jack-she's..
liz-pregnant!
victoria-you're WHAT?
liz(smiling despite of herself) pregnant(she whispers)which is why you must trust me..even someone who you trust most in this world can betray you...that's the way of pirates..and I'm not saying that your love for julian isn't true but-but I thought I was in love with will because he was the closest thing to the life I wanted but when I discovered the REAL thing...
cuts to jack.
jack-it was magnificent!
back to liz.
liz-I know I can't change your mind so-so I'm coming with you..you don't know what lays ahead I'm coming back here though..after I'm sure you'll be alright.now wait a second I'll be right back.
she disappears behind some bushes comes out again wearing her pirate clothes. smirking a jack-like smirk despite of herself..her eyes shining.
liz-lets go.

ok the next one I'm writing is the kiss and ok they both can't remember it IS better for the story

yesss!!!!!!!! Cool I love it!!!!!!!!!

jack's cabin now the sky is almost black.not midnight yet.
grant-jack..don't want to piss you off again but..you've almost drained 2 bottles o' rum by yourself and just last night you died from having it so..
jack roles his eyes and ignores grant.
jack-you should be glad I'm not throwing you outta me cabin.don't.push.itI need some air(gets up heads outside)
grant sighs and smirks,shakes his head as if to say "oh well he's a sparrow"
on deck:
jack strolls about and sees jacky sitting beside the railing holding a bottle of rum...
jack-you seem troubled(flops down next to her) that's my area of experties...
jacky-he's really mad at me...
jack-and she's really REALLY mad at me so?!
he is obviousely REALLY drunk he's comfortable talking about lizzie as if it's not important.
jacky laughs all drunk.
jacky-you know what jack? I wish more men were like you..all rough around the edges and soft inside..
jack's hand wrap around her body.
jack-yes I DO know love..we are a rare breed we are...
they look deep into each others eyes.
jack- YOU KNOW...I just had a chat with dad and..although I must say you are much of a sparrow but we can never know..you know what I mean? I mean for all dad said I bet your mom got married after he and dad seperated and THEN she married another man only to have YO--
jacky stops his rambling by putting one fingure on his lips and then kissing him lightly he kisses back and for only one second they have a soft deep kiss but jack parts from her laughs still drunk..
jack(louder now) really BAD eggs..
passes out.
jacky touches her own lips. what has she done?! that was her brother..it didn't feel like..she only did it cause they were both drunk and..she was sad about james...she hates herself for what she did..though her kiss with jack was passionate she had to admit it felt wrong.she makes her way to her bed crying..but when she wakes up she remembers nothing NOTHING of last night and neither does he.
jack is woken by gibbs it's still really dark maybe just a tad over midnight...
jack-oi..wow..hey..wha am I doin here I was in me cabin and...I was talking to dad...
gibbs-jack..we're THERE.we can't go any closer without getting seen I suggest the long boats.
jack suddenly seriouse.
jack-me,father,bootstrap,the eunich,former commodor and jacky'll be making ashore..
gibbs-kate?alex and..
jack-I KNOW who else is aboard and I KNOW who I'll be needing there..
camera cuts to the long boat as will and norri are rowing and jack stands looking on to shore.
cuts to streets of england.
victoria and who seems to be julian follow liz threw the streets. she pulls them back to a wall holding her fingers to her lips as a guard walks by then they start making way again.
back to the boats.
jack(whispers)-when there the whelp and jacky and I'll be on a quest to find the eunich who knows what quest we'll need be fulfilling to find and or win lizzie back savvy?
bootstarp-what of the rest of us?
jack(looking at everyone like their stupid) rum!(he exclaims like it was a fact)

confusing at the end...but good.especially the kiss! 😄 do you go on???

During that Lizzie, Vicky and Julian arrive at the boats.

Jack: Lizzie!! So nice to see you again.

Liz: Well, Mr. Sparrow, it’s still Miss Swann.

Jack: But if I remember correctly, which is in fact, at the moment at bit difficult, then we still are married! So, it’s Miss Sparrow, aye?

Victoria: So, then this is guy of whom you are pregnant?

The whole crew looks from Liz to Jack and from Jack to Liz. Only Jacky is smiling. And Liz glances angryly at Vicky.

Jacky: (to Julian) You should not tell your dearie a secret, I think she can’t keep it on her own.

Will (to Liz): Is it true?

Jack: Do you believe she’s just joking, of course you have never been as smart as she, but in fact I thought you were a bit more smarter then I thought you would be.

There are footsteps heard in the street.

Liz: I think we should go aboard, it’s not a good place to talk. (to herself) It’s such a pity that I can’t drink rum till I pass out, it would be much easier.

Jack: (who has heard that) Well, I’m glad you’re back....I knew you need your freedom.

Liz: Only because I go on your ship, I’ll not forgive you anything! And because of you I’m pregnant so you have to leave me your cabin.

Jack: Well, I thought we could use it like before.

Liz: Mr. Sparrow, like I said, I’ll not forgive you.

Jack: But a bit it’s your fault, too. You wanted it as much I as wanted to want you to want me, aye? So who do you want to claim for that you're pregnant?

Liz doesn’t answer, she knew he was right! The boats arrive the Pearl.